Can you give any feedback on this sales page please?

by Rob P
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Hi All,

I'm just finding my feet in the IM niche having sdpent the last four years online in the education market. There is a big difference between the styles of sales pages for each market so I am hoping you can give me some feedback on my sales page. This isn't my first IM product but it is my first 'proper' go at entering this new area. Your thoughts and ideas for improvement most appreciated...

http://www.constanttraffic.net/constant-traffic

Thanks in advance,

Rob
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  • Profile picture of the author allenjohn
    Hi - I liked it. A couple of annoying typos (Proven and $40if). I also think you have undervalued the $40, you haven't valued the knowledge. I'd also have some sort of squeeze to capture the ditherers, maybe give a free sample away for a sign up. But all in all, very good....should start if off as a $7 WSO to strengthen testimonials.... regards Allen
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  • Profile picture of the author Cloudzz
    Hey Rob

    I would think about adding images of the people faces that are providing the testimonials, it makes it more personal then just a name at the bottom.
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  • Profile picture of the author meganwilliams141
    Great sales page. But I think it would be more effective if you'll put an opt-in box and offer them a free e-book in exchange of their email address. That way, you can resell them your product over and over.
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    • Profile picture of the author JustVisiting
      Originally Posted by meganwilliams141 View Post

      Great sales page. But I think it would be more effective if you'll put an opt-in box and offer them a free e-book in exchange of their email address.
      I think the OP has already done that looking at his sig. file
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    • Profile picture of the author HaroldD
      Very clear but it does need more pictures of the product and a video would be better.
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  • Profile picture of the author corsleymaxwell
    Excellent Rob!

    This is very helpful and valuable.
    I've learned a lot so much thanks!
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  • Profile picture of the author TroelsJepsen
    Looks nice. I like that you've used orange as headlines instead of the traditional red, that so many use.

    as some of the others already said, it would be nice with pictures on your testimonials, and a picture of your product somewhere close to the top.
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    • Profile picture of the author Rob P
      Thanks everyone. Hmmm I have no photos - if anyone wants to do a review.testimonial and supply a photo please pm me - I'll give you a copy.
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    • Profile picture of the author Rob P
      Thank you shireen. :-)

      I think the headline needs work. We're going to try a video on there too.
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  • Profile picture of the author LoganWinters
    I agree - add some images or pictures to grab the reader's attention. As it is, it is just a big block of text, which is not necessarily going to grab the reader.
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  • Profile picture of the author Rob P
    Ok Video has now been added. :-)
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    • Profile picture of the author mclark100
      Good job overall!

      The one thing I'd concentrate on is the headline(s), so that's what my comment will be about.

      In the 3 headings, you repeat the same idea (add new optins to your list) 3 times. This makes for a lot of copy, plus the font sizes and orange color made it tough for me to decide what the more important copy was.

      So what I'd do is this:

      Shorten the prehead (1st one) for the sole purpose of specifying who your readers are.

      Use the next headline as a way to communicate the primary benefit of your product and maybe make this one orange. Then it will be the biggest and different color.

      In the subhead (3rd heading), make it a black and a little smaller so it doesnt compete with your main headline.

      Also, I'd ditch the details (checklists templates, etc) - it's too early, and it sounds like work, which may dissuade people from reading further.

      Include the benefit of the benefit, so to speak. For example: (Just for idea sake)

      "this revolutionary list-building system runs on autopilot - so you can concentrate on running your business".

      Respectfully,

      Merrill Clark
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  • Profile picture of the author Claire Sharp
    Hello Rob,

    Not bad. I like it!.... Just a suggestion.... put some images to attract more clients, visitors or buyers.
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  • Profile picture of the author Rob P
    Thanks Merrill - awesome. Claire, there are images on! :-)
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