Is this article well-written?

by Socialbakers

Posted: 12 years ago 9 replies

INTERNET MARKETING

Hello warriors,

here is an article about 20 most interesting social network and I thought that I might post it her so you can read it and give me some feedback - what did you like about it, what didn't you like, what could be done better, and everything that might cross your mind.

Article: The 20 Most Interesting Social Networks - Socialbakers

* I have already posted this article here, but in a different thread regarding different article and I though it might deserve its own thread.

#article #feedback #socialbakers #wellwritten

Joseph Robinson Banned 12 years ago

As with the referred to "other article", the article is blandly written and the information is basic and repetitive. The writer's grammar and syntax leave much to be desired. Overall, it reads very much like an FCAT Writes essay, and not a very good one at that.

Sorry.
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- Alexa Smith Banned 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Bien Nino
  
  Perfect grammar is no longer a requirement
  
  I agree.
  
  Breaking the rules of grammar to make things easier to read is fine. I often start sentences with the word "and" or "but", myself.
  
  But this article apparently breaks them for a different purpose and makes the text clumsy and harder to read!
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  As with the referred to "other article", the article is blandly written and the information is basic and repetitive.
  
  This.
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  The writer's grammar and syntax leave much to be desired.
  
  This.
  
  Even the first sentence (which kind of "matters", in a long article!) is terribly clumsily written, with poor syntax and punctuation. That's going to put most people off. It won't put off professional writers like Joseph and me, because we've seen it all before and are used to commenting on it, but it will put off exactly the "ordinary readers" to whom articles like this are supposed to appeal, because it's hard to read.
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  Overall, it reads very much like an FCAT Writes essay, and not a very good one at that.
  
  I don't know exactly what FCAT is, but I can imagine. And I agree with this, too.
  
  It's not an article which anyone is ever going to read and say "Wow, I must share this one with my readers/visitors/subscribers", is it? Ok, maybe it's not intended to be that, I appreciate, but I'm afraid it's boring, and it's still a missed opportunity, even if that isn't the intention
  
  People who know anything about social media aren't going to learn much from it, and people (like me) who know nothing about it and are open to learning something aren't going to be interested enough to read it attentively. You perhaps think I'm making a federal case out of a petty inquiry, but the reality is that plenty of them won't even get past the first sentence.
  
  Originally Posted by Joseph Robinson
  
  Sorry.
  
  Yes indeed ... this, also.
  
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  Joseph Robinson Banned 12 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Alexa Smith
  
  I don't know exactly what FCAT is, but I can imagine. And I agree with this, too.
  
  Florida Comprehensive Assesment Test. It's our state's standardized test, and the 10th grade essay portion (FCAT Writes) in particular is an important graduation requirement. My senior year of high school, I worked as a student assistant in the guidance office. Students would come in from time to time with practice essays, and I would critique them. The OP's articles read much like those. A "here's a prompt, you have 45 minutes to write about it and see what sticks" kind of mentality.
  
  It's a damn shame to see the writing style showing up more and more on the internet these days, but hey, "no child left behind". Uses all of remaining willpower to not go off on a political rant concerning the education system in the United States.
  
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Bien Nino 12 years ago

If you don't mind me saying, it does sound like it's some sort of essay. You need to liven it up a little. Don't be afraid to make some mistakes (except when quoting someone). Imagine yourself talking to your audience. Perfect grammar is no longer a requirement, a bit of "slanguage" is what catches people's attention. Hope I was of help. ~ Oh btw, this is my first post here at warriorforum. Please be gentle.
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Elle Davies 12 years ago

Faaaarrr too formal for an article about something that is supposed to be fun! Let your sense of humour out!!
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Troy_Phillips 12 years ago

When does article reviews become a vehicle for "check my site out" or a fresh backlink?
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Socialbakers 12 years ago

I created this thread, along with other, just to see the feedback from you. I have posted here a similar thread to this, asking for a feedback on an infographics we did and it seems like the infographics is appealing to people.

Regarding these articles, we are still working on a concept of how to write them. That's why I'm creating these threads -> to receive feedback from you - experienced warriors - and to improve the form of the articles - what could be done better, etc.

We wrote these article before I created these threads just in order to see, what could be done better and if we can somehow improve them.

Just to tell you something, based on a feedback from one user, we are currently changing a form of one article we wrote.
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- JohnMcCabe 12 years ago
  
  Beyond the structural and style problems already addressed, this article suffers from the same thing the last one did.
  
  It does not do anything to address the needs and desires of your target audience. Don't just give a boring blurb about 'what' the network is, tell me why it matters if I'm interested in using social media to advance my business. Or tell me why a particular network does not matter in advancing my business. That could be just as important in using my resources effectively.
  
  The articles on your site need to serve three functions:
  
  Capture the attention of your ideal prospects.
  
  Position your company as industry leaders and reliable experts.
  
  Possibly enhance your visibility in the search engines. I put this one last on purpose.
  
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TomYevsikov 12 years ago

I am by all means NOT A WRITER, but from the point of view of a reader, I had a hard time reading this article, I can only guess why, but something needs to be improved.

BUT, I did enjoy the content within the article
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