$25 prize for the best headline

by Kim Standerline 35 replies
Hi guys

I'm updating this site, (It's in a state of flux at the mo so I know its a mess and images etc are missing) www.membership-secrets.com

What I'm looking for is a headline, (the one there sucks) I want something catchy (obviously) to catch what I'm trying to say about my book)

I need to get this page rewritten within the next couple of days, and at the moment my brain is pea soup consistancy.

$25 to the one I like the best.

BTW scroll down and check out the really cool graphics, plus header etc. (that's graphicsgenie for ya)

Cheers
Kim
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  • Profile picture of the author JayXtreme
    How To Show Your People, Client's, and Subscribers That Membership Has It's Benefits!

    LOL.. that's probably too close to one of the major CC companies

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      • Profile picture of the author Marian Berghes
        Overload your bank account with money by having your own Membership Site ! A system made easy that will make you loads of cash !
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        • Profile picture of the author ErinJoi
          How about something refreshing... simplicity and honesty!

          "How to Make Recurring Income With A Membership Site" (Title)
          "A simple manual to make your site work for YOU" (Sub-title)

          And with a price point of only $37, you can gear yourself towards the "Book" crowd, not the people out there expecting to pay $67 or higher for some guru's opinion.

          I know, for at least myself, I am tired of everybody claiming to have the Newest and Greatest thing on earth for me to buy. Sure, I want a membership site, but what can you offer me that nobody else can? Why should I buy your product over other people's product? - That is what I am thinking anyway.

          Make your headline honest. Make me see your sincerity. Make me feel like I am getting information from somebody who has been there, done that, and is actually making money. We see those paypal screens everywhere... sure they are nice to see, but that is what YOU make. And YOU are the professional, right? What about the average person - what will we make? How long did it take you to get to that point? How much advertising did you have to do? Would the average person know how, or have the time to do the advertising you did?

          Why not make your ebook free, and offer a paid membership forum for updated information? Prove to them that what you are doing is actually working!

          Sorry - I don't mean to be Debbie Downer! I have just gotten to the point where I click off of normal sales letters. Everybody has one, and I just can't tell them apart anymore!

          One thing... you might have this on your "to-do" list since you are updating your site, but this sentence:

          If like myself you're in the business of making money from the Internet, then you may be wondering why the income stream you have been promised by all those "guru's" hasn't actually manifested yet.

          Is worded funny. How about this instead:

          "If you are like myself and in the business of making money from the Internet, then you may be wondering why the income stream you have been promised by all those "gurus" hasn't manifested yet."

          I know what it is like when you write, write, and write some more - it is easy to overlook those things.

          Good luck!
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      • Profile picture of the author Frank Donovan
        I'm a sucker for competitions...

        How about:

        SSSHHH...Don't Tell Everyone, But You're About To Discover The NUMBER ONE Best-Kept Secret In Internet Marketing..

        ..And Why There's Never Been A Better Time Than NOW For YOU To Start Your Own HIGHLY PROFITABLE Membership Site



        (tried to tie in with the graphics - which are GREAT btw)


        All the best with the book.

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        • Profile picture of the author Kim Standerline
          Originally Posted by Frank Donovan View Post

          I'm a sucker for competitions...

          How about:

          SSSHHH...Don't Tell Everyone, But You're About To Discover The NUMBER ONE Best-Kept Secret In Internet Marketing..

          ..And Why There's Never Been A Better Time Than NOW For YOU To Start Your Own HIGHLY PROFITABLE Membership Site


          (tried to tie in with the graphics - which are GREAT btw)


          All the best with the book.

          Frank
          I like this one, I can really work with it.

          Thanks everyone for your help, it was much appreciated.

          Frank I'm going to pm you to ask you for your paypal addy. (doncha just miss buy me a beer lol)

          Cheers
          Kim
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          • Profile picture of the author David Raybould
            Hi Kim,

            I'm always a big fan of headlines with some specifics in - something like:

            "How To Make $67,243 From A Single Membership Site That Takes Less Than 5 Hours To Set Up"

            Obviously you'd need to edit it so the details are correct, but I think it would work okay...

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          • Profile picture of the author MaskedMarketer
            Originally Posted by Kim Standerline View Post

            I like this one, I can really work with it.

            Thanks everyone for your help, it was much appreciated.

            Frank I'm going to pm you to ask you for your paypal addy. (doncha just miss buy me a beer lol)

            Cheers
            Kim

            That headline still needs to be tweaked. Needs to be more clear and specific of the benefit and of the ROI- Your entire offer should be in your headline and this would need to be expanded...
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  • Profile picture of the author Steven Fullman
    ...half done, I've got 3 of the main elements in there (quick, easy, money), I just need the 4th...
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