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what do you think of my landing pages?

by RAJ Wells
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HI Guys


Can I get some brutal critique on my landing pages ?
no need for diplomacy

if they are terrible can you produce and example of one I should try to replicate that has worked for you

I dont think I really need to catch email addresses with this type of product?

Also IM about to start promoit a fat loss ebook on click bank what is the best way of capturing their emails should I have a full page they go to or a little pop up offering a free report of something?

Hoover F5914-900 SteamVac with Clean Surge

Melissa & Doug Deluxe Standing Easel

thanks a lot
#landing #pages
  • Profile picture of the author falcon_warrior
    Hey

    Your landing pages are great, sufficient content. I think you can work on the background colors a little though. Also, just capture so that you can tell them about promotions on other electronics (with your affiliate link of course).

    When capturing emails for weight loss, make a squeeze page (roughly same length of content as you landing pages) offering a free report, and having a popup increases the number of subscribers as well.

    Hope this helps

    Nicholas Chen
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  • Profile picture of the author Andy Crofford
    I think you have great content but the design is definitely lacking.

    Honestly, if I were doing a search for one of these products and clicked on your link I would close the site immediately. Update the design and I think you have a definite winner.
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  • Profile picture of the author thegoddessofeleven
    My only suggestion would be to make ALL of the pictures clickable. I didn't even notice the Amazon.com link off to the left and was confused when it seemed that the only way to get to the product was to click on the text at the bottom of the article (and below the fold).
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    • Profile picture of the author nebraska
      Originally Posted by thegoddessofeleven View Post

      My only suggestion would be to make ALL of the pictures clickable. I didn't even notice the Amazon.com link off to the left and was confused when it seemed that the only way to get to the product was to click on the text at the bottom of the article (and below the fold).
      The key to review sites is call to action. One of the best things I've learned in the last year is to tell them what you want them to do with a strong call to action. I learned it through the IPK course and it's gotten me to getting Amazon payments for the first time ever.
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    • Profile picture of the author Greg Jacobs
      Originally Posted by thegoddessofeleven View Post

      My only suggestion would be to make ALL of the pictures clickable..
      what she said. All pictures clickible.

      Make the header Clickible. Put anchor links in the text that are clickible.

      Put a big (clickible Call to Action above the Fold too.

      Click HERE TO LEARN MORE

      and then again at the bottom of the page.
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  • Profile picture of the author ryanzona
    Actually its not bad.

    Agree it needs more obvious links to product order page. The review itself seems honest and believeable - not like most phony review sites that are just shills. You may almost be too negative a bit about the steam vac, but its a serious looking site overall. These kind of sites do not need to be flashy, imo.
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    • Profile picture of the author Kevin AKA Hubcap
      The landing page for the easel had a totally different video play when I opened the page (which I couldn't stop).

      After that video finished, the correct video high lighting the easel started.

      If I were a customer I would have left.

      Other than that the pages are clean and as previously stated, make the pictures clickable.
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  • Profile picture of the author RAJ Wells
    thanks guys awsome
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  • Profile picture of the author RAJ Wells
    for the easal I swiped the video from i cant remember where . Is this a problem?

    In the middle of it says tenhottestlinks.com I know its not ideal but is it a real show stopper ?
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    • Profile picture of the author Kevin AKA Hubcap
      Originally Posted by RAJ Wells View Post

      for the easal I swiped the video from i cant remember where . Is this a problem?

      In the middle of it says tenhottestlinks.com I know its not ideal but is it a real show stopper ?
      It is if it plays an unrelated video. The actual video fro the product was good. What would make it better is if you had a video where you could highlight the strengths of the product.
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      • Profile picture of the author RAJ Wells
        yeah ill try and sort that out but im not gonna run into any legal issues for using someonelses video am I ?
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  • Profile picture of the author Kevin AKA Hubcap
    Originally Posted by The Leader View Post

    Is Melissa & Doug a brand name thats popular?
    My kids love their puzzles.
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  • Profile picture of the author KPKP
    Great and useful content and nice overall design. I agree with making all of the images clickable - that will increase your conversion rate. I would also work on better colors - not sure what would work better but it need to 'pop' a little more. As far as the video, I agree with illustrating the product strengths more as well and maybe a voice-over with the music.
    Nice job - I know how much effort you've put into this!
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  • Profile picture of the author activetrader
    Looks great
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  • Profile picture of the author Truffle
    they look good in my opinion, only the links at the bottom for more reviews and the amazon links were a bit hard to find

    change that maybe?

    greetz,
    jobic
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  • Profile picture of the author breaker
    Yeah, the background color is not doing anything for me.

    Also I don't like the color of the headline text (forest green)... I think black would be better.

    Also, it does sound like a not so good steamer/cleaner.... made me think, "there's got to be a better alternative". I think what you put in bullets #s1 and 2 would be fine somewhere in the middle. Start positive, then tell your tips and real world experience/comments in the middle, then finish with a strong statement as to why one should by this product.

    With regards to the easel... all looks good (except the color - see above) and I personally didn't like the music from the video (but it could just be me)

    Hope this helps!
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