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The video runs way too fast. There's not enough time to read much of the text. I went through it twice and have no idea what you're selling. The music is suggestive of a nursery school or a kid's outing. You might improve it some with a voiceover but that's questionable.

I'd suggest you start over from scratch and get a professional video done. This isn't cutting it. Not trying to be mean, just keeping it real.

As to what has already been said, you don't want to be using a youtube embedded video on your salespage. Loses credibility and trust and is less than professional. Not to mention it's a traffic leak.

Also, seems odd, like the entire background of your page is linked to the payment link.

Video is way too fast but even if you break it down as suggested by the previous post, it still does not give me enough incentive to buy it, at whatever price you are offering it. You state a lot of benefits but provide little, if any, information about what I am buying.

Dude, this was a bad LP.
The video is without voice over, really? Ceremony music? no info, just a video and VERY BAD textual call to action.

Make another LP with a good video. Voice over is a must.

Put some info out their, an email capture form, and a good button. and you're good to go.

So the link now redirects. Since you just posted this quite recently, probably making any one reading this thread think that now your trying to pull something?

As I've already said, using a youtube video is not a good idea. It's a huge traffic leak and makes the presentation less than trustworthy. Unless you have unlimited traffic, you don't have to worry about people leaving?

Video is too fast, most people won't get to read everything.

I've watched the video a couple times and I have little idea what it is. I am guessing it's an ebook? Regular Book? It's drugs? It's both? Can any one do it? Do I need to spend more money?

SO many questions. Very confusing if you ask me.

Lack-luster text copy.

"Smart Drug Manifesto" .... And? So what? Says nothing. Your drugs? Drugs I buy in the store? OTC? Prescription?

"Get The Edge Over Life You Always Deserved!" How? Why?

"Plus Free Anti-Aging (Live Forever) Bonuses!" I am no lawyer, but I don't think you can tell any one they can live forever, not possible. Asking for trouble?

"Smart Drug Manifesto Free Newsletter" Why?

Sorry to be negative, you asked. And of course just my opinions Unless you want me to be nice, say it's nice when it's not, which will be of no help.

If I were a subscriber who had bought from you before and knew your information to be valuable and well worth the price, I would likely purchase it if it was something I wanted. But... I don't know you.

If you want my dollars, you would be better off using a sales letter that educates, perhaps solves a few common ailments (for proof), advising me of others and offer a viable solution/treatment/ etc....

Let me give you an example. Bob Serling offers show you how to make more money by licensing your Intellectual Property. You can see his sales letter here: Profit Alchemy

First, he shows you what he was able to achieve using this idea, and he tells you how he did it. Then he proceeds to give you other examples -- further proof. Then he gives you the steps you will go through to be able to achieve similar results. Then he tells you exactly how the program is delivered and what you can expect. Even how he is going to offer support after the purchase. There isn't anything to guess about. In the other examples. he talks about... he has proven he has the qualifications and the expertise to make this happen for you.

In your sales page, it leaves a lot of questions unanswered. Who are you? What qualifications do you have to advise me on my health? Do you have a proven track record? Do you have examples? Are there any specific medical conditions this book is written about? Is if for young people in the form of preventative maintenance? Is it for seniors? Any chance of drug interactions? What if I have a question? How do you stand behind this product?

The page looks fine, but the video doesn't offer anything, and the small amount of text underneath of it just doesn't cut it.

I'm not saying this to be mean -- plus I've given you a good example of what you can do to create a sales page that sells. Hopefully you see this message as helpful as it is intended to be.

Regards,
Steve MacLellan

Video runs very fast. It will be difficult for any user to read the content in video. Moreover, the location where you placed video is not right. along with this, I analyzed that the content is not managed properly , you also need to work on this if you want y\user to get converted.

I didn't watch the video. But the sales copy leaves a lot to be desired. It doesn't really tell you much, and it creates zero urgency to buy. I'd start by writing a better copy, explaining the benefits, reformatting (colors, bulletins, images, etc)

It basically says buy this product and I'll send you a list of other products you should buy in the last paragraph. Which, I'm assuming, are affiliate products. You'd likely be better off giving away some of what's contained in the eBook as an opt-in then creating a slow funnel that introduces and hypes the other products.

Then as others have said, the formatting looks weird and off center.

I could be wrong, but I doubt the average person looks for affiliate links or even thinks about it. In my opinion, the major issue is that the design and sales pitch are subpar. It reads like a student who's teacher have them an assignment to write a 1000 word essay and there's 750 words of fluff, separated into paragraphs, in black and white.

It lacks the call to action, urgency to buy, visual stimulation, etc that will keep visitors awake and eager to buy.

I sent you an email through your inbox on the forum. If you don't get it, let me know :-)

Regards,
Steve

Model other clickbank best seller videos..

1) Listen to them
2) Transcript
3) Change to match your product

Or use services like..

VideoScript.co
EasyVSL

for video scripts and video sales letters.

Also, I have an amazing report on high-converting sales letters.
Private message me, and I'll send it over to you for free.

Hope this helps

Your sales video doesn't have the right flow and sequential sales script of other sales videos.

Nice animations on your video..

Keep improving and testing your video/

Yeah, it is kinda expensive however considering it would be worth a try and none of succesfull businesses start by investing $0. You might want to check this website: Chatsmith Online| Live Chat Agent for your Websites for they offer a cheap price in having a customer rep. for businesses.

I've been following this thread for some time now and while the site's come a long way now, I still can't get a grip on what Smart Drugs are. I know that the manifesto is an ebook but what are these smart drugs?

And the video isn't fully voiced over, at least not last time I saw it. Only having short burst of voice overs makes i even harder to watch since I have to listen to what the voice says and then lose track of the reading.If you have a voice over from the beginning saying exactly what the text says it won't be confusing.

Just my two cents.

The problem is that your sales page sucks. I read through half of it before I realized you were selling an ebook about drugs instead of selling the drugs themselves. The copy is also really bad. Some of the sentences aren't even grammatically correct, and the first headline promising a girlfriend and straight A's sounds like a complete scam.

In short: Everything about your page is bad. Sorry, but you need to find a guide on how to write a real sales page, and follow it closely. If I had to sell your product, I would scrap the entire sales page and start again from nothing.

Edit: Here, I would recommend you use this guide on writing a sales page. It's an entire sales page itself but written in a way to guide you to write your own sales page. It appears to be written by Paul Myers, the guy that (I believe?) founded the Warrior Forum. So it's probably a good place to start.