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Critique my landing page. comments needed

by monitorit
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Hi take a look at my acne landing review page and please post your opinion, its on Home as this is its temp home whilst being reviewed im currently enabling its new domain which is more relevant.

Thanks
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  • Profile picture of the author distinctionsforlife
    You need a better headline. I'm not sure what you've got even qualifies. How about something like:

    "Is is really possible to be acne free in 3 days?"

    Followed by yes it is.

    Then prove it to me. Testimonials would be best.

    "what it says on the tin"

    What does this mean?
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  • Profile picture of the author marcanthony
    Originally Posted by monitorit View Post

    Hi take a look at my acne landing review page and please post your opinion, its on Home as this is its temp home whilst being reviewed im currently enabling its new domain which is more relevant.

    Thanks
    I agree with everyone above my reply.

    You need a better headline...

    If that's a video, move it above the fold and swap it with your ebook on the left side of the page.

    Place a contact form to the right of your video- also above the fold...

    Place your ebook just under your contact form- also above the fold...

    Contact a web designer and upgrade your ebook/ecover graphic...

    The purpose of a landing page is to capture the visitors name and phone number only-not to make a sale. That said, eliminate the price and relocate it to your sales letter.

    Lastly, your background is too dark. Gray is fine but, consider a much lighter shade.

    I hope this helps...

    Have a wonderful day!

    Peace...

    p.s. send me a PM if you'd like a reference for an excellent web designer.
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    • Profile picture of the author jhongren
      Hi, good effort for the attempt. I think it would be good to model after successful landing page in your niche. You can find them from clickbank.com

      Cheers,
      John
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      • Profile picture of the author valerieSONORA
        Good start, but it needs some work to be more appealing.
        I would look at other review sites you like and get some ideas.
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        • Profile picture of the author monitorit
          I have edited my landing page please let me know what you think.
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          • Profile picture of the author Sarah Harvey
            Overall the text is the main problem on the site. There is no consistency.

            Bold text like that actually looks unprofessional like someone just did it on a free webhost.

            Get a nice font that is clean and consistent.
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            "Find the problem and provide the solution."
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    • Profile picture of the author LivingCovers
      Originally Posted by marcanthony View Post


      Contact a web designer and upgrade your ebook/ecover graphic...

      The purpose of a landing page is to capture the visitors name and phone number only-not to make a sale. That said, eliminate the price and relocate it to your sales letter.

      Lastly, your background is too dark. Gray is fine but, consider a much lighter shade.
      You have to do something about your ecover report. It doesn't look professional nor catchy. You can have a look at the ones in my portfolio,

      EcoversAlive.com: Giving 'Life' To Your Ecovers Like Never Before...

      and let me know if they are exactly what you'd like placed in your capture page. Matching headers are also included.

      Olatunde.
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