What's wrong with my squeeze page?

12 years ago

Hello David,
Remove the last bullet "+ Much, Much More………" and just add "and lots more" at the end of the "How To Skyrocket The Conversion Of Your Squeeze Pages" bullet.

I'm not really fond of alternately using bold for the bullets. So, rather make all bullets bold.

Your headline is too long, shorten it. Remove "start building list like they do." That'll shorten it at least a little.

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IulianP

12 years ago

Looks pretty nice.

What I would change is the red arrow pointing down. I would put 2 of them instead of one or I would make the one look bigger. It gives me the impression of empty around it.

That's all

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Nice work

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Content Traders

12 years ago

Seems pretty nice. Can you refer me any designer who designs professional squeeze pages here at warrior forum ?

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loi77 12 years ago

Originally Posted by Content Traders

Seems pretty nice. Can you refer me any designer who designs professional squeeze pages here at warrior forum ?

I built my squeeze page with OptimizePress because it is quick and easy without any technical skill.

If you are looking for web designer in WF, check out Warriors For Hire
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Andrew Simond

12 years ago

It is a nice design. it works!

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Benjam1n

12 years ago

I thought this was interesting - The Anatomy of a Perfect Squeeze Page Template | Digital Marketer

No affiliation at all by the way.

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loi77

12 years ago

Thanks for the great comments, I really appreciate it!

Keep them coming.

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DianaHeuser

12 years ago

David,

Maybe I am a cynic

but why are you asking for a critique on a squeeze page on a product that is promoting Squeeze Page Secrets?

Di

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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by DianaHeuser

David,

Maybe I am a cynic

but why are you asking for a critique on a squeeze page on a product that is promoting Squeeze Page Secrets?

Di

Thanks for your comment.

Yes, I did spend about 2 weeks to do research and write my free eBook. English is not my fist language and that's why it was taking me so long.

With the help of my personal coach, I do know a lot about how to create high converting squeeze pages such as:

- less is often more when it comes to squeeze page

- make sure everything is above the fold because 80 percent of the visitors don't scroll down

- no header graphic because it is distracting

- no animation, again it is distracting

- video is good but it can be harm conversion if it takes too long to load

- headline should be benefit oriented to lure people in. It is within the first few seconds that visitors decide to leave or stay depending on the headline. so headline is the most important factor for conversion.

- you must split test to find the best converting squeeze page.

- use white background because it is easier to read.

- Use black text with the exception of the headline to make it easy for readers to read.

- building relationship starts from the ebook that you are giving away. That's why I decided to write my ebook to connect with my subscribers instead of just using PLR. That first chapter is title "My biggest mistake" to share my failures so they don't have to make the same mistake.

- and much, much more.

So I do know a lot more than others. But I am constantly testing and I have a genuine desire to be better than what I am doing now.

That's why I am asking for fellow warrior's opinion. My squeeze page is already converting quite highly, but I want to do better. Especially with headline and bullets since English is not my mother tongue.

I believe we never stop learning and I can definitely learn more from the great people here in WF.

Any question please feel free to ask.

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DianaHeuser

12 years ago

Originally Posted by loi77

So I do know a lot more than others. But I am constantly testing and I have a genuine desire to be better than what I am doing now.

That's why I am asking for fellow warrior's opinion.

I believe we never stop learning and I can definitely learn more form the great people here in WF.

Good point

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loi77 12 years ago

Originally Posted by DianaHeuser

Good point

Thank you.

If there is anything that I can improve on please let me know.
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Cedevita

12 years ago

looks normal, nothing really catchy on it but maybe its better this way simple and easy

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loi77 12 years ago

Originally Posted by Cedevita

looks normal, nothing really catchy on it but maybe its better this way simple and easy

You're right. A simple squeeze page often converts the best.

I certainly hope that the headline conveys that benefits well.

Copywriting is a skill that I definitely must learn.
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AndrewStark

12 years ago

Hi David

It's just another optimizepress squeezepage, and it instantly turned me off.

To me you need to personalise the page and make it crystal clear what I'm getting in exchange for my email address. I could tell straight away it was a squeezepage, but is it a report, video, audio, who's list am I joining, is it a pre-launch?

By being specific you may get lower conversions, but the list you build will be of better quality.

Hope this make sense to you.

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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by AndrewStark

Hi David

It's just another optimizepress squeezepage, and it instantly turned me off.

To me you need to personalise the page and make it crystal clear what I'm getting in exchange for my email address. I could tell straight away it was a squeezepage, but is it a report, video, audio, who's list am I joining, is it a pre-launch?

By being specific you may get lower conversions, but the list you build will be of better quality.

Hope this make sense to you.

Thanks Andrew.

Yes it is OptimizePress because I don't have web design skill.

I agree, personalization would be great. Any examples that you can show me?

I was going to insert an image but I didn't want to have too many things on the page.

May be I should try an image of the ebook instead of the bullets, what do you think?

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AndrewStark

12 years ago

Here's a page I use for branding and list building
Squeeze Page

Even just getting adding your picture / name to the page somewhere is enough to start building trust between you and the new member of your list.

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paul nicholls

12 years ago

rather than write down everything that i do take some tips from my squeeze page

ive spent a long time testing and trying different headlines

it converts at between 40% and 55% when i send targeted traffic to it

here are a few important factors as to why

1. use a video, most people love videos and it proves that your a real person

2. use a few power words in the headline and use underline, quotes and capitals to highlight the important words

3. use the word free a lot. dont over do it but if your giving away something of value for free then drive it home that its FREE

4. i use numbers in the headline and in the bullets (numbers skyrocket your conversions)

with your page i would add some caps, quotes or/and underlines in your headline for power words

use the word free more

maybe add a video

i would not use that highlight

make your text stand out more above your opt in box its too dull

use numbers in your bullets they work much better

also saying they will increase it by 67% is a very bold statement

its not a bad squeeze page its ok but unless you send traffic to it and test it your not sure what it will convert at. It might even convert fairly well because some basic pages do better but you will have to send a few hundred peolple to it and test it

a good way to test your page is buy a couple of cheap click solo ads and find out that way

hope this helps and what ive mentioned above is what i recommend to change BUT... you must test otherwise you wont know where you stand

paul

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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by paul nicholls

rather than write down everything that i do take some tips from my squeeze page

ive spent a long time testing and trying different headlines

it converts at between 40% and 55% when i send targeted traffic to it

here are a few important factors as to why

1. use a video, most people love videos and it proves that your a real person

2. use a few power words in the headline and use underline, quotes and capitals to highlight the important words

3. use the word free a lot. dont over do it but if your giving away something of value for free then drive it home that its FREE

4. i use numbers in the headline and in the bullets (numbers skyrocket your conversions)

with your page i would add some caps, quotes or/and underlines in your headline for power words

use the word free more

maybe add a video

i would not use that highlight

make your text stand out more above your opt in box its too dull

use numbers in your bullets they work much better

also saying they will increase it by 67% is a very bold statement

its not a bad squeeze page its ok but unless you send traffic to it and test it your not sure what it will convert at. It might even convert fairly well because some basic pages do better but you will have to send a few hundred peolple to it and test it

a good way to test your page is buy a couple of cheap click solo ads and find out that way

hope this helps and what ive mentioned above is what i recommend to change BUT... you must test otherwise you wont know where you stand

paul

Thanks very much for your insightful suggestions. I really appreciate it.

Good to see that you are using OptimizePress. One fellow warrior commented that OptimizePress instantly turned him off. May be not?

I really like your squeeze page. In fact, I like it so much that I actually Opted-in. No wonder your conversion rate is so high.

I think video is a great idea. But English is not my first language, so I might to stick to one without video at this stage.

This squeeze page is already converting quite well with solo ad. With your help, I am sure I can make it a lot better.

Thanks again Paul.

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rickyork

12 years ago

All the best for your site. Start squeezing money into your pocket

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travlinguy

12 years ago

The main thing missing is credibility. Two things. Who are you and what have you done? Some reference to your background in the field needs to be there. The second thing is in your headline. Improving conversions by 67% is a bold claim. You need to have a brief example in there to explain what you're talking about. Good luck.

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ejunkie

12 years ago

Hi loi77,

You could do something like this.

[Page begins]

"I read it. Acted on it. And now I have my own list. I feel like a million dollar already!"

An incredibly simple squeeze page technique
that skyrockets your conversion by almost 67%!

How to build a list once, and profit from it over & over again!

You will learn what top internet marketers rarely share.

1. The Step-By-Step Secret To Setting Up A Squeeze Page That Coverts First Time Visitors Into Recurring Cash
2. How To Write Eye-popping Headlines That Drive Readers Straight Into Your Sales Funnel
3. Discover Which Psychological Triggers To Pull To Make Your Readers Want To Buy Rightaway
4. How To Write Bulleted Benefits That Haunt Readers Until They Take Action
5. Learn the Secret of Mixing The Right Elements To Convert Your Leads Like Crazy
6. And sheeeeeeesh! One Top Ultra Secret Tip That You Would Kill To Know

Act Now! You can finally build your own cash generating list within minutes!

[Page ends]

Let me know if it works.

P.S. Don't highlight the headline. Keep it bold & simple.
P.S.S. 67%? You would like the give a logic for it (preferably in your ebook)

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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by ejunkie

Hi loi77,

You could do something like this.

[Page begins]

"I read it. Act on it. And now I have my own list. I feel like a million dollar already!"

An incredibly simple squeeze page technique
that skyrockets your conversion by almost 67%!

How to build a list once, and profit from it over & over again!

You will learn what top internet marketers rarely share.

1. The Step-By-Step Secret of Setting Up A Squeeze Page That Coverts First Time Visitors Into Recurring Cash
2. How To Write Eye-popping Headlines That Drive Readers Straight Into Your Sales Funnel
3. Discover Which Psychological Triggers To Pull To Make Your Readers Want To Buy Rightaway
4. How To Write Bulleted Benefits That Haunt Readers Until They Take Action
5. Learn the Secret of Mixing The Right Elements To Convert Your Leads Like Crazy
6. And sheeeeeeesh! A Top Ultra Secret Secret Tip That You Would Kill To Know

Act Now! You can finally build your own cash generating list within minutes!

[Page ends]

Let me know if it works.

P.S. Don't highlight the headline. Keep it bold & simple.
P.S.S. 67%? You would like the give a logic for it (preferably in your ebook)

Oh WOW, you must be a great copywriter, right?

You creativity is amazing.

Thanks so much for your thoughtful suggestions. You have basically re-written the whole squeeze page for me.

I'll definitely take all your wonderful suggestions on board and implement them.

What can I say except THANK YOU, THANK YOU and THANK YOU!

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ejunkie

12 years ago

Thanks loi77.

I am a copywriter :-)

By the way, i wrote in a hurry and so there were some typos. I have edited them now.

Also read some of the above comments. There are some nice tips there as well.

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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by ejunkie

Thanks loi77.

I am a copywriter :-)

By the way, i wrote in a hurry and so there were some typos. I have edited them now.

Also read some of the above comments. There are some nice tips there as well.

It's an honor to have a professional copywriter giving me such great advice.

Thanks again.

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ejunkie 12 years ago

Originally Posted by loi77

It's an honor to have a professional copywriter giving me such great advice.

Thanks again.

Chill, buddy.

You are welcome.

And good luck with your list building effort.
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- loi77 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by ejunkie
  
  Chill, buddy.
  
  You are welcome.
  
  And good luck with your list building effort.
  
  Good to see your photo.
  
  May I know which part of the world you live in? Perhaps we can work together in the near future.
  
  I am in Australia.
  
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  ejunkie 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by loi77
  
  Good to see your photo.
  
  May I know which part of the world you live in? Perhaps we can work together in the near future.
  
  I am in Australia.
  
  I am based in Bangalore, India.
  
  Sure, let me know how can i help.
  
  Take care, buddy
  
  Thanks
  
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  loi77 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by ejunkie
  
  I am based in Bangalore, India.
  
  Sure, let me know how can i help.
  
  Take care, buddy
  
  Great! Keep in touch!
  
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loi77

12 years ago

Originally Posted by gman5432

very nice. Is it optimize press? If so how were you able to highlight text? I haven't figured out how to do that with optimize press.

Yes, OptimizePress.

You need to use html to highlight. Please see below:

Want To <font style="BACKGROUND-COLOR: yellow">Make Money Like The Gurus</font>? Start Building Your List Like They Do. My Simple Techniques Will Improve The Conversion Of Your Squeeze Pages By 67%!

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