Please, critique my sales page

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Please, critique landing page. Let me know what to do to increase sales conversion. This copy was written by an expert copy writer.

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  • Profile picture of the author Alex Cohen
    The header graphic is not congruent with your message. Plus, it takes up too much real estate (vertically) on the page.

    The tagline, "Maximizing Your Personal And Christian Life" is too abstract. "Helping You Love Your Neighbor As Yourself" or something else more specific would be better.

    The headline is poor. Grab the reader's attention with a meaningful benefit. Something like "Best Selling Author Jimi Akanbi Shows You How To Eliminate Jealousy, Hatred and Pride... And Fulfill God's Purpose For Your Life" would be good.

    I'd also increase the font size of the body text. You may have young, strong eyes but a lot of people on the Internet don't.

    That's for starters.

    Alex
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  • Yes, the font size makes it almost impossible to read.

    I noticed the books have lots of 5 star reviews, a good technique is to use the best "comments" in the copy.

    Shawn recently posted this which explains how to do it.

    http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...ur-market.html

    Make sure you watch the Jay Abraham and Robert Stover videos (the links are on thread 3).


    Steve
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