Can you please review my landing page?

by Psnack

Posted: 14 years ago 17 replies

INTERNET MARKETING

Hello, I an new to affiliate marketing and before a few days I created my first website/landing page. So far I have 140 hops and zero sales. I would like to hear honest opinions from experienced affiliate marketers.

You can see my site on my signature.

Any suggestions / tips / advices are welcomed.

Thanks in advance

#landing #page #review

innocent07 Banned 14 years ago

- Heading should really be at the top
- Headline should be bigger
- Too much black at the top

- Page is a bit long for a landing page? they are meant to be mini pages, although yours could work!

This is similar to a sales page, the layout and size of it, landing pages are typically meant to be shorter
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Alexa Smith

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Psnack

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Alexa Smith

It's a little weird, Michael. (And it's too wide, even for my screen, and that's saying something). It's more or less a sales-page in format, layout and tone - but it links to another sales-page (the vendor's sales-page, obviously). Not trying to be rude or dismissive in any way, but I don't quite understand what you're trying to do with this "landing page" - it's not anything like what I perceive as a "landing-page".

Well, this is what I perceived as landing page. I was probably looking at sales pages of affiliate marketers. I created this page in order to optimize it with SEO techniques and drive traffic to the vendors page.

Originally Posted by Alexa Smith

If you'll excuse the observation, and this is personal opinion only, it's a product which I certainly wouldn't wish to be an affiliate for, myself ... but I'm trying not to let that influence my comments at all!

Well yes, but isn't that the case with most of Clickbanks products? I didn't knew what it is when I was choosing it, I just went to cb engine and chose the one that sells the most. Now it's too late to change because I spend the past 20 days creating and optimizing this site.

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- taffie 14 years ago
  
  Since you have been brave to ask for honest feedback, like Alexa has mentioned, you want to think of what exactly you want your landing page to do i.e just sale or tell people a little about your products and what you do etc. etc. Now you got a blog there as well?
  
  In my opinion, it looks mor like a review page, and if that's what you want it to be, I suggest you follow Richard and Alexa's suggestions. I think there are wy too many distractions on it.
  
  The other thing I would work on would be the colours, you want to learn a little about colour choices and think about whether they are really necessary on your page. Fonts are another, but there we go, I am sure you will get a lot of ideas here and all the best.
  
  For you to talk about sales, man, it may be a long way, depending on where you are advertising and how.
  
  Hope that helps a little.
  
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Richard Bachman 14 years ago

You may be better off writing a review page...like Alexa pointed out, it's basically a sales letter that then takes the target to another sales letter.

Plus, you need at least a thousand hits to get an accurate test.
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Delane Krause 14 years ago

Good job But to long to dark
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jbode

14 years ago

Dude keep the site simple... you don't need a big header (or any other distractions that would decrease sales)

Put a link clearly at the top of the page (consider using arrows to point to the link <<, >>)

Keep it short and only give information that will make them more interested in clicking the link

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shabit87

14 years ago

First off I think the bold font you use (the one with the greenish smear in the background) is awesome. I would, like many have already said, suggest you shorten it up a bit. Also have your testimonies further up. The header is a bit large, but I don't thats too big of a deal, guess you'd have to get more opinions on that and come to your own conclusion. I hope my 2 cents helps.

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Psnack

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Alexa Smith

Yes - I thought so too: I was really impressed by that and wondered how you did it. It could be great for a sales page. (But this, as observed above, isn't supposed to be a sales page!).

I did that with gimp. Google for "glossy text".

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arklove 14 years ago

i would delete the try... It does not install much confidence in your Satellite service

"I will try to inform you about a new and revolutionary PC satellite TV software, that let's you watch TV easily, quickly and most importantly...."

Also I feel over all the page is way too long just give a short summary of the benefits with bullet points at the top of the page. It is also handy to have a BUY NOW button at the top of the page on the right, it must be Above the Fold (so the buyer does not have to scroll down at all.)

Also make your headline larger font in red and Bold.
i found the grey background not very friendly...stick with a white background, In split testing i have found white backgrounds convert better...

Great otherwise a great start and looks like the service is a good one... all the best Ark
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dany1987r 14 years ago

the page is to long you got to get straight to the point and you should always have and eye catcher sometime that will grab the visitors attention you have just about 5 secs to do so before they click away have an Eye grabbing headline make the headline bigger
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pmarz 14 years ago

try putting your buy button above the fold & making your background in white
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- Andy Money 14 years ago
  
  Change your background to black and make the content of the sales letter white, trust me.
  
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David Raybould 14 years ago

Psnack-

Go to amazon and buy a couple
of books on copywriting.

Learn to write copy and your
hops will be desperate to buy
when they get to the vendor's
page.

There's a list of good copy books
in the copywriting forum.

-David Raybould
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AJHunter 14 years ago

Its to early to tell if it will work, put up a feedback window for your visitors and ask them how the site can be improved.
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