Please review my sales copy

by margola 9 replies
Hi,
Would anyone be so nice and evaluate my sales copy?
Thanks.

http://www.recipesforhonduranfoodsinenglish.com
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  • Profile picture of the author Hamida Harland
    I'm not a copywriter so I can't help you but you'd probably get better response to this if you posted it in the copywriters section.
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    • Profile picture of the author dave.
      I'm not a copywriter either, but in my opinion it's not enough attention-grabbing. Your main headlines, benefits should be red, because blue don't really stand out from the blue background.
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    • Profile picture of the author margola
      Originally Posted by Hamida Pall View Post

      I'm not a copywriter so I can't help you but you'd probably get better response to this if you posted it in the copywriters section.
      Good suggestion. Any idea how can I move it there or should I just post second one?
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  • Profile picture of the author matthewd
    I am not the best copywriter either, but here are some things that came to my mind:

    Change your headline around a bit... make it something more like "How Anyone Can Bring the Exotic Tastes of Honduras Into Their Home with the Never Before Seen '111 Recipes for Honduran Foods'"

    That might not be the best, but try to pitch it as "Breakthrough" and "World Changing" information.

    Hit on the features of the book... not necessarily the features (recipes). What are some hardships that these people have faced? They can't find the recipes? They can't find the ingredients? Is it normally too hard to make?

    If things like that are the hardships, then focus on how the book will solve those problems; then tell them the features.
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    • Profile picture of the author rapidscc
      Hi!

      First, Congratz!

      It seems you found your niche already.

      About the copy, It is missing some graphics. an ebook jpg will be superb.
      Also the heading usually includes graphics also. Which will then usually contain the title.

      As for the title, I once heard that we should focus on the "You" that is viewing our page. You seemed to have outlined properly what the customer will get, as evident in the listed menu.

      I forgot if you included some freebies. Like maybe a free cooking report tip. There has been a lot of free reports roaming around lately.

      All in all, It's nice. Specially that you're working on it.
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      • Profile picture of the author margola
        Thank you for all the advises. Very useful.
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  • Profile picture of the author bettersocial
    I'm not a copywriter either, but perhaps a sample recipe to show how "easy" these recipes are would help...Honduran food sounds grotesquely difficult to reproduce at home, and a sample recipe might help convince the ones who think it to be too difficult..
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamie Iaconis
    Hi,

    I took a quick look and I see a couple things:

    1.) Definitely get a product image up there!
    2.) The listings of the recipes should be changed, maybe
    have them taking up both sides of the page, other than
    listing them straight down the one side!
    (It will look better and save space)

    HTH!

    Jamie
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  • Profile picture of the author edcen
    Maybe you have to try another options.....
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