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9 years ago

I think it looks alright.

It is very simple and straight to the point. THe colors are also nice and welcoming. Not too hard on the eyes.

You might want to play around with your ad copy a little bit more. I would recommend you to do some split testing and see what message converts the best.

You get what I mean?

Keep up the great work!

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cheongheng 9 years ago

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megamind22

9 years ago

Originally Posted by FreedomBlogger

I think it looks alright.

It is very simple and straight to the point. THe colors are also nice and welcoming. Not too hard on the eyes.

You might want to play around with your ad copy a little bit more. I would recommend you to do some split testing and see what message converts the best.

You get what I mean?

Keep up the great work!

Cheers!

I couldnt agree with you more FreedomBlogger. But I will suggest you do 2 - 3 variation test them to see which converts best there you'll be able to determine the best one to use for your future campaigns.

Hope that helps

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rachelamitsharan

9 years ago

This looks good. A brief page with a clear call to action (give their email and get the guide) is the way to go. I like the colors used too. Here are a few suggestions for you to consider.

1) Look at the title of your guide. Do you want to say something like "Dummy Proof Approach To Creating An Online Business" ?

2) You may want to add a few bullet points highlighting what they are going to see in the guide. Not too wordy but may help to excite the subscribers.

3) Do you have an attractive high quality cover to the give-away guide? You may consider including a picture of the cover on the page. A visual picture is known to increase subscriber rates.

4) Try to create multiple pages and even use different give-aways. This may help you appeal to different preferences of your target market.

Let us know how it goes. All the best!

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Originally Posted by rachelamitsharan

This looks good. A brief page with a clear call to action (give their email and get the guide) is the way to go. I like the colors used too. Here are a few suggestions for you to consider.

1) Look at the title of your guide. Do you want to say something like "Dummy Proof Approach To Creating An Online Business" ?

2) You may want to add a few bullet points highlighting what they are going to see in the guide. Not too wordy but may help to excite the subscribers.

3) Do you have an attractive high quality cover to the give-away guide? You may consider including a picture of the cover on the page. A visual picture is known to increase subscriber rates.

4) Try to create multiple pages and even use different give-aways. This may help you appeal to different preferences of your target market.

Let us know how it goes. All the best!

Thanks for the pointers

I really appreciate it. Will take a look and think of what I can come up with

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Latoon Technologies 9 years ago

As a designer,I would suggest the heading in black and red as Brent also suggested with addition of changing the color of CTA to a bit lighter code of the yellow.

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ChrisBa

9 years ago

It looks decent, have you tried it yet?

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stackman

9 years ago

Seems OK but the wording seems a little awkward in English. For example, the phrase "newbies quit their jobs." Newbies at what? Why would newbies at anything quit jobs? The word "newbies" can be a bit condescending.

And why is the word USE capitalized and underlined? What the point of that? Maybe a better word would be "learn" -- not capitalized and not underlined.

And the sentence starting with "Dummy Proof .... I agree with one of the other answerers, insert the word "approach" after the word "proof."

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Originally Posted by stackman

Seems OK but the wording seems a little awkward in English. For example, the phrase "newbies quit their jobs." Newbies at what? Why would newbies at anything quit jobs? The word "newbies" can be a bit condescending.

And why is the word USE capitalized and underlined? What the point of that? Maybe a better word would be "learn" -- not capitalized and not underlined.

And the sentence starting with "Dummy Proof .... I agree with one of the other answerers, insert the word "approach" after the word "proof."

Thank you for the tips.. I will work on it.. Haha.. Good thing I checked here first

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Brent Stangel

9 years ago

I would lose the Blue headline and stick with Black and Red.

Add an image of your guide's cover.

2) You may want to add a few bullet points highlighting what they are going to see in the guide.

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kk075

9 years ago

I personally think it's pretty bad and has little chance of converting anything- why would anyone want to do what a newbie quitting his job did? And what's the "only today" supposed to mean? It's just not good English and it's a very weak, very misleading statement.

The same goes for the "Dummy Proof to Creating an Online Business". It doesn't make any sense and people know that it's a spam page.

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Originally Posted by kk075

I personally think it's pretty bad and has little chance of converting anything- why would anyone want to do what a newbie quitting his job did? And what's the "only today" supposed to mean? It's just not good English and it's a very weak, very misleading statement.

The same goes for the "Dummy Proof to Creating an Online Business". It doesn't make any sense and people know that it's a spam page.

Thank you for your honest feedback. I will try and play with the words a little bit

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Hi everyone,
Once again thank you for all your feedbacks, I really appreciate it. I have made changes based on some recommendations by you all, please have a look at again and tell me if this is better?

My web address is
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kk075

9 years ago

Originally Posted by cheongheng

Hi everyone,
Once again thank you for all your feedbacks, I really appreciate it. I have made changes based on some recommendations by you all, please have a look at again and tell me if this is better?

My web address is
Internet Money Revealed

Here's the thing- you're still focused on noobs and it's completely the wrong way to go.

Let me ask you something- two people walk in the room and both want to mentor you. One has made $15 million over the past ten years in internet marketing and the other just started last month....but he claims that he read a really good book. Which would you choose to mentor you?

Forget about the newbies/amateurs/beginners in your heading and give an impact statement about what the product actually does.

Additionally, I agree with others that the page is just too plain....you have far too much negative space and it makes it look like an ad (which it is, but you don't want it to look like that). For example, look what I did here in the span of about 45 seconds with a free WP plugin.

So there's definitely a lot of things you can do differently to tighten up the look/feel before actually sending anyone there.

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Richer

9 years ago

I think it looks good. Maybe the ebook above the the email sign up would look better.

Think would I opt in?

Also the ebook creating an online business 101 doesn't seem like I would be getting a strategy to copy as stated in title.

But great start its all about doing it.

Hope to help

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Randall Magwood

9 years ago

I can tell you're a newbie to this. You've made some truly rookie mistakes.

Right above the opt-in form it says: Enter your email below for instant access to a "Dummy Proof To Launching An Online Business" guide

And on the ebook cover it says: Creating an Online Business 101. Your ebook cover needs to say "Dummy Proof To Launching An Online Business".

Conflict. Fix that first, then tweak the layout of your squeeze page.

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Randall Magwood

I can tell you're a newbie to this. You've made some truly rookie mistakes.

Right above the opt-in form it says: Enter your email below for instant access to a "Dummy Proof To Launching An Online Business" guide

And on the ebook cover it says: Creating an Online Business 101. Your ebook cover needs to say "Dummy Proof To Launching An Online Business".

Conflict. Fix that first, then tweak the layout of your squeeze page.

Thank you

I have fixed it

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cheongheng

9 years ago

Thank you all for being so helpful

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JohnMcCabe 9 years ago

Just looked at what I'm guessing is the revised version.

You haven't said anything about what brings people to the landing page. Link in a blog post? Tweet? Paid ad? Using what copy/offer/tease?

The landing page does not exist in a vacuum. It's part of a process. What comes before will have a major influence on how well the landing page converts. Makes sure everything fits and flows.

Once you have that firmly in mind, it's time to start testing. I guarantee you, you probably won't hit the optimum combination right off the bat.

Over the years, there have been a lot of tests where my personal favorite, the one I was certain would be the killer, flopped. While the throw-in I used just to have something to test against turned out to be the clear winner.
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9 years ago

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