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I am not fluent in English, but I dare to fail.

by Raja Kamil
6 replies
I dare to fail.
Below are two videos, that I recorded to insert into sales letter.

Please comment, how can I improve.
The first video is spontaneous, the second video is transcripted first.

(I tested the first one into my sales letter, it make visitor stay longer than before. Will it be good sign or not? )

1. for EASqueeze.com

2. embed on fbmaniax.com

Other than video quality and sound, how can I improve and make it better?

One thing I realize is, my tone isn't "selling" tone.
Thanks
#dare #english #fail #fluent
  • Profile picture of the author PJ Harmsworth
    Less is more. You don't need to say too much, your sales page will do the talking.

    If your price is good and you deliver a good service/product, your reputation will grow and you will get lots of business.
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  • Profile picture of the author Scott Ames
    The accent doesn't bother me, the broken English doesn't bother me. The background noise does bother me, a lot.

    You don't have to be as smooth as Frank Kern. The honesty and the offer will sell if you have the thing that people need.
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    Success consists of going from failure to failure without loss of enthusiasm. -Winston Churchill

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    • Profile picture of the author Thinker1
      Record the message again where there is no background noise while keep it short and to the point. When you record make sure to look very confident and show that you believe in yourself and your product. I appreciate you stepping out and being yourself.
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