Please Critique my Blog

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Hi Warriors!

I made a sales blog selling a golf product. I would love it if you could tel me what I need to do to make it better.

Thanks!

Matt

HERE IS MY NEW BLOG
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  • Profile picture of the author ragstworiches
    Hey I had a quick look, I'm not really up on golf, but I would say the subheading could be a bit more snappy.

    Your images could be improved if you round the corners, this can be done for free at roundpic.com

    Also some kind of frame for the video would be good.

    On the plus side, I think the content and the colour scheme looks good.

    Hope this helps.
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  • Profile picture of the author mscherrah
    Hey, Thanks alot! I am going to go in and tweak it not.

    Matt
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  • Profile picture of the author Teresa Coppes
    I'm not a golfer but is there another way to say "your swing"? In your first paragraph the use of your swing becomes repetitive. Anyway to say it differently?

    Sorry I'm not much help. Overall I think it looks good and the color scheme works with the product.

    Good luck.
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    • Profile picture of the author kimkitch
      Nice and clean looking blog but the only thing if I was nitpicking would be the fact that I cannot read the words swing better in the subheading because of the trees.
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    • Profile picture of the author Droopy Dawg
      Originally Posted by Teresa_C View Post

      I'm not a golfer but is there another way to say "your swing"? In your first paragraph the use of your swing becomes repetitive. Anyway to say it differently?

      Sorry I'm not much help. Overall I think it looks good and the color scheme works with the product.

      Good luck.

      yeah I noticed that too... must be the main keyword... :confused:

      Great looking site though.
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  • Profile picture of the author aekaplan
    How do you plan to market this blog?
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    • Profile picture of the author mscherrah
      I am marketing it through article, youtube, metacafe, and others.
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      • Profile picture of the author Mikeman
        I would end your article with a stronger call to action...simply adding the words "CLICK HERE to learn more about The Simple Swing >>" would help.
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