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Which title of these 2 would you choose for ur pitch email ?

by Egyfitness
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I am selling a fitness ebook via an Autoresponder.. which title YOU would be compelled to open ?

*New* The complete guide to losing fat and gaining muscle (thats the book title) or..

Just arrived , the book you have long been waiting for (piques curiosity ?)

Any other suggestions for this important email title ? It is the 4th email and I told them in the 3rd email that I am revealing a surprise tomorrow (4th email). I know I should be testing.. but why not all of us learn from your opinions ?
#choose #email #pitch #title
  • Profile picture of the author inkmerchant
    Out of the two options you presented I selected the first. The second feels very vague and not so compelling.

    I would absolutely recommend having your grammar double checked (e.g., there is no space before a comma).

    Here's some alternate subject line ideas you might want to consider:

    Brand New Guide Reveals the Secrets to Losing Fat and Gaining Muscle - Easily!

    Shocking Guide Exposes Hidden Techniques to Melt Fat and Grow Muscle

    What if You Were the First to Read This Life Changing Guide? Burn Fat and Gain Muscle Without the Hassle

    Just spitballing. Good luck with your list!
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    • Profile picture of the author Egyfitness
      Originally Posted by inkmerchant View Post

      Out of the two options you presented I selected the first. The second feels very vague and not so compelling.

      I would absolutely recommend having your grammar double checked (e.g., there is no space before a comma).

      Here's some alternate subject line ideas you might want to consider:

      Brand New Guide Reveals the Secrets to Losing Fat and Gaining Muscle - Easily!

      Shocking Guide Exposes Hidden Techniques to Melt Fat and Grow Muscle

      What if You Were the First to Read This Life Changing Guide? Burn Fat and Gain Muscle Without the Hassle

      Just spitballing. Good luck with your list!
      Thx a lot. The titles will be in Arabic anyways , so English grammar is irrelevant.
      Doesn't 43% of people open emails from mobile ? So the I think it is better to describe the product in the first few words ? The 3rd one will also be cropped on desktop
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  • Profile picture of the author waridea
    I think it is important that you create a short and catch headline. I would chose the first though.
    But you can consider these
    *new* 7 actionable ways to grow muscle and burn fat
    burn fat and grow muscle with x actionable steps
    burn fat quickly and grow muscle in x days
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  • Profile picture of the author Sarevok
    Split test them, and see which one wins.

    That's the only correct answer.



    (I voted the second one, because it invokes curiosity. The other one, specifies exactly what they get though. Both of them have their advantage, so the correct answer is to split test!).

    Just my humble $.02.
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