My first Landing page

15 years ago

What is the URL OR where we can have a look at your page? Anyways, by all means, you have made a start & thats a good thing.

Wish you all the best.

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Souldja

15 years ago

Oh God!!! My mistake!

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alkeys 15 years ago

Hi Souljah
Great start, it's attractive with the hearts. The headline however needs to be bold and create some curiosity to urge readers to submit information. It's a bit vague. It needs to relate to the problem you are trying to solve for the reader. Hope that helps
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omk 15 years ago

That looks good. Just increase the size of your pre-headline and headline. Since you want to hit a person's emotions, use a picture or two. For example you could use a stock image of a man and woman embracing etc.
Just fill the page out more. Right now, it looks a little bland and empty, but you're on the right track.
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Sudeep

Banned 15 years ago

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JustinDupre

15 years ago

Originally Posted by Sudeep

good work.
But add more content to make it long .Like reviews,anything which capture attraction of visitors.
but anyways very good if this is your first.
I am also thinking to make my first sales page

Yeah reviews and testimonials are good for landing pages! Great suggestion.

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ronywilliam

15 years ago

Add some more content to your page.
According to me, the background color is too light.
Otherwise, you did a great start.
Try looking at some other related products and you will get the idea..

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poweraff

15 years ago

Ok, i will give you a honest review,

IT'S AMATEUR you will not expect a high conversion rate with this clickbank
you need to attract and catch your visitors eyes
You need to have a focused and nice landing page so you can have a good Conversion Rate,

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manicman1 15 years ago

ablehosting....OUCH....nothing like a harsh reality sting to get a persons day going :_)

Souldja....at least you have started...you have something to work with... to massage and make changes to in order to make it even better...and I have to agree with all the others including able hosting....

check the spelling and the word flow...that is my suggestions
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Souldja

15 years ago

Ok, Big Thanks to all of you! I'll change it and then ask you later? I don't understand about hosting.. Please, explain

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manicman1 15 years ago

nothing about hosting...ablehosting was the name of the person above my last post...I was commenting to them at the first of the post then added my thoughts to their comments as well as the others previous

best of luck with your ventures my friend :-)
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- RhondaG 15 years ago
  
  I think you are off to a great start but like the others said it needs a little more "Pow" to it or something. I commend you for getting started and for asking for advice. Some people just "assume" it's right and go on to lose money. Don't take harsh words personal, you are heading along the right track.
  
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Souldja

15 years ago

Thank you very much

Every mistake is a new step to success

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blend 15 years ago

Make the background darker and make your bullet points stand out more!
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- Mahmoud Selman 15 years ago
  
  Very nice, I like it. Just make the ebook little bigger and dark background as other warriors said. Well done.
  
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Souldja

15 years ago

I've changed page. Is it better? But IE don't show me a subscription form! What can I do??

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doorkicker13

15 years ago

Something is wrong with your math.

These are just TWO romantic ideas you can start using right away*inside you'll discover 99 MORE WAYS to express the love for your partner in creative and unique ways.

Don't forget! There are more than 200 really hot ideas in my special newsletter!

You gave two examples, then said there is 99 left which would mean there are 101 ideas in the book. Then in the next sentence you say there are over 200 ideas.

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Souldja

15 years ago

Originally Posted by doorkicker13

Something is wrong with your math.

You gave two examples, then said there is 99 left which would mean there are 101 ideas in the book. Then in the next sentence you say there are over 200 ideas.

No, 200 is on my newsletter, I'll send people tips in every message, but ebook will be in first message

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Souldja

15 years ago

I've made changes. How it looks like?

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Zero

15 years ago

Originally Posted by Souldja

I've made changes. How it looks like?

Your opt-in form needs to be above the fold.

Also, your pre-headline says 200 special tips
Your ebook says 101 Tips. I know the 200 refers to the newsletter, but you need to sort that out. Confusion will kill your opt in rates.

Do away with that green background. It doesn't look very appealing.

You need a stronger headline.
You don't really need to say "About Ebook"

Do away with this imo:

Buy a packet of glow in the dark stars and stick the stars on the roof above your bed to spell out a message such as "I Love You" When the lights go down, your message will be revealed!

Want another? When you are in a romantic spot, ask your partner if she would like to dance. Place one earpiece in her ear and one in your own and enjoy your private dance floor.

This technique is particularly effective if the romantic spot you have chosen is somewhere where people would not normally dance, for example, the top of the Empire State building at sunset or on top of a mountain during a camping trip.

These are just TWO romantic ideas you can start using right awayinside you'll discover 99 MORE WAYS to express the love for your partner in creative and unique ways.

Replace it with a few really powerful bullet points - regarding the type of stuff they'll find inside the ebook.

Have your opt-in button say "Get Instant access" or something, that does alot better than just "Click here"

And this is a big no-no as well:
"

Please, don't forget to share with your friends! (Twitter Button in left corner)"

The writing is very hard to see, its too small, it is red, and your twitter button is in the bottom left corner which no one will ever look at.
Infact, i doubt you'll ever get any tweets, because it isn't visable, and its below the opt-in form.

You can put a retweet button on your thank you page or something.

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Jkhurramov

15 years ago

Be creative and ad more design to your landing page.
You can see my first landing page here.

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Fazal Mayar

15 years ago

I would suggest better designing and more content but its a great start for sure!

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terrencewan

15 years ago

Not Bad, but to be honest,
it is not good enough,
see my landing page,
and you'll know what i mean...

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windso0

15 years ago

what's the matter, i can't see the link

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Gadi

15 years ago

I'd remind people that it is FREE further down the page and also especially where you register

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June8

15 years ago

Well done....You had a nice starting ..

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corsleymaxwell

15 years ago

http://www.imarketingsolutions.com.au/landing-page

There is a big difference between a good landing page and a bad one: good landing pages make money, bad landing pages lose money!

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Souldja

15 years ago

Thanks to all!

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morninjoi

15 years ago

You have done well for a start, but you need to observe the opt-in rate and see which areas you need to tweak. There is no perfect landing page, so as time goes on you'll improve.

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Souldja

15 years ago

I followed all your advice and changed my LP, check it out please

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playtone

15 years ago

Good Start but i agree it is very very basic.

You are giving away a book of romantic ideas yet if they sign up you are give them a weight loss book, i personally dont get it.

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Lea Karana 15 years ago

Hi there

The thing that i didn't like the most was the pop up for the
"How To Keep Your Body Fit And Healthy"
The people that are going to that landing page are probably interested in ways to be romantic, but why are you having another topic there as a pop up?
To me thats just a turn off. Just my honest opinion.

Lea
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Souldja

15 years ago

Thanks, I was thinking about it.. Ok, I'll change..

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Souldja

15 years ago

Maybe in pop-up I should say smth like "Stop! Subscribe now and get more (or get a bonus)!" ?

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bross 15 years ago

Nice page, I would make it a little darker and add some reviews and more text. You`re doing great..
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Vlad Bacioiu

15 years ago

my opinion : you have to increase the title, should attract the eyes, it's good that you chose the yellow style with black writing but must be larger. Same design on ecover!(must be higher) hmm, yellow color is good but from what I saw is used more blue, white, black, red etc. Use arrows to add content for simply make me want to buy.Use a darker background. I suggest you try a combination of the background to have a dark blue, and important text(headlines etc) to have the red and black. Your page should look professional , more business look. Try to add a video or a business header or something professional.You follow the example of the above who have shown their pages

meaning, your page must have the "WOW" = high quality DESIGN + CONTENT !

sorry for my poor english.
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KLaAz0r

15 years ago

horrible, change the colors and make it look more professional

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Nikhil V Nair

15 years ago

Good start.

Keep your Call To Action(Get Instant Access) above the fold. It increases the opt-in rate.

Hope it helps

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DRO

15 years ago

I would not use a popup in the form of javascript (window.open) (its pre 2005 IMO) but a more subtle approach maybe using a lightbox or a optin form somewhere on the page as a Call to action (which you have, so adding that popup box is alittle redundant. Since the popup uses an external javascript, it becomes blocked by most browsers anyways, so half of the people will not even be able to see it.

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tbsweet52

15 years ago

Bigger text size for the heading

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travlinguy

15 years ago

It's pretty basic but still has some appeal. Start by using a bigger font for the headline. Put it in red and get rid of the yellow highlighting effect. That went out 10 years ago.

The book is also dated. It comes in thousands of PLR bundles and has a very low perceived value. If you want to catch fish (sign-ups) you need good bait. This one is a sleeper.

Your bullet points are spaced too far apart, tighten them up so they're one right under another. This will give you more space. You also need to make them more compelling. For example, instead of, "A unique twist to buying flowers" Try something like, Discover An Absolutely Awsome Idea For Buying Flower's That Will Blow Your Sweetie's Mind!

See the difference. Which is more exciting?

The background color is awful. It's a sickly yellow. Try pink or lavender or some other soft, romantic color.

Your optin box is too low. It's below the fold. People in a hurry won't even see it. Get it up higher.

One more thing: Create a Warrior Forum signature file and put the link in there.

Not a bad effort. Keep working on it, you'll get there.

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Souldja

15 years ago

Hi everybody!

Your advices were amazing, I've changed my LP again

. I think now it looks much better...
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