Hey Frank,

It seems to me like you're trying to get people to click through to buy games and Wii products from Gamestop.

This is not too bad for a first attempt but I personally see several things that you can do in order to make this website really sell.

First off, what I would do is change it up. Its too busy and I really don't know what your main goal is. You've got a banner ad up top which is distracting to the eye and slightly unrelated to the main content, then you've got many links for all types of different games.

A good webpage does just one thing and does it well. Like on this forum posting, the one thing it does good and well is to provide a place for you to get feedback on your landing page.

The one thing I would be doing in this market is to start out building a list. Take the content you have on your website, expand on it, throw in some more pictures and put it into a free report called "Nintendo Wii Revealed" or something like that.

Do a softsell on the report saying that you'll explain the Nintendo Wii from A-Z, tell them what the hottest games are, and get them really excited about it. Make it seem like that if they're in the market for a Wii, they simply have got to read this report.


Once they get on your email list you can then send them more Wii related content and affiliate links.

Right now, if a visitor comes to your site and leaves, they've gone into the internet mist forever. But, if you offer them a cool freebie like that report I was talking about, you get their emails and they can be marketed to again and again until they leave your list.

Here's some examples of good squeeze pages:

• Easy Unique Content
• :: How To Make A Small Fortune Online With Small Reports
• Example Of Squeeze Page – 2 | WP Spire

Not saying this is the best be-all-end-all way to do it, just telling you how I would do it.

Hope this helps,

-Claude

Honestly?...

I'm gonna be fairly brutal here...

Some might even say I'm going to be quite frank, Frank.


It's really bad.

It's got poor design, no direction and I am really confused as to what you want me to do on that page.

You need to decide if this a landing page, or an entry page to your review site.

It appears that you aren't quite sure what you want this site to be, do you want it to be a landing page?

If so, you need to trim it down a little and leave your visitors with only two options:

1) Perform your M.D.A

or

2) Leave

Don't throw banners and external links in their face. All this does is bleeds traffic. Give them very basic options and expect them to perform for you.

Your font is a bad choice. Choose something that is relatively easy to read, verdana or something like it.

That's just my initial thoughts after a few seconds on the site..

Having said that!

You put some effort in and made a great start, there is a lot to be said for that.... don't let my comments get you down, hopefully use them as fuel to power your vehicle!!

Peace

Jay

p.s. M.D.A = Most Desired Action... what do you want your visitors to do?... read a review?....opt-in to a list?... click to a sales page?....

Bad as hell (sorry for being honest).

Hi Frank. You have to start somewhere, so go back and tweak it.

Read it out loud as if you are talking to someone, and make it flow.

Sort out that punctuation and spelling. Give it more paragraphs. And a margin each side.

And then look at it again in a few more days.

All the best
bdeyes

The only constant in life is change

You could use some classy Graphics , esp an impact header
Text is too wide and too much the same
Use some color and some bold to make your points
Nice start... Keep on tweaking

That looked alot like my landing pages when i was first starting out. One thing that will really help is if you make the page seem more exciting somehow whether its more color or something its just to many words and to plain

Frank, I have to agree with Jay. When I first landed on the page I was very confused as well. Looking at it from a gamers perspective (which I am not and let us make that clear) it does not have much appeal. One of my daughters is a video game fanatic and I have seen some of the sites she visits (the parent in me does that) and they are much more attractive.

I think you should listen to the recommendations Jay has given you. I think there is way too much content (which from SEO perspective is good) but you need to have a better site set up.

I don't like the black background, also I think your page is too wide. It makes it harder for your visitors to read your website when their eyes need to travel too far across your monitor.

Your images are very ugly as well, i think you could find some better pictures to represent the different games. The pics are small and hard to see.

The page is just not very enticing or attractive, sorry dude, but you gotta do better.

Almost offtopic, but I think "How to Play Video Games" is far too broad for an article title. Get specific.

(Disclaimer: Not a gamer. But I am an EzineArticles author.)

Also, I've also noticed that articles at EZA get a handful of clicks as soon as they're published, then .... nothing. Bots, perhaps?

Well i am with Jay, that site is horrible - but dont let this put you off but take it as a chance to improve!

1) black border <--- who died?
2) images are TINY
3) way too much text
4) ?

Just too much to list. A user going on that site doesnt see a benefit at all. The typical gamer i am sure wouldnt like to go through all that text. And the site is WAY too wide.

I would take that content and put in on a WP sites - seriously, you would gain SO MUCH learning wordpress. A good WP theme/template would already make this look 1000x better. Then re-arrange the text and add bigger pictures. Make that site ATTRACTIVE for the people.

Wish you luck..it can only get better

add:

your biggest problem is that you only have a single page and NO structure in your site, no sub-pages etc. Please learn wordpress.

Look:

this is the first thing i see. Except this is totally irrelevant. This should go on an "about us" page and not be the first thing people see.

Pretty bad, but let me give you some real advice.

Find a site or page you like.

Then go to odesk.com and post a job for clone page with your own original text.

My guess is you could get some1 to do 1 landing page for $30.

like a lot of the other warriors here I baasically feel you need to scrap it and start over show and tell what you want people to do on the site make it appealing

Frank,
I'll be a bit nicer. It's a start and any start is good.
Think focus. Each page should have a single desired outcome, unless it's a branding site which it isn't.

If someone goes to page a page a is for opting them into a list or selling a single product. You present your selling points and tell them to take action (buy or optin)
Give them nothing else to do and no other choices on the page.

Now when you do get it done let me know. I have 3 multiplayer gaming sites with 10k + subscribers that I rarely pitch too because I have few options. I have been dying to x-promote and JV on it and have a slew volunteers that would assist with it. My wife and a friend are running it now and could provide you with a nice jumpstart on sales with a good email push.