I have been taking action

Just a couple thoughts...the video screenshot was really hard to read. I'm not sure what this page is all about. (I didn't watch the video, just going based on what I see). Also the "Register" with the $ makes me think it costs something. What am I registering for? You might want to add text there and entice them to sign-up....especially if they don't have computer speakers to hear the video, you don't want to lose them.

Maybe add a tagline in the empty space at the top that sums up what you are about and how you can benefit magicians in a sentence?

Just some thoughts!! HTH!
Jenn

I think the banner and video screen shot is too hard to read. In fact if it wasn't for Jenn's post about I wouldn't have realized it was a video -- thought it was just a banner.

Personally I'd calm down the images above the fold to make the page more readable and obvious at a glance.

Also, the video is really slow to load and since it pops up instead of just being able to view on the page, it takes even longer. I'd suggest a shorter in length video with a very clear image on the video so they know to click it to play the video (the play button was hard to see so if they aren't familiar with videos, they might not know).

The text down the left is a bit long. I'd break it up a bit more and use shorter sentences. Also consider bullet points for important parts.

You want people to look at the page and understand what it is you're offering them and why they should sign-up. Take a look at what you have now and see how you can better answer that so you can get more people to sign-up once they reach your page.

Thanks Jenn. I'm on it and am in the process of making those changes...Thanks for your input and advice...Im never one for the 'hard sell' but a catchy slogan as well as what yu suggest will make some changes...Thanks again I appreciate it
Regards

James

And thanks Al, Im on it as said above...I really appreciate your advice. Even more to work on now...

Don't think of it as a hard sell...think of it as directing them towards what they need to do on the page for you to be able to help them with this site! You need to direct them to sign-up so they can use the website, but if they get to the page and don't really know what to do, they are just going to leave.

Believe me, I'm probably one of the worst "sellers" out there but I've learned how to simply direct my website traffic to what I want them to do on the page. Specifically for a squeeze page like this, you'll lose them maybe forever if you don't get them on board with their name/email address right then.

Best of luck!

James,

Great that you are taking action.

My thoughts:
1) Your logo fills the banner ad. Not necessarily a bad thing, but I think it would be better if your logo was top left in the banner and not filling the whole thing.

2) The rest of the site should be "branded" accordingly, using the same color scheme in footer, header, etc. I think the footer and header should extend all the way across the page.

I know you are probably on a very tight budget right now, but I think design elements are so important. Everyone is preaching content, but the look and feel are so very important. You can get this fixed for under $250 probably.

3) I would tone down the graphics a bit... just my opinion... but the colors hurt my eyes.

4) Use secondary feedback on the Register Now button. It will increase conversions.

5) Don't talk about Fiverr. (Just my opinion.)

6) For sure... don't link to them... and if you must... open up a SEPARATE window. Clicking that link takes your visitors OFF your page.

7) Use "strategic" bolding in the body of your home page by bolding words here and there so that the eyes can "rest."

8) Use a font like Tahoma on the headline. Bold it and make it MUCH bigger.

9) As the others said... I could not tell that the image was a video. That needs to be fixed soon.

GREAT START! I am not trying to be critical, but you asked for feedback. You are doing something and that is great!

Wish you well.

Hi George, Ial of the advice so far, has been very heopful, positive and what I need to hear...I reckon I make things to difficult sometimes and get overcompicated with my designs...I have set aside the next hour or so until its all changed...A very big thankyou to you Al and Jen so far...got my work cut out for me...

Thanks again.

James

Hi fluffy,
Thanks for your input and advice, re 'eponymous' Im sure my dad imbued me with an incorrect sense of words...anyway, Im in the process of redoing it, along the lines of the advice I have graciously been given. Re fiverr and charging, Ill take that on board also and change accordingly.

What I was trying to do re fiverr, was leverage what is known about them, many uniques and lots of traffic etc, have those that subscribe or register understand what that sleightz could effectively do for magic that fiverr has done for the general marketplace...

I think I made too much a mention of it though...

Re the full site...I have the script etc, and gaining some ideas around traffic generation (the magic 'niche' is very peculiar) and dont want to open up an empty shop...and pay for vps hosting when its empty...

Ill have to look at that also. Thanks for all your advice, it really (as said above) is appreciated.

Best REgards

James

Does this have a registration fee? I got confuse with the dollar sign used as S. And maybe you should try to use clearer fonts? I get you want to have an edgy feel to your site and video but you could make it with a bit clearer font.

All of this advice is so good and helpful.I really think I made it far too complicated and am in the process of reconfiguring and designing... Ill also make it clear that there is no rego fee...Oh and thanks 'sbias' for your offer of helping with design...this sort of advice is what a people pay for and I really appreciate it all. Thanksyou sooo much.

James

Hi all...Ive spent the last hoour or so changing things around...still to put the 'blurb' in..but I think it looks better already. None of this would have been thought of, had you guys not provided constructive feedback. Thank you all so much...and seriously, the advice I received here would have cost money. I am indebted...

Thanks
James

There has been some good advice on here for you, and I hope that we are all helping. here as some things I thought might help.

1) Just like others have said, don’t mention fivver you are sending traffic away from your page BEFORE they have opted in
2) I think you could get to the point a lot sooner, remember you want to capture interest, and I was confused about what was being offered, or what you were expecting of me, and the only reason that I watched the whole video was because you asked us to. If I were a regular customer I probably wouldn’t have watched so long. (Remember a confused mind always say no, even if that no is to opting in)
3) I wouldn’t really mention admin fees BEFORE they opt-in I know that you are mentioning it as a way to get them to opt-in quicker, but if it was me and I heard admin fees, I would just leave the page. (being confused and then having money mentioned is not a good thing)
4) On the screen to your video you have “make money to from selling your magic” THAT should be your headline. That is absolutely clear on what your site is about.

Things I did like
1) I do like the graphics
2) The layout is really nice and I found it simple, read headline, watch video, share video (I like that) and opt-in
3) You really seem comfortable in front of the camera if that is you, and I really liked it.

shane_k

One final thing
What problem are you looking to solve?
I get the sense that you are looking to be kind of like eBay and be the middleman bringing together sellers and buyers, (and you get a small fee) am I right?
If so, I would focus on what problems do sellers have; Finding people to buy their products right?

And what problem do buyers have? Finding a product they want or will like.

As I watched your video again, I kept thinking about Dropbox.com the video they have on their site explaining their service. Have you seen it?
Here is the link www. dropbox.com
See how their video is little drawings. For your site, I was imagining a drawing of two stickmen one is a buyer, and the other is a customer. The buyer has a question mark above his head and you can explain how people wanting to sell their magic the main problem is finding people to buy,
Then there is a question mark above the other stickman (the buyer) and his problem is where to find the magic products he wants to buy, you can mention yea there are different sites out there where people can buy magic products, but they are too hard to find, they are in too many places, people (buyers) don’t want to spend all their time searching for the product they want, they want to just buy it. And sellers or creators of products don’t want to spend all their time placing ads everywhere, they just want to create or sell products
And you provide the solution for both buyer and sellers, having a place where the buyers know there are a lot of people who are looking to buy, and for sellers by having a ton of magic products in one place saving them from having to look for them all.
The tag line could be something like “Where buyers and sellers can meet...” or “Where everyone leaves happy..” and you have your two little stick men exchanging cash and both have little smiles on their faces.


I give you 100% permission to steal this idea. Lol

Shane_k

ThanksShane .Think I have seen the dropbox video. Thanks for the suggestion.

I've done some more work on it but more needs done. It's only to attract 50 magicians so that when 'the doors' open the site won't be empty...

Thanks again

James

At long last... Finger out, action taken, Inge made and it's finally online.

It is using fiverrscripts clone script. I've got a few members since soft launch( waiving admin fees till later in January which may help propagate site with content, sonar least something is there).

It will take massive promotion but it is very niche specific.

I'll be tweaking it as I go but at least... Finally it's up and online...

Thanks for all the advice here.

Gotta love this forum

James
Helping Magicians Make Money - Sleightz

One thing I would say would be to change the text colour for:

"Helping Magicians Make Money.
The Place to Learn Magic.
Buy. Sell. Have fun. "

at the top. Very difficult to read.

Good that you have it online though! Good luck!

Alasdair

You're right... The 'header' does need changing and that's one of the tweaks I need to get done... Thanks for having a look and commenting Much appreciated