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Created A New Landing Page - Appreciate Your Inputs

by thrigrri
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Hi Fellow Warriors

I've just created a landing page (taking into consideration everything that I've learned in this forum as well as from several list building guides) and would appreciate it if you guys could give me your comments:

CPA Jumpstart - Generate Massive Cash Online From CPA Marketing

As a token of appreciation, I have included a copy of the report here (which I have authored) for your keeps (and it comes with full giveaway rights):

http://www.internetprofitmachines.co...tartReport.zip

Looking forward to the input from you guys... Thanks in advance!


Cheers
Jun Yuan
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    • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
      Thanks for that Dary. Appreciate it...

      I tried to squeeze everything in 1 single page (without needing people to scroll) but somehow I wasn't able to... Perhaps in the next landing page I'll try to think of a way to put everything in 1 single page (with no scrolling required)

      I don't quite get what you mean when you say highlighting the webpage header... Is it to use a bolder font? Or increasing the font's size?


      Cheers
      Jun Yuan
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    • Profile picture of the author Richard Van
      Nice and simple, I like it. Only thing I thought was the headline could be a bit more "in your face", having said that it looks very good, short and to the point, I like the bullets too. Test it like this and with a bolder headline. I'm no genius just saying what I think.
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      • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
        Wow! Thanks for your compliments Richard... Really appreciate it!

        Perhaps I should use a different font for the headline (as the font that I'm currently using doesn't make too much of a difference whether or not it is in bold)

        Thanks so much once again!!


        Cheers
        Jun Yuan
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      • Profile picture of the author warrior4life
        I don't see any problem with your squeeze page. I will agree that it's simple and straight to the point. Having said that, I will suggest that you put borders around you page if possible. It seems too wide... Hope this will help.

        Tony
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        • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
          Hey Tony... Thanks for your time to help me look through my landing page, as well as your inputs... Appreciate it!


          Cheers
          Jun Yuan
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          • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
            Plish & Natasha >> Thanks for your inputs! I have just finished the report and have not given to anyone to read and review just yet... I'll bear your comments in mind and get people to read through and give me a testimonial for it...

            Update: I see that most have commented that the headline is not bold enough - I have just changed the font type of the headline, as well as make the "Limited Time Only" stand out by using a different color... Appreciate your inputs! Thanks!


            Cheers
            Jun Yuan
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            • Profile picture of the author Intrepreneur
              Headline doesn't create enough curiosity.. Curiosity killed the cat they say!!
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              • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
                Originally Posted by Intrepreneur View Post

                Headline doesn't create enough curiosity.. Curiosity killed the cat they say!!
                Hmm... Any suggestions?
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                • Profile picture of the author jlucado
                  Hi Thrigrri.

                  I think you have done well with your first landing page! And others have given you plenty of advice for improvement. Take all of it under advisement.

                  But there is one overriding thing I look for in copy writing. That is, good spelling and proper grammar.

                  Change the verb in the last sentence from are to is.

                  My best to you,
                  Jerry
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                  • Profile picture of the author Andrew Gould
                    Originally Posted by jlucado View Post

                    But there is one overriding thing I look for in copy writing. That is, good spelling and proper grammar.
                    The ONLY overriding thing for any copy is conversion.

                    It's been show time and time again that perfect spelling and grammar lower conversions.
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                • Profile picture of the author leegs
                  Few suggestions:-

                  1. Your headline needs to be improved. Suggest to have
                  "Discover The Secrets To Generate Massive Amounts Of Money From CPA Marketing...In 30 Days Or Less!"

                  You can have 2 headlines and test the conversion, so that you know which works better.

                  2. Benefits did not generate curiosity. Suggest one example:-
                  Three "CORE Elements" you must include to promote your CPA offers effectively by 125.57%

                  3. It would be better to gather testimonial(s).

                  Hope it helps...

                  Raymond
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                • Profile picture of the author Intrepreneur
                  Originally Posted by thrigrri View Post

                  Hmm... Any suggestions?
                  CPA is Rubbish WITHOUT Knowing these Closely Guarded Secrets that Stuff Your Pockets Full of Cash!
                  These secrets have earned me over $60k this year already..

                  Make that 60k a true number.

                  Then as other said the formatting of the page needs tending to. Don't let them escape without another pitch.. etc etc.
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                  • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
                    Originally Posted by Intrepreneur View Post

                    CPA is Rubbish WITHOUT Knowing these Closely Guarded Secrets that Stuff Your Pockets Full of Cash!
                    These secrets have earned me over $60k this year already..

                    Make that 60k a true number.

                    Then as other said the formatting of the page needs tending to. Don't let them escape without another pitch.. etc etc.
                    WOW! That sure is one rock-solid attention grabber!!! It really caught my eye when I scrolled down and saw it! Thanks a bunch for that!

                    By the way, any advice on where I can get good courses on how to write attention grabbing headlines, or writing effective sales copies?

                    Thanks!


                    Cheers
                    Jun Yuan
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                    • Profile picture of the author Intrepreneur
                      Originally Posted by thrigrri View Post

                      WOW! That sure is one rock-solid attention grabber!!! It really caught my eye when I scrolled down and saw it! Thanks a bunch for that!

                      By the way, any advice on where I can get good courses on how to write attention grabbing headlines, or writing effective sales copies?

                      Thanks!


                      Cheers
                      Jun Yuan

                      There's many a formula but nothing like being creative.. Create curiosity and I'll subscribe any day.

                      Also if you're planning to promote a particular product.. you can use the headline of the product you are going to promote!!
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                    • Profile picture of the author thrigrri
                      Hey Andrew, Raymond, Jerry and Intrepreneur,

                      Many thanks for the wonderful suggestions... You guys are really, really GREAT!

                      I'll definitely go make the necessary changes...

                      Appreciate it lots!


                      Cheers
                      Jun Yuan
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  • Profile picture of the author natasha333
    Hi yes I think the headline needs to jump out - perhaps a change to red would improve it. Also needs credibility. Eg testimonials or amounts that you have made per month with CPA
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  • Profile picture of the author Plish
    As said above, the headline needs to appeal more. It's already quite a long headline, so I want it to stand out and force me to read it first!

    Some sort of proof would be great. A video testimonial from a full time IMer would be perfect, but if you can't get hold of one, give the product out for free and ask for reviews. If the product really is good, then it won't be hard getting hold of a short and powerful testimonial!

    The product could also do with some more emphasis on the fact that it's free! (especially with the email capture being below the fold for the average resolution).

    "Enter your first name and email address below to instantly download this report:" is fairly long winded, a shorter more concise and bold statement would be better.

    And above the fold for the opt in is key. (as mentioned above!).

    I hope this helps.

    Nick
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