Please review my sales page

11 years ago

Originally Posted by accendo

I have a launch coming up at the end of January. I am working on two sales page. One text vs and another video version for testing purposes. I've finished the text version and would love some feedback.

Move Up With Mike's 30 Day Forex Challenge

Question:
!. The product is attendance to 4 Live Webinars
2. How to handle the money back guarantee. I was thinking it ends after the 1st session.

That's a pretty sweet page man, could do with a video though (my opinion)

One suggestion would be to place another order form just under the top header, so the user doesn't have to scroll all the way to the bottom to find the buy now button.

In regards to your money back guarantee, that depends on what payment processor you will be using.

If your taking the payments straight to PayPal, I would recommend the first 'webinar' to be free and if they like it they continue with the program. Perhaps instead of giving them a free webinar, give them a teaser webinar free or perhaps a free trial for 7 days then it auto-rebills at the product price.

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d0r1n 11 years ago

There are multiple headlines in your landing page, some being more important than others I think. I would try to prioritize them a little.

Let's take this one: "Stop wasting time reading useless ebooks" and after it you're explaining that you're a proven successful trader. This is way more important to know right from the start. Depending on your audience (and your source of traffic) this information about the who you are could make a big impact on the amount of people that will have the patience to read the whole copy.

I would completely dump the headline about the "opportunity" as I think most of the people in this niche already know (or should?) about what online trading is (unless you're targeting first time beginners, but I doubt it because in your very first headline you're asking them if the're already making an income online and them you continue with "if yes" etc etc etc).

And so on

Take a paper sheet and clearly think about who your targeting audience is, where exactly you will be promoting this offer, who are you as an expert/consultant/trader/etc, what exactly are you offering, and what's in in for them (your possible clients).

Also, taking a look at what John proposed I think it's a really good idea for give the first webinar for free, and maybe charge the other 3. Let people decide if what you're offering is what they're looking for, and always try to over-deliver and create good will.

I would test different versions of copy, different headlines, different approaches before I would test a text version vs a video one.

Just my humble opinion
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jamesie

11 years ago

good page but nothing stands out i would change the color and font of the script but good job

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Joshua Lowenthal

11 years ago

Originally Posted by fxstay

make it simpler

I agree with the above Warrior.

This page is very long, chopped up and somewhat confusing.

A-Z and nothing more. Make your points quick and fast. Tell them what they want to hear, and I don't mean hype and fluff. Tell them what it will do. NOW

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VictorDamasio

11 years ago

I liked it... Clean and simple.

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kursat

11 years ago

If you use smaller fonts and make the testimonial videos half the size it might work better. Just the headlines should be large and bold - this way your message that you want to get accross is filtered on the page.

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funtastic

11 years ago

That's cool. I like the blue ones...

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DanielleDeHann

11 years ago

I can't believe no one mentioned this.

This is HORRIBLE - "Are You Making A Extra Income Online? If you answered Yes, Stop what you're doing Now and claim your spot in a unique Forex Coaching Program from an active investor with a Proven Track Record of Trading The Forex Market ."

I'm not trying to pick on you or anything I'm just giving my honest opinion. As A customer I stopped reading right there.

If I'm making "an extra income online" why would I "stop what I'm doing now" to get involved in something I know nothing about from someone I've never heard of before.

Anyone who tells me that if I'm making "an extra income online" to "stop what I'm doing right now" is not worth being taught by in my opinion.

I would change it to something like...

"If you've tried everything and nothing worked"

Or

"Pennies From Adsense Don't Pay The Bills"

Or

"1 Clickbank Sale Per Month From Your 'Review Sites' Isn't Going To Let You Fire Your Boss"

Or something like that. I just don't know any successful person that would tell you to stop doing something that is working.

2 other things I just noticed...

You offer the price at $47 then 10 lines later it's $97. Either way, without even looking at your content, I think the price is very low. Some "Master Forex Trader" is going to take his time away from his trading platform to train, via webinars, some newbie person he don't even know? Doesn't sound right to me. Now, if you could build value a little more and put the price tag at $2,000 without changing the content, it would make much more sense to me as a customer. I can see an expert trader coaching me for 4 weeks for $2,000 but not for $97 or $47.

The other thing is that the most important part of your copy is at the bottom. You have to tell people that you tried and failed, and with THIS SYSTEM you've been successful. But you being successful isn't enough. Right after telling them that, hit them with testimonials showing that you aren't the only one. Your testimonials are at the bottom.

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keith88

11 years ago

I would definitely do a video bro to sum up just about everything you said on the page. Video is definitely going to increase conversions. People have short attention spans so you have to deliver your message quickly with sizzle. They wont spend too much time reading and reading. Give them what they want quickly and move them down the funnel.

I think you should get a little bit more white space too bro, lighten up the page a little more. There's alot of scrolling, if you can make the information concise and compact. DO that!!! Design looks great though brother.