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Can you help me spruce up my headline?

by Ronnie Wright
6 replies
Here is the headline--
Top 3 Mistakes People Make When Planning For A Wedding
And How To Avoid Them



Any suggestions would be great.


Thanks
#headline #spruce
  • Profile picture of the author DavidG
    PLUS: How to avoid them...

    I think it's worth a test. You just need a good sub-head explaining a bit.
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    • Profile picture of the author Ronnie Wright
      Originally Posted by DavidG View Post

      PLUS: How to avoid them...

      I think it's worth a test. You just need a good sub-head explaining a bit.

      Thanks DG.
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  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    Originally Posted by Ronnie Wright View Post

    Here is the headline--
    Top 3 Mistakes People Make When Planning For A Wedding
    And How To Avoid Them

    Any suggestions would be great.

    Thanks
    Structurally, now that you've added "And How To Avoid Them" it's a good headline.

    But the headline is drowning in the sea of sameness.

    I searched Google for Top 3 Mistakes People Make When Planning For A Wedding and got back 5,310,000 results.

    John's suggestion is excellent. Very good differentiation.

    Alex
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