I Need A Little Help Please

Hi Ron,

It looks alrght to me...

You have to get it out there and see
how it works out, to know if you
need to make it better or not!

All the best,
Jamie

Ron

make sure to put some tracking code in that page, then start driving traffic to it

as traffic comes in start making some changes to your sales lettter gradually

I do this all the time after a while I end up with copy that converts decent

but your not going to know unless you put it out there

you might want to show exactly what people are going to get instead of speaking in general terms

Ed

I think your page looks great - and the price is incredible! You should get many newbies to sign up.

I noticed one misspelling around the middle section. It was the word "there" where it should be "their" - I'm just a stickler for spelling

Looks good - now get the word out! Good luck

HI Ron - couple quick things:

1. the bottom - ps pss psss - should be ps pps ppps
2. any way to add any graphic in the first few paragraphs of income proof - like money coming into your paypal acct. etc.
3. The sub headline Build Yourself A Recession Proof Online Business And Start Living The Life You Deserve! - you might want to split test by making it a different color - I see alot of black text and if you made the sub headline a burgundy/red or dark blue (like you see in alot of sales pages)

Also, I just enrolled myself for Scott Millions and Brian 'CopyDaddy's' webinar this coming Friday and videos they deliver -

Brian goes into detail about creating great sales copy/landing pages - very worthwhile for the price you might want to consider.

Cheers, Mia

Make sure you set up a split test.

Never be scared of your sales letter. You just gotta get it out there and see how well it will do.

Test price. No change on your page will have a bigger effect than your pricing. You'll be surprised by how big a difference it can make! And sometimes higher prices convert higher than lower prices.

For your product I would test $47, $67, $87 and $97..
$87 often converts the best for me. and $97 the worst.. who would have thought ay?

The software I use is: a b split testing . com <--- (I can't include links yet until I have 15 posts.) Just remove the gaps.

Very simple, clean and easy to use software. Even installs itself onto your server for you.

Cheers,
Chris

Ron,

If your product is really going to help people, then it will need copy which does it justice.

What you currently have, I imagine, is not going to perform for you.

I think you could do better with your headline. I don't have time to really give this more thought, but you need something more compelling. You need something with more emotion. You need something highlighting more benefits. Just an example:


Next, break your paragraphs into smaller chunks and shorter, punchier sentences.

Then bold the key words and phrases in your body text.

Be consistent. Sometimes you're talking about yourself, other times it's 'we'.

Also, is that a free subscription to a newsletter/ezine in the middle of the sales page for your product? If it is, remove it. You're either selling, or you're giving - not both.

There's more I could say, but I suggest you learn more about copywriting, or hire someone who knows what they're talking about.

It'll pay you in the long run.

Keep pressing on,

JK

HI Ron,

I looked at your page and it's a GREAT start. I agree with the previous posts about testing and all.

My only suggestion is to review your copy and come from a more positive approach . . . tell the reader what they CAN have. Your first word on the site is "Wouldn't" or "Would Not." This immediately puts a negative tone to the content and thus puts the reader in a negative mindset.

So my suggestion is to go through and review your copy and instead of telling the reader what they DON'T want, tell them what they can have and what they DO want. You want to keep your reader saying, "Yes" all the way through your copy . . .

I hope this helps making your good sales page even better