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Just Created My First Product - Views On My Site Please!?

by DigiTips
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Hi folks, been doing a bit of selling here and there over the years, and made a fair bit, but not been a member of this forum for very long!

Just created my first product, and would LOVE you to take a look at what i've done so far and maybe offer your skilled judgement on what you think of the front page and design, and how it could be improved. Im writing the copy as we speak, so it's work in progress, but am i heading in the right direction???

Much appreciated on your comments and thoughts on this thread.

Site and product is here:

ultimateresalepack dot com

(Can't posts links yet..sorry!)
#created #marketing #new product #newbie #prelaunch #product #site #views
  • Profile picture of the author Dimitrovski
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    • Profile picture of the author rosetrees
      If, and I say if, you are a legitimate member, posting a link to a site that tells us how to "legally Steal" PLR and MRR products is not a good way to start.

      If your site is legit I suggest you change its title and content. If it isn't - what can I say. Goodbye, you are the weakest link (UK TV programme!)
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      • Profile picture of the author Dixiebelle
        Originally Posted by rosetrees View Post

        If, and I say if, you are a legitimate member, posting a link to a site that tells us how to "legally Steal" PLR and MRR products is not a good way to start.

        If your site is legit I suggest you change its title and content. If it isn't - what can I say. Goodbye, you are the weakest link (UK TV programme!)
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        He was just asking for an opinion of his site, not a bashing. You seem to be really good at calling people out where rules and ethics are concerned.

        You need to first take a look at your own signature file. You are advertising your B&B, which has absolutely nothing to do with Internet Marketing. I wonder how long it will take Alan to notice that.

        Dixie
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        • Profile picture of the author rosetrees
          Originally Posted by Dixiebelle View Post

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          He was just asking for an opinion of his site, not a bashing. You seem to be really good at calling people out where rules and ethics are concerned.

          You need to first take a look at your own signature file. You are advertising your B&B, which has absolutely nothing to do with Internet Marketing. I wonder how long it will take Alan to notice that.

          Dixie
          Guess it wasn't only me that got out the wrong side of bed then!!!
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        • Profile picture of the author joblythe
          Originally Posted by Dixiebelle View Post

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          He was just asking for an opinion of his site, not a bashing. You seem to be really good at calling people out where rules and ethics are concerned.

          You need to first take a look at your own signature file. You are advertising your B&B, which has absolutely nothing to do with Internet Marketing. I wonder how long it will take Alan to notice that.

          Dixie
          Dixie

          Unfortunately you didn't see the "first draft" of his Sales Page - which, luckily, has been changed. You may have had a different opinion.

          I really think this thread is going nowhere! But I am! Bye Bye!
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          • Profile picture of the author DigiTips
            Originally Posted by joblythe View Post

            Dixie

            Unfortunately you didn't see the "first draft" of his Sales Page - which, luckily, has been changed. You may have had a different opinion.

            I really think this thread is going nowhere! But I am! Bye Bye!
            Which is the whole point of me starting this thread! Thanks to you guys i've changed the copy to reflect what was noticed, and what you thought was wrong with the copy..now that's what i call HELP!

            You've all been very helpful, which is what i was told this forum would be..without your comments above, my copy would have sucked eggs.

            If we all can't take a bit of criticism, what chance have we got in the future!?
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            • Profile picture of the author joblythe
              Originally Posted by DigiTips View Post

              Which is the whole point of me starting this thread! Thanks to you guys i've changed the copy to reflect what was noticed, and what you thought was wrong with the copy..now that's what i call HELP!

              You've all been very helpful, which is what i was told this forum would be..without your comments above, my copy would have sucked eggs.

              If we all can't take a bit of criticism, what chance have we got in the future!?
              DigiTips

              Thank you for taking everything in the spirit it was meant - and those first few comment WERE meant! No disrespect to you - but when anyone comes here with a few posts and asks advice on their sales copy which blatantly mentions stealing . . well . . . you've got the picture.

              All the best to you (and if you need any weather tips - - - phone the met. office! )

              Cheers!
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  • Profile picture of the author Captcha
    1. The site loaded very slowly for me, you might want to look into that.

    2. I can barely read the text on that red navigation bar

    3. Run it through a spell checker i.e. competetive is what you have there

    4. It should be 'We've Got' not 'We Got'

    5. Try putting in some bullets to highlight some main points, the text is very chunky

    I hope that helps
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  • Profile picture of the author rosetrees
    ........And to answer your original question.

    How about changing the title!! How about "How to get your hands on xxxxxxxxxxx legally"

    The sub heading in the red hatched area at the top is a little hard to read.

    I'm not a fan of long sales letters, so I like it short. But, it kind of gives up after the second paragraph. The last paragraph just kind of sounds as if you didn't know what to say next. But you said it's work in progress, so maybe that's the bit you are working on!
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  • Profile picture of the author DigiTips
    Thanks for that, much appreciated!
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  • Profile picture of the author George Montagu Brown
    Personally, I thought that the headline was excellent, 10/10 stuff
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