My video squeeze page is NOT converting...please help me!

14 years ago

Well, I tuned in with a blank mind to see where I fell away. And I turned the volume way down in case the Mrs wondered what the hell I was doing

Anyway, 2 things turned me off:

1. The length of the video. 6:18 is just too long IMHO and I could see right at the start how much of my life you were demanding.

2. When you started the bit about "let me tell you about me", I clicked away. Analyzing that, it was because my brain combined that with the length of the video and I just thought enough was enough. I want to know what I get when I subscribe. End of.

These are just my observations as a casual browser.

Hope it helps.

Cheers,

Neil

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RNMKR

14 years ago

Have you tried split testing your squeeze page?

Try one without a video or maybe change the placement of the video

Hope it helps!

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marktheonlinesurfer 14 years ago

Originally Posted by J.Cox

Have you tried split testing your squeeze page?

Try one without a video or maybe change the placement of the video

Hope it helps!

Yes good idea. I do plan on split testing the two different types of squeeze pages.
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Shaun OReilly 14 years ago

I had a similar reaction to Neil.

The 6:18 timing was an immediate turn-off. Get your video
to around 2-minutes or less.

Also - what's with the hat in a house? Maybe it's part of
the persona but it was another distraction for me.

You spent the first couple of minutes talking about YOU
YOUR dating problems rather than focusing on your VISITOR
and THEIR dating problems.

(Sure, you need to cover this but not on the squeeze page
in my opinion. Tell them your story later once they've
subscribed).

Tell them how you can help them solve their problems
from the get go and the benefits they'll get from signing-
up to your list.

Try delivering your video so it appears more natural instead
of part of a script. Make it conversational as if a friend was
right in front of you.

Also, the heavy pixelated image of you with the two hot
chicks. Test using a clearer image so it looks more real
and believable rather than doctored.

Also, consider streaming from Amazon S3 so people don't
leave your site to go to YouTube. Keep them focused on
the one action of subscribing.

Those are my initial observations anyways.

Dedicated to your success,

Shaun
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KevinBurns

14 years ago

I agree with Neil,

1) I would definitely cut down the length of the video

2) Your video should focus more on the common problems that men are having
attracting women and then I would give a little tease about how your
information can help provide them with solutions if they opt-in.

Your squeeze page design looks great, but IMHO, I would focus more on generating
a little more excitement about how what you offer can provide solutions for the problems
that men face when attracting women.

Good Luck

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Thanks guys. I will def work on shortening the length of the video. I see what you mean about it being way too long. Also will focus on how I can help solve their problems.

I really been working on providing them with value and give away a great free video. I just have to highlight it more.

I also was wondering, does the squeze page seem "sleezy" or "spammy" to you? I got some comments about that.

Any examples of an ideal video squeeze page, particularly in this niche would be much appreciated.

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vicone 14 years ago

I found the video very entertaining but perhaps not in a way you intended.

The first impression I had was that your target market was prospective members of the mafia - or those who enjoy movie re-runs of 'Casablanca' (apologies to Humphrey). The hat and the 5 o'clock shadow in the image did nothing to dispel this impression.

I was expecting an 'offer I couldn't refuse' but decided not to wait until the end for it as I'd formed an opinion within the first 30 seconds.

I liked the effort that went into making the video but the portrayal in it seemed to be overworked. In other words, the delivery appeared too studied and contrived rather than natural.

Much of this could be overcome by removing the luxury of the six minutes length and reducing the video to under two minutes, as others have mentioned. This will enable you to focus more on essentials and help you to feel more comfortable and relaxed when facing the camera.

Of course, you could also go the other way - it would be very easy to do - with a script that deliberately played up the mafia / gangster angle! Think John Travolta ('Pulp Fiction') or Humphrey Bogart!

Here's looking at you, kid.

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- Kevin AKA Hubcap 14 years ago
  
  GET TO THE POINT!!
  
  The video is too long. Make it shorter and more concise and inject some energy and enthusiasm into it.
  
  Also, think about having a "hottie" do the video for you. No offense, but I'd rather watch an attractive woman tell me what turns her on rather than some dude.
  
  FYI---> Your contact, terms and conditions, and articles links are broken on both pages.
  
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- Marty S 14 years ago
  
  Well I do not think the length of this video is an issue at all. 6 Minutes is reasonable but the concept, delivery, and perhaps the believability is in question. Hey if I am hooked on what you are saying, 6 minutes will just fly by, as we have seen that with Boss style videos.
  
  You are selling to men, yet at the same time, I think men will generally be put off by this with a "pppfff", more than they would be saying "Wow, I gotta learn from this guy", because the copy seems self serving. The 6 minutes about YOU is the problem. I want those 6 minutes about ME.
  
  Hey you have a great look, with a European sound that should be good on video, but I am suspect about the video itself because YOU are the one delivering it. Have you considered being the subject of the video, but perhaps using an interviewer/reporter to do the narration? Might I also say, this entire story sounds old-and-done-before.
  
  Also, with video these days I think these words are just DEATH > "But first, let me tell you a bit about myself." Don't even bother trying to sell yourself in short videos, because all you want is an email capture. You will have plenty of time to do that later, or you can always offer an ABOUT ME page to anyone who is interested. Either we are going to believe you or we are not. Your credentials can be used as buy-button evidence later on.
  
  I am not a copywriter, but I do know that if you can show me that you can help ME in your intro video, I will give you a LOT more of my time, AND my email address. So I feel you should just jump right into the content and start GIVING me something right now in this video. My video/intro would lean to something like this >
  
  Hey guys, Mark here. I wanted to show you a few simple tips that will get women to notice YOU, even if you are on the other side of the night club. The first is... the second is... and here is one more...
  
  ....You know what, I use these all the time and I KNOW that it works > <INSERT PIC of you and HOTTIE> If you want to know more, just download my free report and video. Thanks for watching.
  
  One more thing Mark. I know you said you were not converting, but your amount of views on Youtube were quite low, and certainly not enough to bet on just yet. I also noticed that the aspect ratio left those terrible black edges on the sides, so the production value of the video could also be improved.
  
  I hope this helps and if it does, can you send some chicks my way?
  
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  brunski57 14 years ago
  
  My immediate impression is ..."I do not trust you".
  
  Therefore why go any further.
  
  The picture looks sleazy.
  
  Who is your target market? What age group?
  
  It seems you are targeting young men, so guys in there 40's or 50's would be turned off.
  
  Also guys... who want a meaningful relationship would be turned off.
  
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  Steve Wells 14 years ago
  
  I think that most of what people are saying about your video is correct. But if you want my opinion as a graphics designer, there is nothing that screams "I have a quality product" on your page except maybe the video player and the gradient background, the rest of the graphics are remedial.
  
  The quality of the graphics is the easiest thing to fix, just hire someone
  
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Mike German

14 years ago

Originally Posted by marktheonlinesurfer

Thanks guys. I will def work on shortening the length of the video. I see what you mean about it being way too long. Also will focus on how I can help solve their problems.

I really been working on providing them with value and give away a great free video. I just have to highlight it more.

I also was wondering, does the squeze page seem "sleezy" or "spammy" to you? I got some comments about that.

Any examples of an ideal video squeeze page, particularly in this niche would be much appreciated.

Hi Mark,

I design Video Squeeze Pages so take a look below and I'll be happy to quote for a set of squeeze pages (for split testing) in the relationship niche.

Regards,
Mike

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FrankieTP2

14 years ago

4 simple, but very negative points on your squeeze page:

1- Weak Heading Title

2- These colors don't attract this market (black and gray - NO!)

3- Video length (It should be around 1:30 max)

4- The effect on the picture with you (or actor - I dunno) and the girls... it makes the girls look like you got them out of a strip club. A clean sexy picture would definitely do much better than that.

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JesseGuthrie

14 years ago

Change the picture of the guy and girls...make it more real.. and i think that alone will help you..probably a better quality video as well. The site is designed well.

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Alex Barboza

14 years ago

When clicking the video it goes to Youtube so probably there are some prospects going there and never coming back.

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bravo75

14 years ago

I personally can not get my head around why anybody would fall for the old " How to approach attractive women lark". I tell a lie, when I was about 18 I remember reading somewhere that Marlon Brando picked up chicks holding his thumbs in jeans pockets. The index and middle finger pointing to his genitiles. This gave women the subliminal signal that good old Marlon was inviting females to have sex with him. I spent the next 3 weeks hanging around in clubs trying to attract women by using this nifty little pick up trick. Needless to say, the most I got out of it were a few raised eyebrows.

All joking aside, I think your page looks quite good. I would keep the video a bit shorter though.

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Kevin_Hutto

14 years ago

Video is too long. Also, I want to see you out in the field picking up girls - not by yourself on some couch. You also need to be 10 times more upbeat than you think you do. The first couple of seconds were so low energy that I clicked away.

To me it would seem like a cameraman on the street with you as you are about to walk into the club, then a clip with you talking to a hot chic in the club... then you walking out with her... Then a quick 5 second headshot of you running back to the camera telling them to optin to find out how you just did it.

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creative 14 years ago

I agree with the above comments. My advise to you: keep working on it until it converts better. Don't give up!
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- JohnLeonard 14 years ago
  
  Maybe try a mock hidden camera video of you actually picking up a chick or two using one of your techniques...A kind of over the shoulder docu-drama kind of video.....2-2 and a half minutes...Start by saying how you will show me how to pick up a chick in 90 seconds by....Then the "hidden camera" footage....I'd like to see that...Make it look real though
  
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  lamberw 14 years ago
  
  Page is too wide.
  
  No call to action. You need to tell your visitors to enter their email address.
  
  Video is too long.
  
  Headline confuses people. Read it back - it isn't fluent.
  
  The visitor doesn't have a clue what they're getting
  
  Who is it speaking to?
  
  Opt in form needs to be higher up the page
  
  Get rid of those distracting links at the bottom
  
  Use some eye mapping elements like arrows to direct eyes to the opt in fields
  
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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Thanks guys. You have been very helpful with your feedback. It is back to the drawing board for me!

I am going to work on shortening the video, showing how i can help the prospect, make the page look cleaner and change the headlines around.

I am also considering having a girl in the video, might sell better to my niche.

Ultimately, the objective is to build a list and I have to make sure all the right elements are in place to achieve that (thanks for your suggestions on how to achieve that).

I am just wondering if anyone has any examples to give a video squeeze page that does have all these elements? One that I can look at to get inspiration. Even better if it is in my niche.

Also perhaps a high converting non-video. Just something to get me on the right track again.

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Kevin AKA Hubcap 14 years ago

Originally Posted by marktheonlinesurfer

Also perhaps a high converting non-video. Just something to get me on the right track again.

Yes. In fact there's no reason why you can't test a video squeeze page against a non video squeeze.

Don't think in terms of absolutes.

Go with whatever converts best based on your numbers.

Kevin
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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Any ideas why the thank you page isn't converting well? Is 40% a low confirm rate?

Thanks,

Mark

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Shaun OReilly 14 years ago

Originally Posted by marktheonlinesurfer

Any ideas why the thank you page isn't converting well? Is 40% a low confirm rate?

Thanks,

Mark

Solve your squeeze page problem first so you build desire
in people to want to join your list in the first place.

That said, you've got a 1:51 long video to tell people to
confirm and for the screenshot part you're using a computer
generated voice software to give the instructions.

Use a shorter video (30 secs max) with clear and concise
instructions.

Make it simple.

Just encourage people to go an click on the confirmation
link - that's all.

Dedicated to your success,

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- Venturetothetop 14 years ago
  
  Wany my honest opinion? That video is realy bad. You are not doing yourself any justice with that.
  
  There is no excitement, your body language is not one of someone who can teach me something, and you do not start the video telling me whats in it for me and why I should watch it.
  
  I'm sorry, video length has not much to do with it, it's a desperate niche and I have friends who have longer videos in the same niche that convert amazingly.
  
  What do you teach that others do not?
  What will I gain by watching you videos?
  What improvements wil I see with my life?
  What frustrations will I elininate?
  
  Answer that at the beginning of your video and focus on those points in your video and you will see an immedite difference....
  
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JamesJeffery

14 years ago

My opinions:

1. The squeeze page looks weak. The colors are wrong. The layout is wrong. The headline and wording are wrong.

2. The video is to long. It takes you 6 minutes to get to the point. Actually, did you even get to the point?

3. The video is flat and boring. I lost interest. I lost trust when you continually said "woman" rather than "women". It sounds like something Tarzan would say.

The idea is good. Your drive for success is there. You need to tweak, and split test.

Do some research. Look at what similar marketers are doing to promote similar products. Gather some ideas and take some notes.

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

This is all really helpful. Thanks for all your comments and feedback. This is just another example as to why this is such a great forum!

Well sounds like I have a full plate to attend it! I intend to act on all your valuable points.

This is the stuff I need to hear that I don't get from my friends.

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Rus Sells

14 years ago

Keep your video to around 2 minutes like some of the other poster's have mentioned and I'd also suggest giving them a very good "FREE TIP" in the video and tell them to sign up go to get more.

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RichardHK

14 years ago

Nobody has mentioned your on-page SEO which is non-existant. I can see you have tried a little PPC advertising but you should hel;p yourself more with some organic search too.

Your YouTube video has no description, or other info. Maybe cos it is still testing? But when you are ready, do a proper YouTube video to help.

On the video, lighting needs improvement. And agree with others that it is too long... UNLESS you make it really interesting with some real gals, etc., then 6 minutes will fly by as noted above.

Good luck... Hopefully you have converted a few Warriors here if only to learn more about what you are up to.

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by RichardHK

Nobody has mentioned your on-page SEO which is non-existant. I can see you have tried a little PPC advertising but you should hel;p yourself more with some organic search too.

Your YouTube video has no description, or other info. Maybe cos it is still testing? But when you are ready, do a proper YouTube video to help.

On the video, lighting needs improvement. And agree with others that it is too long... UNLESS you make it really interesting with some real gals, etc., then 6 minutes will fly by as noted above.

Good luck... Hopefully you have converted a few Warriors here if only to learn more about what you are up to.

Thanks Richard. Actually I do get quite a bit of organic traffic from article marketing and backlinking.

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davemiz

14 years ago

my first question is are you testing?

if no, please go hit your head against the wall.....

if you're not testing you're wasting your time and the ppl in here's time.... no point of asking for advice and help if you're not seeing what actually works and what doesnt.

5% is very low, but it depends on the source of traffic.

I'm in the dating niche and my stuff gets closer to 50%. (no i'm not posting urls for ppl to rip my stuff)

The comments are interesting but every single one is off. You guys are focusing on the specific things that are wrong within the site/video and not looking at things from a higher level.

there's a HUUUGE disconnect with the site and the copy.

your site is master online dater, but the copy is how to approach and attract women.

ummm..... hello?

not sure if you realize this, but when you're trying to meet chicks online, you DONT have to approach.

thats a huge disconnect for someone on that page.

its not congruent.

second, the copy is pretty weak and vague. You need to be more specific.... to the benefits to the reader and what they're getting. like who cares about an underground pick up artist? what does that mean for the reader? why should they give a crap?

right now its weak and thats why you're getting a low #.

Third, not sure if you know this but video squeeze pages almost always have a lower conversion rate. No idea who told ya to use video on squeeze but they should be shot. :-)

the graphics are kinda off, but who cares as long as they convert.

hope that helps ya.

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by davemiz

my first question is are you testing?

if no, please go hit your head against the wall.....

if you're not testing you're wasting your time and the ppl in here's time.... no point of asking for advice and help if you're not seeing what actually works and what doesnt.

5% is very low, but it depends on the source of traffic.

I'm in the dating niche and my stuff gets closer to 50%. (no i'm not posting urls for ppl to rip my stuff)

The comments are interesting but every single one is off. You guys are focusing on the specific things that are wrong within the site/video and not looking at things from a higher level.

there's a HUUUGE disconnect with the site and the copy.

your site is master online dater, but the copy is how to approach and attract women.

ummm..... hello?

not sure if you realize this, but when you're trying to meet chicks online, you DONT have to approach.

thats a huge disconnect for someone on that page.

its not congruent.

second, the copy is pretty weak and vague. You need to be more specific.... to the benefits to the reader and what they're getting. like who cares about an underground pick up artist? what does that mean for the reader? why should they give a crap?

right now its weak and thats why you're getting a low #.

Third, not sure if you know this but video squeeze pages almost always have a lower conversion rate. No idea who told ya to use video on squeeze but they should be shot. :-)

the graphics are kinda off, but who cares as long as they convert.

hope that helps ya.

Thanks Dave. That was very helpful. Wow your squeeze page converts at 50%!!! That is very impressive. I had no idea such a figure was attainable in the dating niche. Well done!

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john17

14 years ago

I believe that you would drastically increase your conversion rates by making the video simply an image. When users click the video expecting it to play, have a nice ajax light box come up with, "hold on there Tiger! Enter your name and primary email to get instant access to this ...etc... I respect your privacy and ...etc"

I've done this and it converted like crazy in the IM market. I'm not in your niche industry though so I couldn't be certain.

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Angelita

14 years ago

I didn't watch it all because it is too long...

- On the main squeeze page (please don't take this personally) the way ...you ... are... talking.. really .. slow.... might be creeping people out.. sorry, but you need to speak more naturally and keep it short / yet powerful.

State the benefits, proof, more benefits - done..

- I didn't like the word TIPS on the thank you page.. when I hear TIPS I think of nagging advice from friends.. for this niche you should say 'powerful seduction' guaranteed to ...

- Get rid of the 2nd voice instructing how to confirm the email..

Otherwise, you look great in the video

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Angelita

I didn't watch it all because it is too long...

- On the main squeeze page (please don't take this personally) the way ...you ... are... talking.. really .. slow.... might be creeping people out.. sorry, but you need to speak more naturally and keep it short / yet powerful.

State the benefits, proof, more benefits - done..

- I didn't like the word TIPS on the thank you page.. when I hear TIPS I think of nagging advice from friends.. for this niche you should say 'powerful seduction' guaranteed to ...

- Get rid of the 2nd voice instructing how to confirm the email..

Otherwise, you look great in the video

Thanks Angelita...

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55opotty

14 years ago

look at eben pagans doubleyourdating pages. spot the differences between you're page and his. see why his might be working and yours is not.

by looking at your page I've spotted one obvious problem. The video is too too long. 6 mins? I'd go for 1 minute, 1 minute 30 max. use it to tease and build curiosity. Dont sell. Let those bullets beneath the video do the most of the selling with some specifics.

Fill it with excitement. I dont feel any excitement, dont feel the rewards of being a successful dater.

2nd, it doesnt really inspire trust. graphics really amateur. seem amateur trying to look like pro. That's worse than amateur. Actually just simple plain amateur can work well in this field. Again visit eben pagans page.

Put a no spam thingy underneath the optin box.

Test everything. Change the whole page. Make two big variations. Once, twice... pick a winner. Test headlines, test bullets, test lead, test CTA.. test video or no video. test different videos...

There's plenty you can do for improvement.

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darrenmonroe 14 years ago

I agree with Neil and Vic.
Have you setup your split test yet?

You may (and no I am not an affiliate) want to try easy video player 2.0 they have slit testing. I actually bought it and am testing today on one of my niche sites.
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Barry Unruh

14 years ago

I normally won't do any writing for anyone free, but I'm going to make an exception. Here is the video script you need, spoken rapidly and with high emotion:

Hi, This is Mark Taylor, I don't have time to talk right now, I have a date with another great lady I just met. Just fill in your email address, and I'll tell you how you can have more dates FAST. Gotta go, Adios!

Notes: No hat, no sitting down, just high energy!

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Barry Unruh

I normally won't do any writing for anyone free, but I'm going to make an exception. Here is the video script you need, spoken rapidly and with high emotion:

Hi, This is Mark Taylor, I don't have time to talk right now, I have a date with another great lady I just met. Just fill in your email address, and I'll tell you how you can have more dates FAST. Gotta go, Adios!

Notes: No hat, no sitting down, just high energy!

Thanks a lot Barry for writing that. That was very helpful. More along the lines of what I should go for.

I'm trying to thank you with the thank you button, but for some reason I don't see the thanks.

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chapdaddy

14 years ago

the length of the video isn't the problem... it's that it's boring to listen to.

These are some reactions and points of interest I pulled from the video.

learn hot to attract and pick up women
improve lifestyle and improve confidence

:34-3:20 of Mark Taylor talking about Mark Taylor

wanted to meet women but projected wrong image and lacked confidence. Feeling like a loser and took action.

You wasted a lot of time learning seduction.

Patterns emereged and you developed a technique from it. It changed your life in many other ways.

3:28-4:43 crappy midi file and pictures of people I can't relate to.

You need at least 3 testimonials highlighting the points I pulled from the video. You have "an easy way to eliminate approach anxiety" as a bullet point but don't cover it in the video. Having soemone else talk about how great you and your system are. That is how you will sell yourself and as a result your technique. You could make the video 15 minutes long if it's interesting enough to watch and the one you have now simply isn't.

Another consideration is the ads/articles that are bringing people to the squeeze page. Make sure the message is consistent and clear between what they clicked on and what they landed on.

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by chapdaddy

the length of the video isn't the problem... it's that it's boring to listen to.

These are some reactions and points of interest I pulled from the video.

learn hot to attract and pick up women
improve lifestyle and improve confidence

:34-3:20 of Mark Taylor talking about Mark Taylor

wanted to meet women but projected wrong image and lacked confidence. Feeling like a loser and took action.

You wasted a lot of time learning seduction.

Patterns emereged and you developed a technique from it. It changed your life in many other ways.

3:28-4:43 crappy midi file and pictures of people I can't relate to.

You need at least 3 testimonials highlighting the points I pulled from the video. You have "an easy way to eliminate approach anxiety" as a bullet point but don't cover it in the video. Having soemone else talk about how great you and your system are. That is how you will sell yourself and as a result your technique. You could make the video 15 minutes long if it's interesting enough to watch and the one you have now simply isn't.

Another consideration is the ads/articles that are bringing people to the squeeze page. Make sure the message is consistent and clear between what they clicked on and what they landed on.

That's a great analysis. Thanks for that. I am beginning to realise one of my problems is in fact a difference in what they read/clicked on and the landing page they got.

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chapdaddy

14 years ago

cheers... what would be killer would be a "man on the street" type of video where you introduce someone you appear to have just met and have given some advice then send him over to a lady and have him come back with a number. Then have a short post interview where he raves about how easy it was and how confident he feels.. blah blah blah you get the point

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marktheonlinesurfer

14 years ago

Originally Posted by chapdaddy

cheers... what would be killer would be a "man on the street" type of video where you introduce someone you appear to have just met and have given some advice then send him over to a lady and have him come back with a number. Then have a short post interview where he raves about how easy it was and how confident he feels.. blah blah blah you get the point

That sounds awesome. Thanks. I love it! Thansk Chapdaddy.

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Trieu

14 years ago

Try not including the video. You may find results to be better

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mikebrooks

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Craig Desorcy

Congratulations on getting started.

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Wait for the video to popup and look, 1.59 minutes! There's a clue.

Don't use copyright music like he is but that's a good video.

It's not hard to improve if you do the homework. The guy in the
video above nails it cold.

This is a big fat juicy highly competitive market and you really need the
marketing chops and pickup game chops to play in it. I'd say it
can be done over time.

Craig

Take particular not of his headline. His headline deals with the obvious of attracting woman. But also nails the thing that is probably the biggest fear of every single man on the prowl; rejection.

Attracting the woman is a no brainer but the real pain is being rejected.

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defaultuser

14 years ago

There are a lot of factors here so it's important to start at the beginning.

Where is your traffic coming from? I see you don't have any Public videos on your YouTube channel.

And it seems you do get traffic to that squeeze page.

So my question is, where is the traffic coming from?

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Kay Zee

14 years ago

I haven't read all the responses on this thread but here is some advice.

- headline is very weak and the first line is too long in terms of width. Format it right.

- You need trigger words in there.

"get laid like a rock star"
"hot steamy sex"
"hordes of women flocking to you"
"have them begging to give you their number"
"women calling you all the time"

You get the idea.

Get rid of that warning graphic at the top. It seems pointless.
Try having a screen shot of the video or maybe some hot girl next to your optin box to draw attention to it.

The above should get you started.

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Kay Zee

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Craig Desorcy

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Man, how the hell did they get licensing rights to Akon's "sexy girl" song?

Surely, it is not easy to do?

Anyone know how to license super hit tracks like that?

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cristian.andrei

14 years ago

Well...My answer to your question is this:

-First of all, you opt-in page is ugly :rolleyes: ! And what I mean by that is that you have no images..besides the top one which I've frankly seen it before, just that with another text. And that sentence is spread all over my display. I think you should center the text and put some images. Improve the design.

-Second, the thank you page is pretty cool along with that video which is also cool, but the quality of the sound is low..too low

-And least, but not last, make sure that you're driving targeted traffic to that page. I mean..just men...but just men who have no success with women.

I hope this helps..

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Ivelin2008

14 years ago

Test it against a text only squeeze page. The template you're using kinda sux..

The button doesn't look like a button. It doesn't pop out.
Video is too long and slow to load at least here.

You need only 1 main headline that stands out. Where is it?

Also hype it up a notch!

What I mean is try to make it look sexier, the thing you're giving them away.
Give just 1 powerful "secret" tip.
Instead of: an easy way to eliminate approach anxiety
You can say:
The BEST way to instantly eliminate approach anxiety ..quickly and easily using 1 simple exercise! (or whatever)
now you have curiosity too.
People start wondering what's that 1 exercise.
Hope that helps.
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aritrim

14 years ago

# Use a self-branded video player.
# Use a bigger video window size.
# Use a lightbox for full focus on the video.
# Make the page look a bit professional.
# Instead of the sign up before the video, redirect them to sign-up after the video.
# And of course as many mentioned, use a shorter video. No more than 3 minutes.

Hope that helps.

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