Headline suggestions please...

by jestershaw 7 replies
I am inspired by another post I just read so I thought I would post a similar request. Can you suggest a headline that is better than:

"You will learn how to make $500 a month or more over and over"
...using my step by step GPT Riches guide!


Thanks
Shawn
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamie Iaconis
    Hi,

    Maybe...

    "I Wanna Show You How To Make At Least $500 A Month, Every Month"

    Jamie
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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    It seems a bit confusing to me. Do I learn over and over, or do I make $500 a month over and over? I understand the wish to include "You" in the headline, but for me, I think this sounds better. Just MHO.

    Learn to Make $500 a Month, Every Month!

    My next question is are YOU using this technique and making $500 every month?
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    • Profile picture of the author Peter Bestel
      I'm not keen on the word 'learn' in a headline. It implies too much effort and doesn't emphasise the benefit, just the work involved.

      You can make an extra $500 a month, every month - for ever !

      If you can prove an average monthly income, you'd be able to say something like:

      I make an extra $513 every single month - you can too !

      Little more believable IMO

      Peter
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      • Profile picture of the author zeurois
        If I can make it, you can make it
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        • Profile picture of the author David-JP
          Can you add some sort of curiosity or uniqueness to it?

          How this stay at home mom from Milwaukee makes an extra $539 a month doing something so simple it takes less than 1 hour a day to do.

          David
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          • Profile picture of the author USEO
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            I'm no expert but...

            Re your Headline:

            I'd drop the "angle" of this, and go for something like that.

            You need something totally different.

            My suggestion is straight off the cuff, but humour grabs... (it's then down to your next line of course...)

            I find you're angle same-old-same-old...

            Aaron
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      • Profile picture of the author jestershaw
        Thanks Peter,

        As always, your suggestions are great and I appreciate your feedback.

        Thanks
        Shawn

        Originally Posted by Peter Bestel View Post

        I'm not keen on the word 'learn' in a headline. It implies too much effort and doesn't emphasise the benefit, just the work involved.

        You can make an extra $500 a month, every month - for ever !

        If you can prove an average monthly income, you'd be able to say something like:

        I make an extra $513 every single month - you can too !

        Little more believable IMO

        Peter
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