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Looking for someone to provide constructive criticism?

by chilly731
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Hello everyone,

This is my first post on WF, so excuse me if I'm not supposed to be doing this (the rules didn't to say anything against this), but I would like people to help me out with the design of my squeeze page: Internet Millionaire Mindset - Discover The True Mentality of Making Money Online

This is my first time creating one myself on Photoshop, and I recognize it's poorly done (before this, I've always been doing other things in IM, nothing that required squeeze pages).

It's launching on Nov. 21st, so I'm trying to edit whatever I can for a higher conversion rate...any help from the IM experts would be highly appreciated!

Thanks in advance
#constructive #conversion #criticism #design #internet marketing #landing page #provide #squeeze page
  • Profile picture of the author Terrance01
    Not a bad ad. In my opinion...the orange background detracts from your message. Its too "in your face". I believe that blue has been established as a relaxing color that will not detract from your message. Also, people like videos...consider making and including a short video. The price point is pretty high...make sure you can deliver value for money.


    If you would like me to review your product and provide a testimonial for launch please let me know. If I like it, I will consider sharing it with my list.


    Cheers,
    -Terrance
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    • Profile picture of the author chilly731
      Hello Terrance,

      Thank you for your quick reply, I've changed the background.

      Actually my price used to be cheaper and I've had students contact me personally advising me to raise the price (I sell through Udemy as well, that's how), and $27 turned out to be to be optimal.

      However, I would like you to kindly tell me what you think it's worth after watching it; would I be able to privately message you to provide you with a review copy?

      Thanks!
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    • Profile picture of the author chilly731
      Also, I forgot to mention, sorry, the video is at the top of the page. Would you advise that I turn on autoplay, or...?
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  • Profile picture of the author Raydal
    The text seems to all be out of focus (like a scan of a picture) and it's
    best if you just drop the background altogether--it's too distracting.
    The page needs to appear sharper and cleaner, just for a better first
    appearance.

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  • Profile picture of the author aaaa33030
    I think that the video should be left as it is, that is with autoplay turned off.
    Autoplay videos can sometimes be a distraction from reading the whole sales letter especially if it is so far away from the buy now button
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    • Profile picture of the author chilly731
      Thanks for the replies Ray and aaaa33030, I'll be sure to fix these areas of issue as soon as possible!

      What about the wording itself, etc?
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  • Profile picture of the author jezter6
    "It's not a get rich quick...."

    but "Imagine raking in thousand of dollars per month after just putting in one 8 hour day a year and a half ago"

    Those two do not compute.

    As with most IM ugly sales pages like the template you've got - you're looking for suckers and idiots.

    You don't say what the product is. You don't even say what it does other than apparently makes you thousands of dollars a month without any work.

    Only an idiot would waste money on it.
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    • Profile picture of the author chilly731
      Thanks for the honesty jezter6 (could be a little less rude but regardless).

      These are actually numbers from my experience, but I see it from your point of view, I have to change the wording to avoid "false marketing"; thanks!
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    • Profile picture of the author Terrance01
      Originally Posted by jezter6 View Post

      "It's not a get rich quick...."

      but "Imagine raking in thousand of dollars per month after just putting in one 8 hour day a year and a half ago"

      Those two do not compute.

      As with most IM ugly sales pages like the template you've got - you're looking for suckers and idiots.

      You don't say what the product is. You don't even say what it does other than apparently makes you thousands of dollars a month without any work.

      Only an idiot would waste money on it.


      A Bit Harsh Jester... I think he put together a nice product. Needs a little polish here and there....but its viable. I have spent money on information not nearly as helpful. I don't believe I am a sucker or idiot. You are only those things if you don't learn from your experiences.


      Stick to your guns...refine your approach and product.
      Don't let idiots steal your dream.


      Cheers,
      -Terrance
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