First Ever Product Creation - Feedback Please??

IMO you need a header. Also, the pitch on top is garbled. What is the catch? Highlight only the MOST IMPORTANT text

yes, i know about the header, it was just the salespage and ebook i needed reviews on, next step is to have a minisite made for it. Thank you for your feedback!

dont worry too much on the ebook. most of the time it will be useful. Im sure youve put alot of effort into it. What you need is also a call to action. an order link in blue is good but you need more. talk about ordering have some arrows pointing at it etc , testimonials.... I dont like the idea of plr just yet. your gonna be short selling yourself. Maybe Master resale rights. have a link in the ebook back to your main website

In addition to the header, you also need a border around the salesletter IMHO, and I found the underlining on the headline distracting. I agree with Michael Nguyen: Your call to action needs to be better. Have a look at similar sites, or get a copy of Yanik Silver's Instant Sales Letters http://www.instantsalesletters.com/ to give you some ideas.

When you've got the site sorted, run a WSO to get some tesimonials.

Good luck!

I think it would do well as a product. Make it available to affiliates and on the webpage add images, testimonials, more color (highlights) and the "about us", "contact", "privacy" and "affiliates" pages. And, as a vegetarian student, I think there is a big market for it

I would also advise you to embed in your ebook backend money makers using affiliate links, or an offer for updates by subscribing to your list... etc.

Hey, I think it looks great! I'm going to mention a few things--not to be critical, but to help if I can. Yes, I'd get a graphic header. I'm on a Mac with Firefox and the text seems to run very close to the borders on the sides.

I would break the texts up with 2-3 images showing what some of the dishes look like. You want to make their mouth water before you ask for money!

There are just a few grammar typo thingies--nothing serious.

"...that's why The Vegetarian Students Cookbook contains over 25 delicious, easy to make and cheap vegetarian recipes that contain natures own natural cures for some of the worlds most common ailments!"

The word "students" needs an apostrophe as it is a possessive word. If you mean one student it should read "student's". If you mean many students (which I think you do) it should read "students' ".

Same with the word "natures", it should be "nature's"...
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"...stop diarrhoea in its tracks!"

diarrhoea is misspelled. It is "diarrhea".
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"Also, with your order today, we will also include FREE updates..."

Having two also's in the sentence is redundant.
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Anyway it sounds great!

HMMM

Always suprises me when someone goes down the cheap and quick route for a product instead of aiming at a target market with money, your a qulified chef and your selling to the tree huggers with no money.

Sell it to the tree huggers with pots of money...

Plenty of people in this target market who want not cheap and easy, but gourmet vegetarian recipes, if you sell this as gourmet recipes and highlight your cheffness (i know its not a real word) you Could actually make some serious money and raise your price and get a recurring income form it, by giving them 2 new gourmet vegetarian recipes every month for a year at $97 a month.

Video your self preparing the dishes as a bonus for upgrading, go throug hthe actual ingrediants with them, search out gourmet sources of ingrediants give them places to buy expensive herbs and health foods.

Retitle the book into several different designs and URL's gourmet vegetarin foods for growing teenagers... gourmet vegetarin foods for pregnant mothers... gourmet vegetarin foods for retired folks... gourmet vegetarin foods for (Insert a target market here) this could be spun out into a miriad of different markets with just small rewrites

JEEZ DONT BE SO KEEN TO SELL YOURSELF SHORT

Robert

PS here is a plan,, give the cheap and easy book away (rename it gourmet vegetarian dishes) and as soon as they download it, hit them with the upsell for $xx have 2 new and wondorous gourmet meals delivered to your inbox every week. Do the whole video yourslf preparing it let them smell the gourmeness (another made up word, but you get the message)