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please critique my video!

by AffiliateInABox1
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Hey Guys (& Girls!),

I`m getting prepared to do a pretty cool launch.

please let me know what you think of my video here: AffiliateInABox

Do you like it/sound ok/you understand it ok?

Thanks!

EDIT: I`ve fixed the voice -- so please try listening again if you already have and let me know what you think, thanks!

EDIT #2: Ok, I`ve pixellated just the face, as well as made the opt-in box more obvious. Please check it now, thanks!
#critique #video
  • Profile picture of the author JeffLam
    Sorry, but I really can't hear what you(or whomever is that person) are saying.

    Nice logo though, but the cutesy style doesn't really fit in with the "mysterious man" in the video theme. Don't think that will matter a lot though in terms of sales and all that, just my opinion.

    Nice simple squeeze page - perhaps you can have a 'box-like' graphic for the background behind the video and the text on the right.

    I also feel that the opt in box should be placed one on top of the other rather than side by side. Looks neater.
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  • Profile picture of the author clsimpson88
    Sorry really couldn't make out what was being said- once you get that sorted, th rest to me seems really good!
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  • Profile picture of the author AffiliateInABox1
    Hi!

    Thanks very much for the feedback thus far. Ive fixed the voice, so please try listening to it again and let me know how it sounds.

    Thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author spearce000
    I can hear the voice OK despite the heavy (presumably fake) accent. It's an interesting approach. The main problem I have with the video is the picture. I'm guessing you've made it look pixelated to go with the disguised voice, but the effect is making it look like something shot on a low resolution mobile phone. People may think "if this is an indication of the quality, I won't be buying" and the whole thing may backfire on you.

    Instead, try just pixelating the face, or blanking it out with a square of colour so it's obvious you're disguising the speaker's appearance.

    Alternatively, re-shoot it so you just see the speaker's shadow. PM me if you need advice on how to do this.

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  • Profile picture of the author Chris Stigson
    Like the first few posters said, the video is pretty neat, but I think it needs to have a bigger promise in it. Something you deliver to them. It was just "empty talk" in my opinion... I like the russian thing though And the opt-in form should be A LOT more visible, maybe arrows poitning to it or something.

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  • Profile picture of the author AffiliateInABox1
    OK, thanks for the feedback so far, great stuff! I\'ve now fixed the video so only the face is pixellated, as well as made the opt-in box more obvious. Please let me know what you think now, thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author AffiliateInABox1
    Hi Chris -- thanks -- what other changes would you make to the video/squeeze pages?

    As for the myterious character/look... yes, I started to realize that... I have a few ideas I want to go with... I`ll see what I can do about the theme... Any suggestions?
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    • Profile picture of the author Jill Carpenter
      I like the "I'm also not Russian"

      LOL

      It drops where the amount of money you make is supposed to come through. It did 2x for me. Also, you are missing some key elements that the video should answer.

      Who are you? ----> Super Affiliate
      What do you have? -----> You sort of answer this question, but I think you could do a better job of it.
      Why do I need it? ----------> Not answered.
      How can I get it? ---------> You should tell them to sign up. Don't rely on them to read anything on the page.

      "This site will be the ultimate free resource"


      This should really read This site is the ultimate free resource.

      "will be" sounds like you don't really have it together and there is no promise that you will.
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  • Profile picture of the author chebe21
    You should offer some quality content in exchange for the email...

    not just to to be notified when this product is released and available

    answer this question: "What's in there for me?"
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