Constructive Criticism for a Not so Newbie

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Warriors!

If you can spare a moment, I would love some feedback!

My signature has a link to one of my newest sites - What are your thoughts, and how could I improve it?

I'm seeing some pretty positive results so far, but I think it needs a custom header. Any recommendations on where to go for good launch/pre-launch page header design?

Rock & Roll,
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  • Profile picture of the author ~kev~
    Opt in before the video is viewable?

    No content, no nothing but asking for personal information.

    The page screams of spam.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthew Shane Roe
    Agree with ~kev~

    Try creating a video offering information about the video they will get by opting in to your newsletter.
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  • Profile picture of the author 1million1
    More info on page, tell me more about what "tips" I'll receive for opting in.

    No need for an facebook and twitter icon on a squeeze page.


    Change the header, why is there a "60 second opt-in challenge"?


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  • Profile picture of the author Sandra Green
    Does your site work in Firefox? Just crashed on
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  • Profile picture of the author Mitchell Assin
    yes ... you might as well just write - SPAM as your title

    if you were trying to build a list from warriors you could of atleast put more work into it saying they would get a kick ass warriors gift in return

    or mabey offer some cool warriors videos to optin

    hope this helps


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  • Profile picture of the author jrodriguez315
    Show the video that will tantalize your visitors into opting in. There is nothing on the page currently that makes me want to provide my personal info.

    Good luck!
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    • Profile picture of the author Alexa Smith
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      Originally Posted by jrodriguez315 View Post

      There is nothing on the page currently that makes me want to provide my personal info.
      This ^^^ exactly.

      People normally expect something like a "free report", or e-book, or whatever, as the incentive to opt in. If you want people to opt in to your site just to watch a video, at least sell it to them by explaining why they'll benefit from watching it: at the moment, there's no incentive.
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  • Profile picture of the author New Atthis
    Originally Posted by Dirk0l0 View Post

    Warriors!

    If you can spare a moment, I would love some feedback!

    My signature has a link to one of my newest sites - What are your thoughts, and how could I improve it?

    I'm seeing some pretty positive results so far, but I think it needs a custom header. Any recommendations on where to go for good launch/pre-launch page header design?

    Rock & Roll,
    D
    If you have half a brain, you posted this sarcastically.
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    • Profile picture of the author Alexa Smith
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      Originally Posted by New Atthis View Post

      If you have half a brain, you posted this sarcastically.
      Which half, though? I'm no neurophysiologist, but I'm not clear to what extent left-brained people indulge in sarcasm ...
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    • Profile picture of the author Dirk0l0
      Originally Posted by New Atthis View Post

      If you have half a brain, you posted this sarcastically.
      Ouch amigo... ouch.
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  • Profile picture of the author Marketinghamster
    Look guys instead of just saying SPAM SPAM SPAM lets actually contribute with some possibly helpful and constructive criticism of this warrior's page. Now, when I look at that page, I think of Kim Roach and Traffic dashboard, exactly the same apart from the custom header, its even the same theme! However, unlike Kim, you have to opt in too view the video; instead, I would personally reccommend splitting the video into 2, so they watch the intro and then cut off the video before you reveal the method, asking them to opt in so as to view the rest of the video. This will significantly help your conversions and backend sales.

    Good luck with your project!
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  • Profile picture of the author mandom
    I have to scroll down before even seeing your opt-in before video message. Then I see that and immediately close the window because why would I provide my personal information before I even know what I might see?
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  • Profile picture of the author BridgetSielicki
    I agree with the above. There is also no clue as to what the site is about - you should include some copy on the page that gives the reader an idea what you are about, what you are selling, why they should opt in, etc.
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  • Profile picture of the author Dirk0l0
    Thanks for the feedback everyone! I was going through some technical issues and trying out a new theme. There are some page errors that I am working to fix!
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