Tried to play the video, apparently it's private.

Not an expert... But I think you may need that to work lol

Basic but crucial; Insert a footer on your site to make it look legit!

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I'm no wordsmith but considering the product you are selling... shouldn't hard work be two words? Also, "understanding of the meaning" doesn't sound right to me, should it not be "understand the meaning of"?

It might just be a UK vs US thing so don't take my word for it

I agree, the headline is a little too hard to read. I think it may be the font (is that impact?) or the red color, maybe try a blue or green. It might be easier on the eyes. Also, the title font is all one size. I think if you choose what the most important thing you are trying to get across to the reader and make that larger.

Another thing would be to reduce the title font and get the video completely above the fold. On smaller screens you'll make people scroll.

Good luck and keep at it!

Your squeeze looks professional but the headline is the big problem in my opinion. I don't know about the demographic of this particular market but you should try to write the headline in a way that it says clearly the most important outcome that teachers will get if they sign up/buy your product

Ok. Thanks guys. I will do some more editing on it tomorrow and try some of the suggestions that you guys gave me. thanks again.

I agree that the headline is a bit hard to read. Maybe its due to use of too many big words one after another. You may also want to add few pages like About Us, Contact Us, Privacy Policy etc. Finally I think you should add your name in the end to make the site look more legit.

Anup

looks like one of the generic templates from jvpress or optimusprimepress. It's kinda hard to screw 'em up but it's nothing special.

Yes, hard work... two words.

It is a very basic site that's for sure. Just looks like a squeeze page to me. I don't know how you plan to drive traffic to it. I guess maybe if you place a solo ad with an ezine you could get traffic to it.

I don't think SEO would work too well. There is not content on it.

However, no one's opinion counts but the customer's. Drive some traffic to it and see what your user's do. That's the only answer that really counts.

The site looks decent overall, but could be tweaked here and there for better visibility. However, the opt-in conversions are going to depend heavily on the content in the video, and since it's a private video I'd have no way of knowing whether this is something that would convert or not.

Paul

Your headline needs to be re-written for sure, it does not easily communicate what your offering. The font should be different, Impact works good when your using much less wording, but you have a paragraph.

You also need to be consistant with the words either being capital or small case. It's not a big deal to use small letters for "of" and words like that but you have done the same thing with other words as well, and it doesn't look right.

You probably should add a HTML DOC to your page?

The video is not working?

Maybe add some more footer text or links? A copyright would make your page look more professional.

ALL CAPITAL TEXT IS ALMOST ALWAYS A BIG NO, NO. It makes the text hard to read and it hinders the eyes from reading in a left to right flowing motion.

Other than that the video squeeze page looks good...

I think it is pretty good design wise. A bit bland though. But overall it looks pretty solid to me.

I have a different take. You have a page on the internet. You wish to have people hopefully teachers sign up to said page.
One problem is a teacher would look at that and think You need to go back to school:p
Know your demographic. Target them with language and terms they understand. Don't have a youtube video that is private on a public squeeze page that makes you look extremely unprofessional and gives an impression there is an underlying motive which will scare folks off.
The design is ok. you have no info about you or company.-Not a good sign to a ton of people. those are right off the top of my head.
HTH
-WD

Your headline needs completely reworked. While I'm not your target market, I don't see your headline getting teachers all jazzed up to try your product. What's in it for them? Will it make them better teachers? Will it make their job easier? Will it save them time? Think pain and pleasure. How will your product alleviate pain and/or increase pleasure?

Again, I'm not the target so this may be a silly question: Are teachers aware of ESL games? Is this an area where they already have expertise or is this something new? If this is something new or a new twist on an old idea, consider playing up a more mysterious angle.

I would agree with double-checking the copy writing. You will want to be as spot-on with your grammar as possible, given your target market. No real suggestions from me, my grammar is terrible, even when I am paying attention.

Testimonials might help, too.
I am considering also what I think my own perception of your website's goal: get people (teachers) to sign up to the right, access the 5 videos, and buy.

But if I were viewing the site from a teacher's perspective, I see nothing that makes me want to do so. I click the play button on vid to learn more, and the error on the video says to accept the sender's friend request? Well, that's pretty meaningless to me, so I click away.

I think you are running into a sort of catch-22, in that they have to be invited by you to view the video, but you want to use the video as an aid to get them to sign up for your list so you can invite them to view the videos.??

You might want to adopt a different strategy. First video on this page should sell your visitors on the idea that they WANT to sign up for the next 5, and at some point in the video after showing me how GOOD your product is, you need to TELL ME to sign up and re-enforce that it is the best thing for me to do.

Your layout is simple and effective, and if you have an effective video I think you can do well with this with minor tweaks to what little text there is, but with the video private right now, I do not think you can or will go anywhere with it.

Hope this helps somewhat,
-Kevin