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First 26 pages of my Marriage ebook

by digimix
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We have made in my opinion the best marriage fixing product on the market.
Read the first few pages of our Marriage Ebook and tell us what you think.
Marriage Thermometer: Sample Pages Of Book
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  • Profile picture of the author geordie-coach
    Hi

    I only had time for a quick look and think there is a lot of text on the page. Personally I'd rather have more pages and have the paragraphs or text lines more spaced otherwise it can be a bit hard to read.

    I'll pop back and have another look at the content soon.
    regards
    Aly

    alysonsproat.co.uk
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    What you have is decent and could be improved a lot. For example, in the first sentence of the introduction you use the word 'we' without any reference to who 'we' are. Why not make your introduction a real introduction. A better approach might go something like this:

    Hi! Your authors and guides through the Marriage Thermometer are Mark and Lesia Gregory. We've been happily married for...

    From there, when you use the word 'we' your readers will have some biographical info on the two of you.

    Without going into great detail there are many other places where you could tighten up grammar and punctuation. You've got a pretty good book and with some polish you'd have an excellent book.

    If you'd like information on my proofreading and editing services contact me through my profile. Good luck!
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    • Profile picture of the author digimix
      Thanks,
      I appreciate the pointers I will make the changes you recommend.


      Originally Posted by travlinguy View Post

      What you have is decent and could be improved a lot. For example, in the first sentence of the introduction you use the word 'we' without any reference to who 'we' are. Why not make your introduction a real introduction. A better approach might go something like this:

      Hi! Your authors and guides through the Marriage Thermometer are Mark and Lesia Gregory. We've been happily married for...

      From there, when you use the word 'we' your readers will have some biographical info on the two of you.

      Without going into great detail there are many other places where you could tighten up grammar and punctuation. You've got a pretty good book and with some polish you'd have an excellent book.

      If you'd like information on my proofreading and editing services contact me through my profile. Good luck!
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      • Profile picture of the author DotComBum
        Nice graphics and sales page, that's a long book with hundred of pages, and your tag line 'Let us get your marriage steaming hot' is very catching too, good luck with your launch of your book
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        • Profile picture of the author digimix
          Thanks Dotcombum

          Originally Posted by DotComBum View Post

          Nice graphics and sales page, that's a long book with hundred of pages, and your tag line 'Let us get your marriage steaming hot' is very catching too, good luck with your launch of your book
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          • Profile picture of the author DotComBum
            Maybe you want to put a kind advise somewhere at the beginning pages to tell the readers to print out the book to read offline for best result as reading 100's pages on the computer can be tiring, just my 2 cents
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          • Profile picture of the author Jonathan 2.0
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            I was put off by the webpage because it looks very internet-marketing-ish (just a personal dislike) however your book looks brilliant. From what I can tell very professionally written and a great technique making them sign a declaration. I hope you don't mind if I use that myself.

            Personally I think the "we" part is OK because you go on to explain that you're a couple in the next couple of words. I'm not a professional writer mind so maybe the above suggestion is a good one.

            Even though I'm not married and don't plan to be any time soon I'm going back to read more because it looks fascinating and I'm sure I'll learn something. I'll post any constructive feedback if any comes to mind.

            And yeah best of luck with your launch. Looks like you've got a great product there and improving people marriages is fantastic.
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            • Profile picture of the author digimix
              Thanks for your feedback. I am honoured by your comments. Our aim is really to help marriages not just marketing (God knows I am not good at selling). What would make the website more appealing to you?



              Originally Posted by DotComBum View Post

              Nice graphics and sales page, that's a long book with hundred of pages, and your tag line 'Let us get your marriage steaming hot' is very catching too, good luck with your launch of your book
              Originally Posted by ZigZag View Post

              I was put off by the webpage because it looks very internet-marketing-ish (just a personal dislike) however your book looks brilliant. From what I can tell very professionally written and a great technique making them sign a declaration. I hope you don't mind if I use that myself.

              Personally I think the "we" part is OK because you go on to explain that you're a couple in the next couple of words. I'm not a professional writer mind so maybe the above suggestion is a good one.

              Even though I'm not married and don't plan to be any time soon I'm going back to read more because it looks fascinating and I'm sure I'll learn something. I'll post any constructive feedback if any comes to mind.

              And yeah best of luck with your launch. Looks like you've got a great product there and improving people marriages is fantastic.
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              • Profile picture of the author Jonathan 2.0
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                Originally Posted by digimix View Post

                Thanks for your feedback. I am honoured by your comments. Our aim is really to help marriages not just marketing (God knows I am not good at selling). What would make the website more appealing to you?
                My personal preference is a simple white background (or page) with a strong headline. I'm a big fan of less is more when it comes to designing websites. As an example I like the following website design for www.stopyourdivorce I haven't tested this though and perhaps having a professionally designed website with graphics would increase sales. After all your market is going to be a lot less exposed to internet-marketing-looking website design.

                I would definitely recommend testing a simpler one similar to the above example (headline and a picture or video of you happily together) because I've noticed a lot of very successful marketers and products going with that approach.

                Just my $0.02
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                • Profile picture of the author digimix
                  Wow, I am really hoping that my buyers do not think like that as I personally do not like overly blank white sheet looking pages (I tend to wonder why use the internet which is a multimedia home and not use its features) We have put a whole lot of time and money into making it look appealing but we may have to revisit our approach. Thanks again for your feedback, you have given me a lot to think about.

                  Originally Posted by ZigZag View Post

                  My personal preference is a simple white background (or page) with a strong headline. I'm a big fan of less is more when it comes to designing websites. As an example I like the following website design for www.stopyourdivorce I haven't tested this though and perhaps having a professionally designed website with graphics would increase sales. After all your market is going to be a lot less exposed to internet-marketing-looking website design.

                  I would definitely recommend testing a simpler one similar to the above example (headline and a picture or video of you happily together) because I've noticed a lot of very successful marketers and products going with that approach.

                  Just my $0.02
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                  • Profile picture of the author Jonathan 2.0
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                    Originally Posted by digimix View Post

                    Wow, I am really hoping that my buyers do not think like that as I personally do not like overly blank white sheet looking pages (I tend to wonder why use the internet which is a multimedia home and not use its features) We have put a whole lot of time and money into making it look appealing but we may have to revisit our approach. Thanks again for your feedback, you have given me a lot to think about.
                    Well if you've spent money and time on it and you like it then keeps it as it is. I doubt it makes that much difference anyway. Remember that was simply my opinion (I probably shouldn't have mentioned it) and for all I know your visitors my love your website design. I mean there's nothing wrong with it and it looks very professional. It's just that I've seen so many similar designs in Internet Marketing.
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  • Profile picture of the author Steveb2u
    I really do not care about the background color...but am glad to see this information being made available. If it saves one marriage it is worth it!
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