Can You Please critique my sales page?

the 'permanently cure your acne today!!' font is a bit hard to read at first glance. remember the Top of your page is where you make a good impression, and they need to skim somthing fast and read on, or might click the cancel button - but you need to test it.

The picture of the womans cheek is good - good results of before and after

Hi Yesacpow,

Firstly I think what you are doing is a brave and smart thing.

When you ask for feedback it can sometimes be harsh but also a great learning excercise.

I think that it looks fine but there are a few things I would change.

1.I do not like the font or the layout on your guarntee for one and there are a few other things but lets not focus on the negative instead I will give you a link to a sales page that I think you will find interesting.

IT IS NOT MINE I PROMISE. BUT I DO WISH IT WAS.

Wrinkle Cream - Anti-Wrinkle Cream - Anti-Aging Skin Care - LifeCell Anti-Aging

This sales page has been featured before on Warrior forum a long time ago and it struck me as being very clever.

It is in a health related niche which relates totally to your offer and I have promoted this and it does convert OK.

note the following things

1.Shocking newsworthy headline with a storry that tempts any reader.

2.free offer stated early with 100% money back

3.endorsed by a former director who I have never heard of but I do know all the big name celebrities she repesented? note all of those names are in Bold.
Would a readers brain connect those famous names with endorsing the product?I think they might.

4.A picture of an attractive blond who is easy to look at and all the product features are written on her face.

5.cosmetic surgeons,royalty,videos and funny stories.

I hope you can find somethings in this that help with your salespage.

PS: My signature link goes to my current W.SO launch and although I am far from being in this guys league I have used a few things from my 700 pages of notes about sales copy.

What an awesome subject that is and even if it did not pay real cold hard cash it is a game worth playing almost in the same way that a jigsaw is a challenge.

I wish you great success and think with your humble I want to learn more style you will go great .

Kind Regards

Paul

fellow student of the art of writing great copy.

Are you saying I should remove the 'download your copy now' image?

Or I should just add some add some text order link closer to the top?

I find your font hard to read- the font colour is not solid- or its a bit grey- strains the eyes. Definitely also change the font on the guarantee also, it is too hard to read.
I can't read the testimonials they are too small.
This line sounds weak, the call to action should be much stonger...
Buy today and do not be disappointed.
Overall the page is pretty good with a few changes- it made me wonder what the acne treatment product is? people might also want to know is it easy to find? is it expensive? and is it easy to use?

Seems Like I have a lot of work to do. Thank you guys for all your comments am gonna try my best and dot every eyes and cross every T's.

Who knows may a couple weeks my product may go to the #1 spot in clickbank. Hey don't laugh

am ganna work like an horse.......

More feedback is still welcome.

Thanks man am gonna fix that tomorrow. Its 2:30 am now so am gonna get some rest.