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What do you think of this?

by jacob3o3
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I'm new to internet marketing and I've just made my first squeeze page. I was hoping to get some pointers from experienced marketers on how to make it high converting and any constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated

Here it is==> bit . ly/LgWhFy

Please tell me what you think
Thank You
  • Profile picture of the author matthewtc
    It looks fairly neat and organized. I would take out the autopilot part. That makes it too busy at the top and the flow of the sentence doesn't sound good. Read it out loud. The rest of it is neat and well laid out though.

    Nice job on connecting the page when leaving. This is a good tactic to get a person to buy something instantly. I like a larger filter to get sales but this def works sometimes.
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  • Profile picture of the author joseph7384
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  • Profile picture of the author CaseyB
    What may I ask is a squeeze page "rental"?
    I have not heard of this.
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  • Profile picture of the author oliverkan
    Some of your wording relies too much on cliches. The layout itself is nice and clean, not too pushy, but the wording is a bit of a put off.
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    • Profile picture of the author jacob3o3
      How could I improve the wording?
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      • Profile picture of the author contentwriting360
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        Hello Jacob,

        We understand that you need help in improving your sales copy.

        You may want to visit the 'Warriors For Hire' section, filter all those service providers to 'Content' and inquire to those who provide content writing services on how they can help you with your sales copy.


        I hope this helps.

        Originally Posted by jacob3o3 View Post

        How could I improve the wording?
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  • Profile picture of the author Randall Magwood
    Can you change the layout of your site if you wanted to? Is this even YOUR site? Your Alexa rank is around 10,000. Something tells me that if your traffic rank is that good, you wouldn't be asking this kind of question.
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    ==>> Free book reveals make money with affiliate marketing
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    • Profile picture of the author jacob3o3
      I made it off of 90secondsqueezepage . com and I'm renting it apparently.. I can change the layout only to the 4 other preset layouts available
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  • Profile picture of the author williamk
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    You need to improve your copy in my opinion. It would be better to hire a copywriter from WF.
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    • Profile picture of the author jacob3o3
      How do I do that?
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      • Profile picture of the author Ben Clemons
        I wish I made $1000 a day when I was new to IM. lol.

        But yeah, the squeeze copy could use a little work, and maybe have a screenshot of a video player to make them want to see the video more. There's a bit of html code you can use to pop up a message when they try to click to watch the video. You can tell them to opt-in in the message.

        Here is the code:

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         <div align="center"><a href="#" onclick="alert('Wait  just a second... just enter your email address in the box right under  the video and click the button that says Instant FREE Access to watch  the video.'); return false;"><img  src="http://www.website-address.com/images/video-screenshot.jpg"  border="0"></a>            </div>
        just change out http://www.website-address.com/image...screenshot.jpg with the actual URL to your fake screenshot. You don't have to use it, but it is something good to split test. hope that helps
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  • Profile picture of the author TheWrightWords
    Head to the Copywriting forum and look around, or visit the "Warriors for Hire" section -- you'll find lots of qualified folks that can help you move in the right direction!
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    Need top quality niche content to keep readers coming back for more? I'll provide 100% original, magazine quality content so you can focus on what you do best!
    PM for samples and rates.

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  • Profile picture of the author rayrayjetson
    not bad but try putting more info
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  • Profile picture of the author AndrewStark
    Very generic, so this will only work on newbie internet marketers.

    When I join a list I want to know who I'm dealing with, and what I'm going to get in return for my email address. The type of people you will attract will be looking for push button solutions that give instant results with no work, but on the plus side they may be daft enough to buy a solution from you for $47

    Personalise the page more, and improve your lead magnet. Create your own material rather than just creating a new squeezepage to give away one of Russell's videos.
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  • Profile picture of the author career21st
    jacob3o3

    There is no perfect solution. We may fall, just pick up ourselves and learn faster the next time. Sometimes we may get confused because of 'the help' coming from all directions.
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