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Please Critique This Cancer Website

by KimBeckers
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Hi Fellow Warriors,

I need some help. I am working with a friend in developing a website for cancer awareness and prevention. Here is a link the site: http://beingcancerfree.com/

I am a little too close to this project and could use some neutral opinions and critiques for the site.

Currently there is only one product on the site but we are in the process of creating additional products. Is it best to have all products on one page with a link to the product sales page? Or is there a better way to do this? the products will be related and will probably be a series of short reports, mp3 files and such.

I am in the process of having the sales page re-written as it currently does not exist for all intensive purposes but would like some suggestions on the site in the meantime.

All constructive criticism is welcome as well as quotes for re-writing the sales copy.

Thank you and I look forward to your replies.

Kim
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  • Profile picture of the author ioksane1987
    loos good, and yes i agree, have your mother site, and link to all your seperate products maybe on the same site, or on different domains
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  • Profile picture of the author flnz400
    I like it! Who made the theme? I want one similar to that.
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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    My suggestion is to redo the youtube videos. The look to have been recorded in ambient indoor lighting, the audio it pretty bad, and the camera swims around. At the very least, get a couple of lavalier mics, run them thru a little cheapo mini-mixer from Radio Shack, and from there into the camera. And if you don't want to purchase a tripod, at least stabilize the camera on a ladder or something.

    Other than that, the page itself looks nice. A cleaner image in the upper left corner might help a bit.
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    • Profile picture of the author KimBeckers
      Originally Posted by write-stuff View Post

      My suggestion is to redo the youtube videos. The look to have been recorded in ambient indoor lighting, the audio it pretty bad, and the camera swims around. At the very least, get a couple of lavalier mics, run them thru a little cheapo mini-mixer from Radio Shack, and from there into the camera. And if you don't want to purchase a tripod, at least stabilize the camera on a ladder or something.

      Other than that, the page itself looks nice. A cleaner image in the upper left corner might help a bit.
      Thank you, which image is unclear?
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  • Profile picture of the author write-stuff
    Hi again, Kim. The picture of the couple. It's not terrible, but it is a little grainy. I'm probably more of a stickler than most, but it jumped right out at me.
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    • Profile picture of the author KimBeckers
      Originally Posted by write-stuff View Post

      Hi again, Kim. The picture of the couple. It's not terrible, but it is a little grainy. I'm probably more of a stickler than most, but it jumped right out at me.
      Thanks I had not noticed it. Like I said, I a little too close to this project, it is hard for me to pick out the flaws.
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