Does anyone want to critique my site?

15 years ago

Add some good graphics that convey the meaning of your site's content. At this stage it looks a bit bland with just some text. Also add a good meaningful header, not like the one that's right now being shown on your website.

And most of all the main sales letter/index page content needs some attention.

I hope I was not too much negative in my critique.

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scrofford

15 years ago

Originally Posted by sahi

Add some good graphics that convey the meaning of your site's content. At this stage it looks a bit bland with just some text. Also add a good meaningful header, not like the one that's right now being shown on your website.

And most of all the main sales letter/index page content needs some attention.

I hope I was not too much negative in my critique.

Thanks so much! What kind of attention does the main sales/index page content need?

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scrofford

15 years ago

wow I thought that I would get more response than this! I really need some help making improvements...I thought people liked to help around here!

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HarryWatson00

15 years ago

Sorry Steve, just saw the post. I'd be willing to help. First off, you picked a smart way to post your content, if you're trying to sell something. Did you just launch the site?

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scrofford

15 years ago

Originally Posted by HarryWatson00

Sorry Steve, just saw the post. I'd be willing to help. First off, you picked a smart way to post your content, if you're trying to sell something. Did you just launch the site?

Thanks much! The site is about a month and a half old. I thought that building that way would probably be the best.

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HomeBasedBusinessPLR 15 years ago

I would do something to break up the text a little bit. Either with graphics or by highlighting or making some text bigger.

Just my opinion
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rockgold

15 years ago

I liked your site just fine but I would lose the yellow background under the text on the top left (red letters). You have built a fine capture page and I could learn from it as I am in Maverick Money Makers also. You have a few links to provide value too and that could retain customers browsing your page.

Rocky McDaniel

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rockgold

15 years ago

I just noticed on your Getting Started With Internet Marketing page the text is a little too close to your opt in box on the left and it looks crowded. I would go in dreamweaver and fix that. Just a suggestion.

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mghowell

15 years ago

Just off the top of my head, I would move the optin to the top right (I read a study somewhere that you will get more optin's than on the left). Also you might want to try some shawdows on the border or just add a border of some kind. Its simple like it should be, but just lacking the look a little.

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HarryWatson00

15 years ago

The only thing I would say now is start a link building campaign, and start trying to get your testimonials built other than that, your site will work just fine. You won't know how your conversions will do until you post your products. I would say just publish as much content as possible to get you started and build links. You'll be fine other than that.

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BeachCruzer

15 years ago

Hi Steve:

Okay, here are my two cents...

1) I'm sure you've heard the phrase, you don't have a second chance to make a first impression. The very first thing I noticed was your site's header which is the first site element everyone is going to see. I would recommend you visit the WSO section or other areas within the forum to get a professional header developed.

2) It looks like a sales letter and as such, place photo of yourself. It humanizes your pitch.

3) Always stress benefits why someone needs to opt-in to your list.

4) Avoid negative energy. In the 2nd paragraph, readers don't need to be reminded of "losing a job", etc. I would focus on a positive message. If anyone wants negative energy, all they have to do is turn on the news. The idea is to get them excited about what you can do for them.

5) Provide real testimonials on how others have benefited from your solutions. It can add serious credibility.

6) Make sure you practice what you preach. Example... it's hard to tell others how your solutions can help them if they have not already helped you. And if they have worked for you... provide them convincing evidence.

I hope I am not too brutal but you did use the term critique in your post.

Best of luck to you--

Michael Cruz

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Zachary R. Skinner

15 years ago

Here's my 2 suggestions:

1) Add some custom graphics to the site. The site as is is really lacking personality

2) Add a video element to the site. If you could shoot a video of you introducing people to the site that would be excellent but even just a slide show would be great

Thats my two cents...

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InternetMarketingIQ

15 years ago

I didn't read any of your content and neither will most people because your presentation is very boring.

You have 8 seconds to make a first impression as the cliche goes. So you need to work on that first impression or you won't pull people into your content.

Everyone is Best #1 or whatever. Means nothing. Actually sends people away.

A person should hit your site and know immediately THIS IS WHAT THE SITE IS ABOUT.

Hit this site: Make Money Online, Earn Money Online - Marketing Tips

What do you see?

Thats right... within 2 seconds you know this:

Learn how to make money online
Help from Professionals

This is the message you want your site to say.

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scrofford

15 years ago

Thanks everyone for your imput...I have a lot of things to do! I really appreciate all of your advice!

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scrofford

15 years ago

Ok I've made some significant changes if anyone would like to check it out...

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scrofford

15 years ago

Anybody? I sure appreciate the critiques....I want to do the best I can with this.

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scrofford

15 years ago

Ok well thanks to all that did give me critiques. I changed a lot on the site!

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Troy_Phillips 15 years ago

Originally Posted by scrofford

Ok well thanks to all that did give me critiques. I changed a lot on the site!

First ... congratulations on

1:> Starting your own site

2:> Having the guts to let the Warriors tear it apart

3:> Actually taking advice and changing some of the stuff people suggested

You will go far with this attitude .

Second ... realize that what I say is the gospel according to Troy . It doesn't mean I am right .

Ultimately .. this is your site . If you are happy with it and it is converting for you ... half the battle is won.

I would move the ar form to the right side . but I don't think this is as important as your bait . A free newsletter is not appealing to me .

While I might not be your target market , I do average around 200 new sigh ups a day . Now I don't do this from one page and not even in one niche . All my bait in every niche is giving away a secret that that niche is looking for .

One of my most productive give aways was not a secret but for the IM niche it was a free website with free hosting .

This was something that people were already paying for and now they could get it for free.

I would never mention the freebie in the top of my text . I would make sure the got to have freebie was in the top fold but The text would be compelling enough to get someone to scroll down.

A lot will tell you to get more graphics . I don't care as much about graphics . If the story line is compelling enough I don't want them looking at pictures , I want them believing they can't do without my product a little more with each sentence .

I am partial to a Georgia font but then what can you expect from a Ga. boy :-)

As I said this is just some suggestions . If nothing else it got you a new list member . Treat me nice ... I can be a stickler :-)
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