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Need Your Review - Rate My Landing Page

by Easy Cash
9 replies
Hello There,

Do you have some time to rate my landing page?

If you do, thanks for your comments.

Here is the link.

Easy Cash Passive Income
#landing #page #rate #review
  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    Above the fold you need to provide one compelling
    reason (at least one) for the visitor to take an action.

    This copy doesn't do that. It goes nowhere - though
    you do get a little more focused lower on the page,
    many visitors won't realize there is more to your letter.

    Since you promise very little in terms of what your plan
    is or isn't (aside from making claims that making money
    online is hard, but you solved the problem, and implying
    you have nothing to sell) will it surprise you to get
    only vague interest from readers?

    Get specific.
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  • Profile picture of the author Kevin Lam
    Hi Gerry,

    I think the headline is very weak. The content itself isn't very interesting. If you get rid of about 50% of the content (mainly the middle section) then it will much better. There's just too much unnecessary fluff.

    The whole point of a landing page like yours is to generate leads. To do that you must be:

    1) precise - target exactly who you want to do business with and what you can provide them
    2) mysterious - give them just enough bait to lure them into submitting their info

    They don't need to hear an entire story, see a bunch of empty space between paragraphs, and see so many bold text. Try to hold back on that. Nearly 50% of your content is bold or red. You want them to concentrate on specific words/phrases, not everything.
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  • Profile picture of the author Easy Cash
    Thanks for the feedback.

    The visitors are a bit of a mixture of targeted and untargeted from what I can gather from my stats.

    They are looking for easy cash solutions.

    I think the passive income approach is slightly off.

    I will certainly think a bit more about what would make them want to find out more.

    Potentially, I think a majority of them are non-technical people - hence the no experience required angle.

    Currently the optin rate is quite low.

    I also have a problem with the Get Response Form - it creates a big white space that I cannot get rid of below the optin box - still have to work on that one.
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  • Profile picture of the author suraja
    Are you using frame there? I see the browser scroll not fit
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  • Profile picture of the author primediart
    Opt-in boxes are just not so captivating for people to just fill in the details. Some good points like usage of texts but graphically not so appealing
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  • Profile picture of the author vistad
    Just a small thing. You are taking the persons email ID and name in the first place. In the second place why don't you just ask for a yes/no answer?
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  • Profile picture of the author fancyrae
    Gerry,

    This is a squeeze / landing page. Therefore, it needs copy that is short and to the point. A headline with no more than two paragraphs -- or headline with bullet points.
    Opt-in box. That's it.

    A couple other things: the "disclaimers" and Get Response info might convince them it's not worth the risk. The value should be higher, at least $14.

    Just my two cents.
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  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    " Online Cash Pie" - I love it! I chuckled when
    I saw this.

    I don't know if it's a good selling phrase but the
    mental image is great.
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  • Profile picture of the author Easy Cash
    Thanks for the feedback.

    I tried to make it more direct and to the point.

    I will test a few headings and versions.

    The optin rate seems to be going down............ ) :
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