critique my landing page

by monitorit 7 replies
i made this page in the mater of 20 minutes to break into the acne market please have a look and let me know your opinion. I have placed it on a irrelavant domain for the purpose of reviews only.

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  • Profile picture of the author Kian
    Hey... i think it was great!! I like the links to the other sales page and i think that is google friendly too...

    I'm new to IM. But just my humble opinion. Perhaps, the opening could be bold in RED cos it contrast with your background of black colour. making it more catchy.

    i read somewhere or was told that landing page usually have a opt in box.. perhaps you might want to consider that, though i did see opt in on the link.

    overall what else could be expected from a quick 20 minute. Great job!!

    Oh.. i also have my website in the dog niche at www.trainyourpugs.com but fails to convert. Can anyone give some comment too..??

    Take care and best regards,
    Kian
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    • Profile picture of the author monitorit
      thanks kian
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      • Profile picture of the author Jared Alberghini
        I have a few suggestions for you:

        #1 Cloak your affiliate links. To me it just looked like you were pushing your affiliate links, and after I saw where the links went, I didn't click them.

        #2 Remove the prices
        I was expecting GOOD information on the subjects, a review page or something, until I saw the prices, then I was turned off since I just knew you were just trying to sell me something.

        If I were you, I would setup a page for each product that redirects to the affiliate page, ex: yoursite.com/acne-free-in-3-days.html

        This will make more people inclined to click the link, thinking it is an article that actually reveals the secrets, then if the sales page is good enough, they may purchase the info.
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        • Profile picture of the author KonaGirl
          Originally Posted by webdesignhq View Post

          I have a few suggestions for you:

          #1 Cloak your affiliate links. To me it just looked like you were pushing your affiliate links, and after I saw where the links went, I didn't click them.

          #2 Remove the prices
          I was expecting GOOD information on the subjects, a review page or something, until I saw the prices, then I was turned off since I just knew you were just trying to sell me something.

          If I were you, I would setup a page for each product that redirects to the affiliate page, ex: yoursite.com/acne-free-in-3-days.html

          This will make more people inclined to click the link, thinking it is an article that actually reveals the secrets, then if the sales page is good enough, they may purchase the info.
          You might add some content to each page that you set up with a review or information on the subject. Keep in mind when writing your article that people that have acne already know they have it so they will not be looking for information about it. What they will be looking for is information on how to get rid of it, so you would want to gear your articles or reviews towards the cure. Another angle would be to write about what you know doesn't work, but this does because....

          Just a few ideas.
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          • Profile picture of the author monitorit
            thanks its always good for feedback it helps a great deal and saves money on useless campaigns
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            • Profile picture of the author Greg Cooksley
              Hey Monitorit,

              It's too obvious that you're selling something....

              Also, don't have more than one product per page.....gives too many options.

              The object of the landing page is to "pre-sell" a product. In other words, to warm the customer up and entice him/her to click to the "real" sales page.

              You need to take some of the key bullet points from the sales page and put them onto your landing page with a great headline and call to action....

              You may or may not want to include an optin form to capture the customer's details for later follow up. If you decide to do that then you have got to offer them something like a free report or ecourse to encourage them to give you their details...

              Remember, you need to give them one or two calls to action....don't have anything else on the page that will distract them or cause them simply to click away...

              Hope this helps..

              Regards

              Greg
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  • Profile picture of the author Tirmizi
    loook good to me ........
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