How Would You Improve It?

You may want to advertise in the Warrior To Hire Section of the forum instead...

Check out the competition... what are the price of the competition and what people get for that price.

You can offer free work in order to receive some reviews

If you want to threaten other warriors with urgency method... please don't do it in the first line.

Build some anticipation before... It's like flirting with a women. I wouldn't dare ask for more skin before telling her my name... maybe a bad example but I think you got me

Hope this help!

J

According to me you are a little bit on the higher side for the price. I am not trying to offend you in any way. Every marketer has the right to decide the value of his or her service. I am mentioning this based on the competition. I myself outsource articles and I find some very good native English writers for about $5 to $7 for a 450-500 word article. There are some very good writers here on the warrior forum itself who offer their service at the above rates.

To start off, I would change the font. You want to blend in with the forum, the transition from reading a regular thread to your sales thread should be smooth. This Serif font is annoying when you are used to reading Verdana.

Also, I read a lot about you but not so much about me.
I understand that you are an experienced writer that loves what she does but I want to see less 'I'-s in there and more 'You'-s.

Who is you prospect most likely to be? Is he an experienced webmaster that wants to outsources his writing? Does he know exactly what he is looking for regarding turn around time, quality and customer support?
If the answer is yes to all those questions you should be offering him a nice overview of your strengths on those departments. Because the prospect already knows what he wants, he wants to scan your page fast to see if your are offering it.

If your prospect most likely is a person that is completely new in the game then you should take his hand and take him on a story on how dangerous the outsourcing world is.
Tell him that he almost certainly will regret going with cheap writers from Fiverr that deliver semi-original work that needs proof reading and re-editing. After you said that, illustrate why you are different. Tell him that you are the real deal and that the only thing the prospect needs to worry about is placing and receiving the order.
Do this in a way you would write an article, with pop. Tell a story, sell a feeling of carefree outsourcing.

It seems that $10 is on the high side. If that is your price then that is alright but contrast that price to services that run higher prices. Say something like "Sure, you can get a writer with a Phd. in literature that specializes in your niche. Are you ready to pay $25 per hour?"
Perhaps you could answer the question before the prospect asks it. "Why would you pay me $10 per article if you can go to Fiverr and get an article for $5?
Fair enough, try it a few times. After you realize that their 'writing' is basically taking content from Wikipedia and rewriting it, you can still comeback and have me do the work the way you wanted it done in the first place. Of course, with the money you wasted you could have had me write multiple articles, or bought a beer or two."

Finally I would recommend that you put a few short testimonials in there. Each underlining a promise that you make.
For example, if you say something like "I have a turn around time that is similar to the blink of an eye (well 24hrs actually)"
Then underline that directly with a testimonial that confirms that claim. "Thanks Laura, I emailed you and within 5 hrs I received my article!"

So to sum this up.
1) Change the font, blend in with the forum
2) Less talk about you and more about the prospect
3) Determine who is your prospect, if it is a seasoned professional present him with facts and testimonials. If it is the newbie, take him by his hand and guide him through a world of terror with you being the light that brightens the day. Use your writing skills here.
4) Either lower or contrast your price. You are not overpriced, you are well worth it. If the prospect wants to blow his money he can go else where and crawl back to you when he is done.
5) Testimonials, ask you previous customers for reviews (I do it all the time) or provide some discounted review copies.

So I hope that made sense, it is 30 mins to midnight here and I am starting to see funny things in the corner of my eyes.

Good luck with your writing!

Regards,
Mark

Thank you for the replies and advice.

I changed the font to verdana. If I wanted to change the starting price to $5 my problem would be that the title cannot be edited to reflect this. How do I overcome this?