Site Critique -Rip It Apart Please...

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First I would like to say thank you for all the people in this form, everybody always offers up great a advice. I just put together a blog and sales page in the lawn care industry, what I'm planning to do is get everything up and running before the season starts up again next year. The market research I've done shows the major months for the lawn care industry are between March through May.

I am still working on putting up a squeeze page to start collecting the names and e-mails of my visitors. After I have a squeeze page set up I am going to also put in opt in box on my blog as well. I am not planning any big launches with this product, I'm planning just to promote it though article marketing. I have 55 articles already written, but I had not submitted them yet. Although I do plan to over the next couple of weeks. All opinions are welcome the good, the bad any ugly, also I would like to know how I could improve the blog and sales page. thank you for everyone here at this form. Below are the links to my blog and sales page, please let me know what you think.


The link to my blog:

Commercial Lawn Care Equipment

Here is the link to the sales page:

Caring For Your Lawn

Please be as brutal as possible all opinions are welcome
#critique #rip #site
  • Profile picture of the author Raydal
    As a first impression reaction I think that your graphics
    is stealing the attention away from your copy--the words.

    It's obvious that your graphic artist took some time to
    make you a pretty site but you don't want to wow people
    with your pictures but the words that do the selling.
    (EXCEPT you are selling graphics.)

    So why not a white background for the main text?
    Why green colored headlines?

    Your header graphic also takes up a lot of prime space.

    Again, that's a quick layout / first impression critique.

    -Ray Edwards
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  • Profile picture of the author Ross Bowring
    Only got time for the headline...

    My quick stab at a re-write...

    "The Secret To A Stunning Lawn Without Professional Help - It's Easier Than You Know And I Can Prove It..."

    Good luck.
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