New and need some feedback

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Hello,

I have written an article in my blog and was wondering if someone would be so kind as to read it and see if it sounds alright. I would like some honest feedback.

I am trying to do some affiliate marketing and creating this review is my first attempt. I am also going to write a press release and send that out as well.

Any help would be greatly appreciated.

My email address is livelifeoneasystreet@yahoo.com if you would like reply.

Thanks so much for any help you are able to give.


Here is the link to the blog - Web Video Review
Paul
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  • Profile picture of the author Monetize
    Looks fine but if I were you I'd hurry up and register
    that domain name B4 it's too late.
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    • Profile picture of the author ptmueller
      thank you for the feedback - yes I am going to go get that domain name tomorrow - I have a few others that are available if that one isn't and they apply as well - again thank you.

      Paul
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  • Profile picture of the author Tom E
    Originally Posted by ptmueller View Post

    Hello,

    I have written an article in my blog and was wondering if someone would be so kind as to read it and see if it sounds alright. I would like some honest feedback.

    I am trying to do some affiliate marketing and creating this review is my first attempt. I am also going to write a press release and send that out as well.

    Any help would be greatly appreciated.

    My email address is livelifeoneasystreet@yahoo.com if you would like reply.

    Thanks so much for any help you are able to give.


    Here is the link to the blog - Web Video Review
    Paul
    A problem I see is the lack of keyword targeting. Your title is extremely long and very unlikely to rank high in either ezinearticles.com or google. You should do some keyword research, find one that has the right number for your beginning target, and then weave it in to get at least 2-3% keyword density. If you're not doing that, you can write all the articles you want, but they're not going to generate a lot of sales, because they will get lost in the ezinearticles/google shuffle of non-keyword-targeted articles.
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    • Profile picture of the author ptmueller
      thank you for the feedback as well gr8tocre8- I will work on the title and then using some better keywords in the article as well - I do appreciate your help.

      Paul
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