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Opinions on my membership site Please!

by chayati
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Hello everyone, I have been a member here for 3 years but just recently become serious about IM 6-8 months ago. I was wondering if any of you would be kind enough to review my newly finished membership site. There are still areas which I still need to work on my site, but your input will direct me to the right course. Thank you.
Best Regards,
Cem Berkoz

Cooking Video Recipes
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  • Profile picture of the author Dennis Wagoner
    Hey Chayati,

    I think you'd have a neater looking sales page if you used straight HTML for the sales page and used WP for the actual member site.

    The actual sales copy doesn't quite flow yet. There are a few trouble spots that need ironing out.

    Some things in your copy simply don't sound right to me:

    "these amazing how to video tutorials that I’m going to expose to you will prepare…."
    …And more a breeze for you from this day forward—I guarantee it!
    That second line does not properly connect to the sentence above the list given.

    Read them with one line element only and you'll see what I mean.

    I think you're on the right track.

    Keep chuggin'!
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  • Profile picture of the author Damielle
    I definitely agree with Dennis Wagoner about using a HTML page for your sales page.
    It would look a lot cleaner and people wouldn't be as tempted to go to other areas of your site but just focus on whether to buy or not.
    You could still put links at the bottom of your sales page but they wouldn't be as distracting

    A quick tip for your headline: Capitalise the first letter of each word, its easier on the eyes. I see where you've done this for some of your sub headings but its very important for your main header

    Apart from that your content looks good and you just need to correct some grammar errors, maybe let a friend sit down and look at it. Its hard to pick up these errors when you're looking at your own writing.
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