Landing page feedback

Don't know if it's my Firefox browser or not, but it was taking a long time to load. From what I saw, it looked nice, but the loading time might be a turnoff for the people you want to see it. I don't think the page was fully loaded by the time I clicked off of it.

1. You help businesses fire up employees so they make the business more money by being more productive and happy at work.

2. Yes I believe you could it looks like it's a monthly fee that people would pay for. I would setup an affiliate program that perhaps pays out 50% or more. You can have the affiliates promote something that either registers them for a webinar where you sell the service after walking them through the benefits and how you help them or you have them promote some sort of guide that they'd download after joining your list which explains to them how this benefits them

3. Affiliate program and buying traffic I could also see some media publicity might work well if you give out a tips on how to boost employee morale in a tough economy etc.

There are several issues with this page. It loads slowly. The flash up top is so slow it breaks up as it cycles.

If this is a lead capture page you need the optin box up above the fold. Don't make your visitors click to find out what onboarding is. You need to explain it right up front.

You have no headline so people will arrive to the page, look around and leave. There are too many sites to visit out there for guessing games.

Explain, Explain, Explain what you have.

On another note, the page does have some eye appeal but that's not nearly enough to keep people interested without fixing the other issues. Good luck.

You need to offer something in the optin box at the bottom. What do I get by putting my email there?

Also the "Find Out More" button is kind of useless there I think. It just opens a window to send an email, and hardly ever will anyone take the time to send you an email saying "send me more info". Maybe you could make it so that a click to that brings up a pop-up asking for an optin, and explain what I would get by entering my email. You can put a Contact link somewhere else for people that want to email you directly.

Great advice, I hadn't thought about highlighting the benefits of giving your email but it makes a lot of sense

I've amended to reflect some of the advice given above - let me know what you think

Thanks again

Yeah man, I didn't even know what this was. The headline is not clear.

The image itself is grainy.

The theme/page looks slick enough, but it doesn't matter because I'm not sure what to look at.

Most importantly, I didn't even notice there was an email submit until I came back here and read there was one.

You NEED to get that ABOVE THE FOLD and bring ATTENTION TO IT.

Good point thanks Avery

Nice looking clean design. Here's a few things to consider.

1. You are using up a lot of 'screen real estate' at the top with the main graphic and headline. You need to use that space much better, as already suggested, by including an opt-in box higher up the page.

Or, put something more compelling in there. For example, like an introduction video and a much snappier headline. Have a look at this site for example, Press Release Distribution, Writing and Marketing | Ravepress.com. It's a similar(ish) design but uses video and a short headline in the top section of the screen.

2. With regards your headline, although now it does convey a clearer message on what your service is about it doesn't really 'grab' my attention. The headline should convey a very powerful benefit and if you can present this as a 'problem' too, then it's very powerful.

For example, rather than just describing your service, try and state it as a 'problem'. My understanding is that:

It takes employers a long time to get employees up to speed and you have a way to shorten/half/reduce that period. And obviously the quicker they get up to speed the quicker they are more productive. And for example if that is a sales person, then the quicker they are making you money.

So a headline could be "How would you like to slash/half the time it takes new employees to become fully integrated & valued/money making employees?"

That headline is too long but hopefully you get the idea. Identify the problem the employer is having and then quickly identify how to solve the problem in a sub-headline.

4. The sub-headline should state how your service helps to solve the problem. At the moment I don't understand what 'Rusdens' is providing me i.e. the employer. Address that in the sub-headline or at worst make sure it's explained as high up the page as possible.

5. I'm sure you are on the case, but there lots of grammatical errors, missing full stops, etc in your copy. Go to Fiverr.com and do a search for 'proofread' and you'll find a number of people to do that for you. Or get a few other people to read over.


Hope that helps.

Thanks Paul, great advice

Looks great, very clean and orgranized.

Look's nice, can't really think of anything else to add as a few have already mentioned it.

Hmm it's a hard one to say really, I like it where it is but as well as being above? The way I would read it I think it's best below to be honest - As you wouldn't want to sign up your address before you know what it's for? Hope that help's?

when i looked below your big blue picture and was about to start reading it was a distraction seeing tons of seperate paragraphs in a weird order...make it more organized

Forgot one other thing...

If you have any testimonials, they should be added as a separate page.

Linda

I'm not saying anyone is wrong about the loading times, but i'm running Chrome and I have a 25mpbs connection from New York City - page loaded pretty fast for me, 2 seconds max really. I close it, tried it again and it was the same really.

I'll try again tomorrow and if it's any slower I'll update my post, but pretty reasonable for me.