Look at this please...

by globalbusiness 1 replies
Can you please give me your opinion on my website...especially the sales pitch on the first page...thank you.

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  • Profile picture of the author Don Schenk
    Wow! You've got a lot of stuff to offer in there.

    I have a few observations that came to mind immediately when I started to read your site.

    There is a reason newspapers and magazines are typeset with narrow columns... it make them easier to read and easier to keep eye flow from one line to the next.

    Your first paragraph is sooooo wide I had to scroll back and forth on my laptop computer to read it.

    There is also a reason for writing in short paragraphs. This too makes it easier to read. When people see a large gray blob of type they are less likely to read it.

    For example, if I take all the lines I have written in this reply to your post, and put them together into one paragraph, it looks like this: Wow! You've got a lot of stuff to offer in there. I have a few observations that came to mine immediately when I started to read your site. There is a reason newspapers and magazines are typeset with narrow columns... it make them easier to read and easier to keep eye flow from one line to the next. Your first paragraph is sooooo wide I had to scroll back and forth on my laptop computer to read it. There is also a reason for writing in short paragraphs. This too makes it easier to read. When people see a large gray blob of type they are less likely to read it.

    Make it easy on your reader's eyes by changing the width of that first paragraph and break it up into smaller pieces.

    The other thing that struck me right away was the value prices $300 for one $150 for others. It adds up to over $1,600.00 and I will get this all for only 10 bucks!

    Hmmm. If it seems too good to be true it probably is. So either the $10 is way too low, or the comparison "value" prices may need to be lower.

    Please take what I say with a grain of salt, because nobody knows anything for certain until it is tested. I might be way out in left field somewhere. You could split test those prices to see which works better.

    Don
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