Critique my 'non-classical' copy
I've been a huge lurker in the copywriting section and I honestly think this might be the most helpful subforum in WF and I hope to get some helpful, constructive criticism here, as I've read so much useful stuff on here, also got a copy of a few copywriting courses/books that I'm still going through.
The aim: for the person to take action and register a website.
Target audience: No professional clientele, just regular people who are tired of their jobs and are just starting to wander off the idea to start making money online, much like newcomers on WF.
the page: Creating A Website in 3 Steps - Found Success
(It's supposed to be a convincing tutorial. The tutorial is designed to be very user-friendly and basic)
This might be a bit cluttered, should possibly cut this down to a smaller size, but I wanted to address the most common questions.
Also you might have had noticed I didn't take the traditional route which you usually see in sales-pages, because I'm not trying to sell a product, no focus in over-selling or over-convincing; instead I hope to motivate the person to take action.
I realize this might get some negative feedback here, it's pretty unusual but lets see what you guys got to say.
+ a bonus would be to critique my signature copy(I think it's very good, btw), also, as in it's related to the original critiqued page.
Thank you in advance and I truly appreciate your time to respond to this
/EDIT: New version
Updated Version 2.0 Copy
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