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Antoher Newbie needs website critique

by simmo28
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Dnt want to advertise nothing or havnt got anything for sale so sorry if im not doing this right because i dont wanna get booted fromt he forum! so please forgive me if this is not allowed.

but i would like people to have a look at my blog and let me know what they think

Rags To Riches

As it says in the blog im a newbie to IM and im looking to Learn and Earn as much as possible in the next 12 months so if anyone can point me in the direction of some good WSO's that WORK I will be happy to try them out and review them and post my findings to my blog for the future newbies of IM to see what works and what does not!

Please give an honest opinion
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  • Profile picture of the author Steven Wagenheim
    Originally Posted by simmo28 View Post

    Dnt want to advertise nothing or havnt got anything for sale so sorry if im not doing this right because i dont wanna get booted fromt he forum! so please forgive me if this is not allowed.

    but i would like people to have a look at my blog and let me know what they think

    Rags To Riches

    As it says in the blog im a newbie to IM and im looking to Learn and Earn as much as possible in the next 12 months so if anyone can point me in the direction of some good WSO's that WORK I will be happy to try them out and review them and post my findings to my blog for the future newbies of IM to see what works and what does not!

    Please give an honest opinion

    Okay, nothing stands out. I don't see anything on that page that makes
    me want to read anything.

    None of your articles have eye catching titles. Heck, I don't even know
    what anything is about.

    As for the design, well, that's always a matter of taste. I personally
    think it's dull.

    If I were a visitor given a link to go there, I'd be gone in seconds.

    Two simple things.

    1. Brighten it up a bit. The theme is dull.

    2. Put nice big titles over the articles that are appealing. You might want
    to get a book on copywriting to help you with that.

    It appears you're trying to show other people how to make money.

    Question?

    How much have YOU made?

    If the answer is nothing, or not much...how are you REALLY going to show
    others?

    It might be something you might want to think about. There ARE niches
    besides "how to make money" where you don't have to have credibility to
    make sales.

    Anyway, that's my 2 cents.
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  • Profile picture of the author Neil Morgan
    I agree with everthing Steve said.

    His last point was the first thing I thought of.

    Also compare the number of times you've said "I" with the number of times you said "you". 3 times as many actually. I felt it was all me, me, me (ie you!).

    I want to know what's in it for me. End of.

    The copywriting needs proof-read - loads of mistakes such as incorrect use of "there" and "its" and "company's". While this may seem minor, I'm left feeling that the quality of the proposed product will be lacking.

    There's also an inconsistency with the number of these you'll be offering. One place says 50, another says 100.

    Welcome to the brutal world of a WF review

    Cheers,

    Neil
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  • Profile picture of the author RyanT
    nice blog! very well put together
    I like the layout and graphics.
    everything seems to flow...have you had good success with it?
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