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Reviews Needed for New Product + Sales Page

by sap147
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Hey guys, I am nearly finished with my product and sales page, just need to work on the affiliate tools. It is in the health niche. The niche is something you have never seen before, it is an alternative health therapy that WORKS, I use it daily. I need people to review the sales copy as well as the product itself. I welcome any and all advice.

Oil Pulling Secrets - Benefits, Tips, and Better Health.

BLOG

www.oilpullingsecrets.com/blog

is the site, PM me for product.
#needed #page #product #reviews #sales
  • Profile picture of the author DEERFARMER
    Hey Im just a nobody,but even nobody's have opoinoins right? The first thing is I think you should change the fonts. something bigger, I wear glasses and the fonts you used were more difficult for me. Also I didnt care for the pale green . My 2cents. for what its worth. Good luck to you.
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  • Profile picture of the author absolutelee
    I generally liked the sales letter, but the fonts were killing me. Also, the part that is red was 1) way too hard to read because red and green are complementary colors and 2) it was way too long. I think you could shorten it by about half and still grab your reader's attention.
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    • Profile picture of the author sap147
      thanks for the advice, I shortened the main headline and changed font to verdana.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mike Hill
    No offense but the only reason I mention this is because this has helped me out a great deal with my ad copy...

    Get a copy of Scientific Advertising by Claude Hopkins (Google it and you'll find a free copy). read that book and as you read take notes of ideas you can implement into your ad copy and even your offer.

    Trust me, if you do this it will help a great deal.

    Mike Hill
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    • Profile picture of the author mwazwi
      This is a great thread and I was impressed by your courage in exposing your creativity to people you don't even know. I was also impressed by the genuine sincerity of those who responded to your request with kindness yet truthfulness. Just by reading this thread, I could feel the support of all those encouraging you in your success.

      Thank you for the thread, and I thank all those who responded. It confirmed my belief that there are still GOOD, POSITIVE, ENCOURAGING, HELPFUL, and KIND people out there.

      Marcia Mercy
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    • Profile picture of the author sap147
      Originally Posted by Mike Hill View Post

      No offense but the only reason I mention this is because this has helped me out a great deal with my ad copy...

      Get a copy of Scientific Advertising by Claude Hopkins (Google it and you'll find a free copy). read that book and as you read take notes of ideas you can implement into your ad copy and even your offer.

      Trust me, if you do this it will help a great deal.

      Mike Hill
      Found the book, reading it now.. thanks for the advice.
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  • Profile picture of the author prashie91
    hey.

    1) there is no reason why you shouldn't include this list in your sales page itself.

    Thank You

    2) halfway down your page, I've noticed that your paragraphs are just toooooo big and wordy. break them down man..

    3) "I know, You Are Probably Wondering How This Oil Pulling Works, Right?"

    you never addressed this question. people will want to know how it works. you wouldn't be willing to buy something if you had no idea how it worked right?

    Honestly, overall the sales later isn't that great. In fact, you could actually improve it tremendously. But guess what? The fact that you chose to put it out there straight away rather then try to perfect it shows that you are among the few who actually take action!
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  • Profile picture of the author activetrader
    Originally Posted by sap147 View Post

    Hey guys, I am nearly finished with my product and sales page, just need to work on the affiliate tools. It is in the health niche. The niche is something you have never seen before, it is an alternative health therapy that WORKS, I use it daily. I need people to review the sales copy as well as the product itself. I welcome any and all advice.

    Oil Pulling Secrets - Benefits, Tips, and Better Health.

    BLOG

    www.oilpullingsecrets.com/blog

    is the site, PM me for product.

    Ok, this is the first time I hear about oil pulling. If I was in the market for this type of product, the name would not tell me anything. What exact health problems have been solved by using your product?

    You have nice design, but I don't pay attention to the design when I buy informational products. By the same token you can have crappy design, but a killer copy.

    First off, get rid of the pop up. It's annoying. It's the first thing that greets a visitor before they even get a chance to find out what your site is about.

    Secondly - You need a killer headline. Your headline says nothing to me. Where is the benefit? Why do I need your product?

    A better headline would be something that delivers benefit and is also shocking. Start with the benefit. Think about your customer. What does he or she want? Does she want to pull oil or does she want to solve her health problems?
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    • Profile picture of the author sap147
      Yeh, seems others have mentioned the headline is weak, I will work on it, thank you.

      pop-up is gone, guess I will just stick with the opt-in box in the sales letter.
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