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What do you think of my salesletter

by WilsonA
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  • Profile picture of the author thenoob
    I think you need to smooth the design so far. For this type of niche, visual impression is important.Good luck!
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    • Profile picture of the author Ronwag
      Hi Wilson; I like your niche, it's fresh and not over used. I will offer some editing comments these sentences are awkward and need some polishing, in my opinion.

      * breakthrough guide that you're about to learn about, (perhaps "that you're going to learn about"

      *Regardless of if you find out that your partner is cheating, it's devastating to learn that you're not the one and only of your one and only.

      (If you do find out that your partner is cheating, learning that you're not the one and only for your one and only can be devastating.)

      I think you can shorten the pain, agony and suffering part, it's a little too much.

      * The one person you must have on your side to be able to really catch a cheating spouse - if you don't have person, things would be a lot harder for you (this person)

      How to identify who the person is your spouse is cheating with, is it the co-worker or the mistress? there are many other people it could be (or a mistress?)

      I guess these are all I have room to comment on, Wilson

      Good luck, I think you may have a real winner. Of course advertising and promotion are vital to the success of the book.

      Ron
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      • Profile picture of the author Aj Wilson
        Hey bro,

        I just saw "Wilson" and thought I'd reply
        If you really wanna blow your conversions through the roof...

        I'd split test 2 different squeeze pages and split the target audiences into...

        Males and Females.

        A lot of work, I know, but only you can decide that based on your own research and metrics.

        But it'll be a hell of a lot easier to penerate your prospects mind...

        "How to catch your cheating wife with that other man, you know she's seeing... but denys it straight to your face"...

        You can play on the "he's" and "she's" seeing the other man or woman type thing, in your presale copy.

        So you could still have that sales page, just make 2 more seperate landing pages, and run your advertising through those for split-testing.

        Nice clean look btw.
        all the best!
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  • Profile picture of the author TajwarAlexander
    You might want to remove the link buttons that you have at the top of the page and also the fine print that shows the website name above your title...both would be kinda distracting to me..Also, if you have a link that says ORDER on the very top of the page then they already have a wall up because they know they are being sold to.
    You want to talk to them..inform them of the problem they are having...remind them...and then let them know you have the solution. Then let them know the benefits of using your solution.

    Hope that helps
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