Last minute copy critique

Blogging For Bucks. Plus get my secrets to earning $987 with only 2 days of work.



Hello, hope your summer went well,



Next Thursday there will be a workshop on how to make money from blogging. Blogging is still one of the best ways to earn money online.


It is: simple to setup, the search engines love it, and it can be 100% white hate. Whether you have you on blog and looking to make more money with it OR if you don't have a blog and just what to earn money online, this workshop is for you.




This workshop will include:


How to setup a word press blog


What keywords to pick for search engine


How to find content


How to create your own content


What affilate programs to choose


Creating ads from word press


What wordpress plugins are a must


What to track for with anaytlics




Lastly, you will get my 3 secrets on how I made $987 with only 2 days of work. (starting the blog and only investing 2 days of work)



If you are ready to start earning or earn more money with blogs online, reserve your spot below. There will be a 10 person limit and the cost is $25.


The meeting will take place at the ABC restaurant,at 7:30 pm on Sept 23.
The group will be meeting in the back. Ask the host in the front if you can't find us.


You will be provide with handouts and a power point of the meeting.


When you do sign up could you post below or message me if you:


have your own blog and are looking to earn more with it


OR if you are looking to start a blog from scratch. This will give me a better idea on how I can help you.

Firstly, I want to know WHO are you emailing?

Are these people who know and have a relationship with you?

Are these people who have put their hands up for an interesting making money with blogging?

Are they local people (it would seem so...)

Here's my problems with it...

The first bit... "Blogging for bucks" makes me think you're not going to earn a lot of money.

Now, I am British, so maybe I'm linking this with "working for pennies"... but I've only ever heard people use the word 'bucks' preceded by 'big'.

Your claim of $987 in 2 days, is unbelievable. You should try to back it up early on in your text.

Pointless, if you don't already have a relationship with these people.

Do people really believe that claim? I know you CAN make money with it... but to me it's long-winded and tricky.

Proof would be good for me.

Doesn't make sense and spelling errors.

The benefit here is making money with the blog... and should be backed with the 1) simple set up, 2) search engine friendly, and 3) 100% white hat (not "can be" - we all know what Google do to blackhatters).

Your bullets are dull and don't suck me in...

Try making them something like...

"How to find red-hot content which grabs your readers eye-balls and forces them to read every single word..."

Not the actual copy but you get the idea...

This is what I care about! This is the promise you made in the subject line... Why's it hiding away down here? Shy like a bunny-wabbit.

It's a weak CTA... and everything on from here is a bit drab and dull.

Tell me how I'm going to benefit... build value and then ask me to sign up.



If you answer my questions at the top of this post, everyone will be able to help you more.

Chris

"The Baby-Faced Assassin"