Writing reality check - Product creation question

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I posted this before...but it vanished. I'm confused. I have seen more than one similar post to this so I'm fairly certain it's in the right area. This is a general writing, not copywriting question. I read the posts there and it didn't seem to belong. I asked another question but I removed it in case that was the sketchy bit. If for some reason I'm doing something wrong, could someone please tell me?

I'm creating my own product (it actually does have to do waxing, I'm by no means a noob to jump the gun and start teaching others how to make money before I've made money) as well as working on starting a PLR website and I would love a writing reality check.

Here's a clip from one of the most viewed articles on my very neglected skin care website:

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The Dangers of Waxing


There's no question about it, getting waxed can be very hazardous to your health. Waxing leaves small, open wounds on your skin which leaves your protective skin open and ready for easy infection of any number of dangerous diseases and viruses. Sometimes you will even note that a follicle is bleeding but even if you don't see this tale tell sign, be assured that you do have wounds created by the waxing process. You can be left venerable to infections such as staph, MSRA, Hepatitis, Herpes or even worse.


The first line of protection is gloves. Your esthetician should wear gloves every time, every treatment, without fail. This protects her but also protects you. This has caused quite a stir these days in the spa world and the recommendation from professionals high in the spa world and OSHA themselves is to glove every time for every treatment. Please demand this from your esthetician each time. Even if you watch her wash her hands, there are still places for bacteria to remain, such as her fingernails. You don't know if she has something as innocuous as a paper cut you can't see that could potentially expose you to a disease that may not just be dangerous, but could be deadly.



Many spas claim that the wax is heated and therefore this will kill any germs. This couldn't be further from the truth. Wax is heated to a temperature close to body temperature or it would cause you serious burns. This creates an environment that's ripe for bacteria. All it takes to contaminate the wax is for the esthetician to wax one client with a bacterial infection, virus or fungus and then for her to dip that stick back in the pot. The wax pot then becomes a breeding ground for whatever the previous client had.


If your esthetician double dips, a term for the practice of using a stick to apply the wax to a client and then re-dipping that stick rather than reaching for a clean stick, leave and report the salon or spa to your local health department. You are exposing yourself to the blood of countless strangers and then that is being spread onto your skin. Even worse, there is a high possibility that the applications will slightly overlap so that wax is being spread onto tiny open wounds. There is NO such thing as a wax that will not harbor bacteria. It does not exist. This is one of the single most dangerous practices. Imagine that the wax being used on your lip was used to do a strangers Brazilian. Double dipping is all too common and very dangerous practice, don't stand for it.


If you demand your practitioner to adhere to these practices, you should have a safe, enjoyable waxing session. While you should expect your esthetician to adhere to these, being an informed consumer will ensure that you have a safe wax, every wax as not everyone in the industry has adopted these guidelines.

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There really wasn't a keyword goal for the article, it's purely informational. Please bear that in mind. But I'm going through Tiffany Dow's PLR ATM and I wanted a writing reality check.

Also, I'm creating a product on how to do your own waxing, from making the wax to applying it. The bread and butter of the thing is product videos. Is it still worth while to create an actual DVD to send out or do fully digital? Also, should I Clickbank this from the start or sell it on my own for a bit?


Thanks for reading!
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  • Profile picture of the author CDarklock
    Originally Posted by danicat View Post

    I posted this before...but it vanished.
    In general, things don't just "vanish" on this forum. They're deleted by moderators in response to member complaints. Posting them again is generally a Bad Idea.
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    • Profile picture of the author danicat
      Originally Posted by CDarklock View Post

      In general, things don't just "vanish" on this forum. They're deleted by moderators in response to member complaints. Posting them again is generally a Bad Idea.
      So mods do not give a person any feedback on a removed post? I must have missed that in the stickies.

      I'd be inclined to agree with you on the reposting, except for the fact that I didn't simply repost. I reworded, changed my question and the only thing that I kept the same was my writing sample. As for removal, I triple checked everything to make sure I wasn't doing anything questionable. There were no links in my post, I checked for similar posts in the section and I changed everything surrounding the writing sample. If you see something wrong about my post, I'd appreciate the feedback.
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      • Profile picture of the author CDarklock
        Originally Posted by danicat View Post

        So mods do not give a person any feedback on a removed post? I must have missed that in the stickies.
        It's not in the stickies. However, there's nothing saying you'll get feedback, either - so it's not like they broke a promise or anything.

        If you see something wrong about my post, I'd appreciate the feedback.
        I don't see anything wrong with it. I didn't see anything wrong the first time you posted it, either. But I'm not in charge.
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  • Profile picture of the author Zabrina
    Good article overall, it flowed smoothly and only had a few little errors. I like it, and I learned from it.

    Hmm. If I were you, I'd test the market a bit first. You can always knock out a five to ten-page report to gauge interest. If that succeeds wildly, create the full course on start-to-finish waxing and sell it online. If that succeeds wildly, create an actual DVD (on Amazon or through another distributor, maybe) and sell it on Clickbank. If you jump into it immediately, you'll probably get overwhelmed, and maybe discouraged if you don't make any sales of the DVD immediately.
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  • Profile picture of the author Debbie Allen
    Hi danicat,

    I liked your article because it was informative. I did notice a few errors - but they were minor problems that your spell & grammar check would probably catch.

    Have you considered writing an ebook with lots of graphics instead of videos? That's just a thought, but it would eliminate the need for a DVD and make your product creation and delivery easier and less expensive. Then if the sales/profits come in you could create the DVDs.

    Having affiliates on board to help make sales for you is almost always better than not having any help. And I know that ClickBank is extremely popular but you might want to consider other options that offer faster payouts for you and your affiliates.
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    • Profile picture of the author Tina Golden
      You can be left venerable to infections
      The word you wanted here was vulnerable.

      I did note a couple grammatical errors but nothing that interrupts the flow so I don't see a big deal with it.

      If your question is whether your writing is good enough, then yes, it is. My suggestion is to have someone you trust to read it over once you have the draft done. Other eyes will often pick up tiny things that we don't catch because our minds read what we thought we wrote, and not always what we actually wrote.

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      • Profile picture of the author WarForNom
        Originally Posted by TMG Enterprises View Post

        The word you wanted here was vulnerable.

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        Tina
        ... not "venereal"?

        But seriously, while the thread was disappearing last night I was giving the piece a very quick run through my own spinning software. I'm glad the topic re-appeared so that I can offer my results to the OP.

        It isn't polished but I hope the OP will find something of value in it.



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        Waxing doesn't have to be hazardous to your health.

        Whether you know is ot not, waxing--even done carefully--leaves small, open wounds on your skin. These wounds leave you vulnerable to infection by any number of risk factors. You may or may not see bleeding follicles, but even if you don't, be assured that you do have wounds created by the waxing process. The range of infections waxing can leave you open to includes Staph, MSRA, Hepatitis, Herpes and worse.


        What is to be done?

        The first line of protection is gloves. Your esthetician should never interact with your skin--or the skin of any other client--unless the esthetician is wearing gloves.

        The gloves, safely disposed of after each treatment, protect your esthetician from picking up bacteria, viruses or other risk factors from any other clients. When you enter the spa for treatment, the new pair of gloves your esthetician puts on provides a second line of defense for you, in case your professional happened to encounter risk factors from any other source.

        Thorough scrubbing with antibacterial soap should also be part of your esthetician's preparation for each client, each treatment. This alone was once considered sufficient. We now know that it is not enough of a precaution, despite the fact that the change in recommended procedure has ruffled some feathers in the industry. Today, the recommendation from professionals at the highest levels of the spa world ,and from OSHA themselves, is to scrub AND glove every time, for every treatment.

        As a consumer of spa services, you should at minimum demand these precautions for each and every one of your own treatments. Your esthetician without gloves, even if you have seen her her wash her hands quite thoroughly, could still be transporting bacteria, viruses or fungus, perhaps trapped under a fingernail. If she has something as innocuous as a paper cut you can't see, that alone could potentially expose you to a source of infection which she might happen to be resistant to but which could sicken or even kill you.

        But as explained above, gloving up for you provides only the first level of protection. You should seek out an esthetician who makes an ironclad commitment to a surgical-quality scrub, like the doctors do on TV, and the use of gloves--for every client, every wax.

        Some spas claim that the temperature to which the wax is heated will kill any germs. This is simply false. Wax is heated to a temperature close to body temperature or it would cause you serious burns. This actualy creates an environment ripe for certain bacteria.

        The fact that the standard temperatures to which wax is heated are not enough to sterilize the wax is the basis for the next precaution you should always observe: no double dipping.

        All it takes to contaminate the wax pot is for an esthetician to wax one client who has a bacterial infection, virus or fungus, and then dip that stick back in the pot. The wax pot, far from sterilizing the wax for the next client, in fact becomes a breeding ground for whatever micro-organisms were the cause of the previous client's health problem.

        Double-dipping is using a stick to apply the wax to a client and then re-dipping that stick rather than reaching for a clean stick for each and every application of wax. If your esthetician double dips, stand up and leave. It is that simple and that important. In fact you should see it as your duty to report the salon or spa to your local health department over this dangerous practice. Double-dipping exposes you to whatever may have lived in the blood of countless strangers. Those life forms, thriving in the comfort of the warmed wax, are part of what is what may be spread onto your skin by a double-dipper.

        And remember, this possibly infectious wax is not being spread only on healthy, intact skin. After the first area off skin is waxed there is a high probability that the next application will slightly overlap the area of your first one. The result? Tainted wax is actually being spread onto tiny open wounds.


        If that sounds horrible, well, it is.

        There is NO such thing as a wax that will not harbor bacteria. It does not exist. Because of that fact, double dipping is one of the single most dangerous practices in this industry. Even if your spa could ensure that no other clients ever carried risk factors, consider that the pot of wax being used on your lip this afternoon may have been used this morning to do a stranger's Brazilian.


        Double dipping is all too common and very dangerous practice, don't stand for it.If you demand that your practitioner adhere to these practices, you should have a safe, enjoyable waxing session.

        In a perfect world every esthetician would be aware of the risks and always adhere to these rules. As things stand, not everyone in the industry uses these best practices. We offer this information to allow you to be an informed and alert consumer so that you may have a safe wax, every wax.


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        Good luck with your venture.



        (I'm just another rookie looking for ways to contribute around here.)
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