I Need A Professional's Honest and Brutal Opinion of my Site

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I have been trying to learn how to make money online for a few years now.

Now I almost have my website created and I would like to "POLISH IT UP!"

The site looks alright... but I think that it is missing a few key things... however I don't know what else to change or what else I should add.

So, if you could take a look and give me your honest opinion and let me know if I should ADD anything or Delete anything. I would greatly appreciate you taking the time to edit this for me.

Thanks.

(The Site is in my Signature.(

P.S. The autoresponder is not yet set up so don't try to enter your name and email. Thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shane Roe
    Tried to play the video, apparently it's private.

    Not an expert... But I think you may need that to work lol
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  • Profile picture of the author Herbert S Richter
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    Basic but crucial; Insert a footer on your site to make it look legit!
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  • Profile picture of the author Lee Wilson
    I'm no wordsmith but considering the product you are selling... shouldn't hard work be two words? Also, "understanding of the meaning" doesn't sound right to me, should it not be "understand the meaning of"?

    It might just be a UK vs US thing so don't take my word for it
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    • Profile picture of the author Soundengine
      The sub headline font is a bit hard to read and the message a bit unclear. I think the goal of the headline is to grab attention, then the goal of the sub headline is to get people to click play, right?

      The headline could stand out more visually.

      Just my opinion.
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    • Profile picture of the author LisaGoogle
      Originally Posted by L Wilson View Post

      I'm no wordsmith but considering the product you are selling... shouldn't hard work be two words? Also, "understanding of the meaning" doesn't sound right to me, should it not be "understand the meaning of"?

      It might just be a UK vs US thing so don't take my word for it
      do take his word, that doesn't sound right to me either^^
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  • Profile picture of the author RebekahRose
    I agree, the headline is a little too hard to read. I think it may be the font (is that impact?) or the red color, maybe try a blue or green. It might be easier on the eyes. Also, the title font is all one size. I think if you choose what the most important thing you are trying to get across to the reader and make that larger.

    Another thing would be to reduce the title font and get the video completely above the fold. On smaller screens you'll make people scroll.

    Good luck and keep at it!
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  • Profile picture of the author ReachOneMedia
    Your squeeze looks professional but the headline is the big problem in my opinion. I don't know about the demographic of this particular market but you should try to write the headline in a way that it says clearly the most important outcome that teachers will get if they sign up/buy your product
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  • Profile picture of the author GoogleWarrior
    Ok. Thanks guys. I will do some more editing on it tomorrow and try some of the suggestions that you guys gave me. thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author Anup Mahajan
    I agree that the headline is a bit hard to read. Maybe its due to use of too many big words one after another. You may also want to add few pages like About Us, Contact Us, Privacy Policy etc. Finally I think you should add your name in the end to make the site look more legit.

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  • Profile picture of the author jasonmorgan
    THE BIG RED BLOCK OF TEXT HURTS MY EYES

    looks like one of the generic templates from jvpress or optimusprimepress. It's kinda hard to screw 'em up but it's nothing special.

    Yes, hard work... two words.
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  • Profile picture of the author jjnmconte4
    It is a very basic site that's for sure. Just looks like a squeeze page to me. I don't know how you plan to drive traffic to it. I guess maybe if you place a solo ad with an ezine you could get traffic to it.

    I don't think SEO would work too well. There is not content on it.

    However, no one's opinion counts but the customer's. Drive some traffic to it and see what your user's do. That's the only answer that really counts.
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  • Profile picture of the author paulie888
    The site looks decent overall, but could be tweaked here and there for better visibility. However, the opt-in conversions are going to depend heavily on the content in the video, and since it's a private video I'd have no way of knowing whether this is something that would convert or not.

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    • Profile picture of the author chrisscott
      Well message is unclear what you want to convey through this page. Whether you are going to sell a product or it's just a video free to see.

      If you are going to market your product then it's absolutely to put some more words on your page.

      A research concluded that most of the people going online for purchase a product love to read testimonials or other buyers experiences so you should put some testimonials with pictures of buyers to make your page more stand out and legit.
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve Wells
    Originally Posted by GoogleWarrior View Post

    I have been trying to learn how to make money online for a few years now.

    Now I almost have my website created and I would like to "POLISH IT UP!"

    The site looks alright... but I think that it is missing a few key things... however I don't know what else to change or what else I should add.

    So, if you could take a look and give me your honest opinion and let me know if I should ADD anything or Delete anything. I would greatly appreciate you taking the time to edit this for me.

    Thanks.

    (The Site is in my Signature.(

    P.S. The autoresponder is not yet set up so don't try to enter your name and email. Thanks again.
    Your headline needs to be re-written for sure, it does not easily communicate what your offering. The font should be different, Impact works good when your using much less wording, but you have a paragraph.

    You also need to be consistant with the words either being capital or small case. It's not a big deal to use small letters for "of" and words like that but you have done the same thing with other words as well, and it doesn't look right.

    You probably should add a HTML DOC to your page?

    The video is not working?

    Maybe add some more footer text or links? A copyright would make your page look more professional.

    ALL CAPITAL TEXT IS ALMOST ALWAYS A BIG NO, NO. It makes the text hard to read and it hinders the eyes from reading in a left to right flowing motion.

    Other than that the video squeeze page looks good...
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    • Profile picture of the author Alexa Smith
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      The wording of "Get access to the first 5 videos via email" is going to put off a lot of people, who will worry that they're going to be sent huge emails with mega-sized video attachments that won't even go in their inboxes. You and I both know that that isn't what will happen, but your potential customers don't: English teachers are Luddites and they worry about that kind of thing.

      (Having this thing video-based is going to put off some people altogether, of course, but that's a different matter).

      I strongly suspect you'll find it very worthwhile split-testing different colours, here. My own guess (from my clients' testing) is that bright red lettering will actually convert the worst out of all the colours you can try. Test them and prove me wrong.

      Other than these points it doesn't look bad at all. Good luck with it!
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      • Profile picture of the author JohnMcCabe
        On first glance, it's reasonably attractive.

        The headline needs to be easier to read, and others have already pointed out the inconsistent capitalization and fuzzy wording. Definitely 'hard work' over 'hardwork'.

        Actually playing the video is a problem. If you don't have an invitation, or you don't know to click a picture of the person issuing the invitation, then there is no content. Just a bad headline and an opt-in box.

        Let me repeat that:

        If a visitor to the page can't play the video, there is NO content.

        And no reason to opt in for five videos.

        You might want to add a link to an alternate page with a text based presentation. "If you are having trouble watching the video, click here."

        If a large fraction of visitors click the trouble link, it tells you that they either can't or do not want to watch your video.

        Having said that, if the only way they should be reaching your squeeze page is by invitation, you might simply need to add instructions on how to select the inviter's picture to access the video.
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  • Profile picture of the author LetsGoViral
    I think it is pretty good design wise. A bit bland though. But overall it looks pretty solid to me.
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  • Profile picture of the author WD Mino
    I have a different take. You have a page on the internet. You wish to have people hopefully teachers sign up to said page.
    One problem is a teacher would look at that and think You need to go back to school:p
    Know your demographic. Target them with language and terms they understand. Don't have a youtube video that is private on a public squeeze page that makes you look extremely unprofessional and gives an impression there is an underlying motive which will scare folks off.
    The design is ok. you have no info about you or company.-Not a good sign to a ton of people. those are right off the top of my head.
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  • Profile picture of the author Dan Riffle
    Your headline needs completely reworked. While I'm not your target market, I don't see your headline getting teachers all jazzed up to try your product. What's in it for them? Will it make them better teachers? Will it make their job easier? Will it save them time? Think pain and pleasure. How will your product alleviate pain and/or increase pleasure?

    Again, I'm not the target so this may be a silly question: Are teachers aware of ESL games? Is this an area where they already have expertise or is this something new? If this is something new or a new twist on an old idea, consider playing up a more mysterious angle.
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    • Profile picture of the author ladida
      I think the biggest problem is your copy. There are other issues too but your copy is bad. You may want to consider hiring a copywriter to create it for you. It's not a lot of text so it should be reasonable.

      One way to go... The copy above the video could work to sell the video. Get visitors to watch the video. Ask a question and allude to an answer but don't answer. Instead, tell them to watch the video for the answer.

      Since I haven't watched the video (because it's not available) I can't speak to its effectiveness of message. I'll just assume that your video does a good job of selling. You, however, should make sure that's true. You're video - which takes up over 40% of the page and will offer probably 95% of the available information is, obviously, the most important part of that page.

      Much success to you...

      Cat Brown



      P.S. as far a design goes, it looks good to me. Nice and clean.

      P.P.S. Adding a number of testimonials below the video would be a great idea. It could further sell people on watching the video as well has help to sell the overall message itself.
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  • Profile picture of the author dv8domainsDotCom
    I would agree with double-checking the copy writing. You will want to be as spot-on with your grammar as possible, given your target market. No real suggestions from me, my grammar is terrible, even when I am paying attention.

    Testimonials might help, too.
    I am considering also what I think my own perception of your website's goal: get people (teachers) to sign up to the right, access the 5 videos, and buy.

    But if I were viewing the site from a teacher's perspective, I see nothing that makes me want to do so. I click the play button on vid to learn more, and the error on the video says to accept the sender's friend request? Well, that's pretty meaningless to me, so I click away.

    I think you are running into a sort of catch-22, in that they have to be invited by you to view the video, but you want to use the video as an aid to get them to sign up for your list so you can invite them to view the videos.??

    You might want to adopt a different strategy. First video on this page should sell your visitors on the idea that they WANT to sign up for the next 5, and at some point in the video after showing me how GOOD your product is, you need to TELL ME to sign up and re-enforce that it is the best thing for me to do.

    Your layout is simple and effective, and if you have an effective video I think you can do well with this with minor tweaks to what little text there is, but with the video private right now, I do not think you can or will go anywhere with it.

    Hope this helps somewhat,
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