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WARNING: This review is slightly biased, as this course has transformed my sex life very quickly. It is kind of difficult to say anything negative about it, BUT I will give you the lowdown, and everything you could possibly want to know about it, and if it is right for you. It may not be. All I can promise you is honesty. This is just one man's perspective.
I believe I have writing skills. I think I am a natural copywriter, that said I want to "pre-sell" this course NOT from my heels, or hidden.
Here is the beginning of my pending review. Is it ever done like this? Could this work? Could I tell the prospect upfront that I get a referral fee? Use classic salesmanship instead of a hidden "consumer review"? That I have a vested interest in this review. I am really curious to know what some of the more experienced warriors have to say, although all comments are cool. To me, the point of the review is to get them to click to the affiliate sales page, and to me the best way would seem to actually sell it. Out front.
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My name is JD. I really hate to sound all salesy, and use all that hype up there, but I know how important your time is. And I know if I did not catch your attention, you would just get bored and walk off. That said, ALL OF THAT IS TRUE. Those are my "wonderful" attributes. And so with your permission, I would like to introduce you to the course that transformed me from a fat, drunk, ugly loser...into a fat, ugly, drunk chick magnet! (I realize that you are probably NOT worse off than I am which just goes to show how ridiculously powerful this stuff can be)
WARNING: This review is slightly biased, as this course has transformed my sex life very quickly. It is kind of difficult to say anything negative about it, BUT I will give you the lowdown, and everything you could possibly want to know about it, and if it is right for you. It may not be. All I can promise you is honesty. This is just one man's perspective.
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